Eduardo's Thoughts in my Mind
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Comment from adewpearl
you keep its tune as if it were a lost music - I just love that imagery :-)
What a thoughtful poem about the passage of time
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your lines
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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you keep its tune as if it were a lost music - I just love that imagery :-)
What a thoughtful poem about the passage of time
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your lines
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your help and interest in my poor words. Blessings
Comment from Gungalo
You keep its memory
you keep its tune
as if it were
a lost music
a forgotten sound
that it has seemed alive
brighter than crystal
within a dream
which you cannot tell anyone
when you wake up
neither to yourself
as it is made
of nothing.
Alchera you have written a thing of real beauty here. If only we could do this for real.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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You keep its memory
you keep its tune
as if it were
a lost music
a forgotten sound
that it has seemed alive
brighter than crystal
within a dream
which you cannot tell anyone
when you wake up
neither to yourself
as it is made
of nothing.
Alchera you have written a thing of real beauty here. If only we could do this for real.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your help and interest in my poor writing! Blessings from Italy wishing you all the best!
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Stop saying that. Your poor writing is better than some here. LOL.
Comment from Candyjean
A year does seem a long time, and a day but a whisper. They move so fast for me now, I loved your poem, very thought provoking.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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A year does seem a long time, and a day but a whisper. They move so fast for me now, I loved your poem, very thought provoking.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your interest in my poor writing and review.
Comment from Earthwriter
seems far more like prose then poetry to me i think it is well expressed although it tends to streams like a meandering observation. didn't understand the neither to yourself reference at all.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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seems far more like prose then poetry to me i think it is well expressed although it tends to streams like a meandering observation. didn't understand the neither to yourself reference at all.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your interest!
