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Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi bill, The dialect is perfect for this one. I know people that speak like that. Storyline is awesome and I can understand why this one won. Congrats a wonderful story. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Hi bill, The dialect is perfect for this one. I know people that speak like that. Storyline is awesome and I can understand why this one won. Congrats a wonderful story. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Judy Couch
I loved your use of the dialect of the person speaking. The story was well written and easy to follow. There is nothing that I would have wanted to be different.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I loved your use of the dialect of the person speaking. The story was well written and easy to follow. There is nothing that I would have wanted to be different.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this.
Comment from mshirachot
Loved this story!!!! The vernacular you've used is perfect. I am currently "reading" a book on CD called "Forevermore" that is done in similar style. We have a vernacular all our own here in southern Ohio and also use a plentiful amont of idioms.
Best wishes for the contest entry!!! Most excellent writing.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Loved this story!!!! The vernacular you've used is perfect. I am currently "reading" a book on CD called "Forevermore" that is done in similar style. We have a vernacular all our own here in southern Ohio and also use a plentiful amont of idioms.
Best wishes for the contest entry!!! Most excellent writing.
Blessings to you!
Marsha
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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That you so much for the terrific review and high rating.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Well done on nailing the prompt to a tee. Also liked the vernacular as it created more depth to the character, especially the narrator, which is exactly what you want to achieve with a one person narration.
There was no spelling errors that I could detect, but that is part of writing in the vernacular.
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Well done on nailing the prompt to a tee. Also liked the vernacular as it created more depth to the character, especially the narrator, which is exactly what you want to achieve with a one person narration.
There was no spelling errors that I could detect, but that is part of writing in the vernacular.
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind, thoughtful, and encouraging review.
Comment from marion
Hi there
I enjoyed your story. great use of the required words, they fitted well into the story. I like one chicken lost - that died it its sleep! Well done. Congratulations in the contest. Marion.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Hi there
I enjoyed your story. great use of the required words, they fitted well into the story. I like one chicken lost - that died it its sleep! Well done. Congratulations in the contest. Marion.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this.
Comment from Bobbi22
This well written story seems so real, like a child talking directly to you telling of his experience of the storm with Gramps. Great line relating this story to Auntie Em in The Wizard of Oz -->I heard blew Emma and Ben Gale's house over the rainbow. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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This well written story seems so real, like a child talking directly to you telling of his experience of the storm with Gramps. Great line relating this story to Auntie Em in The Wizard of Oz -->I heard blew Emma and Ben Gale's house over the rainbow. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from vapros
Five stars for a pleasing recollection of an exciting day in the life of a youngster. I trust you have done the style and vernacular expertly - I can't quite locate it. I'm aware that some manual labor was required on the keyboard to bring the story to life. Country folks are special, wherever. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Five stars for a pleasing recollection of an exciting day in the life of a youngster. I trust you have done the style and vernacular expertly - I can't quite locate it. I'm aware that some manual labor was required on the keyboard to bring the story to life. Country folks are special, wherever. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from elliejean
I love the old fashioned language. I love the way the story is about life in the back woods.The boy was not scared. I think his Grandpa had a lot to do with that. Great work.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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I love the old fashioned language. I love the way the story is about life in the back woods.The boy was not scared. I think his Grandpa had a lot to do with that. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is such a great story, I enjoyed the way you wrote in the local dialect in that region, it made it far more interesting. You used the words well and created a great story. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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This is such a great story, I enjoyed the way you wrote in the local dialect in that region, it made it far more interesting. You used the words well and created a great story. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from adewpearl
Good use of dialect
you set the stage well in your opening paragraph
excellent descriptive detail
you create an atmosphere of impending danger well
love Grandpa's assessment of the damage LOL
and hey, if a hen has to die, why not have it for dinner? ;-) Brooke
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Good use of dialect
you set the stage well in your opening paragraph
excellent descriptive detail
you create an atmosphere of impending danger well
love Grandpa's assessment of the damage LOL
and hey, if a hen has to die, why not have it for dinner? ;-) Brooke
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this. Bill
