Little Poems
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6 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I just dug into your attic and found this tiny poem that I had missed. Bathroom humor is right, but it works since most of us can relate. I hope the poem did well in the Senryu contest--I'm sorry the picture was deleted. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
I just dug into your attic and found this tiny poem that I had missed. Bathroom humor is right, but it works since most of us can relate. I hope the poem did well in the Senryu contest--I'm sorry the picture was deleted. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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Thank you Joan. It was just an old outhouse. It must have been a Fan Art Image. It the photographer doesn't pay their dues, their images disappear when the account is closed.
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Thanks for the explanation for why FanArt images disappear. -J
Comment from Lovinia
Great 't' alliteration in your first line. Very funny satori line. Would you consider "such pressure overwhelms" or something like it to avoid the use of 'ing' which is usually considered a 'no-no' for senryu? Though it is just my thought, and is not mentioned in the rules of the contest. Great presentation! Definitely a fine contender for top rating in the contest. Good luck. Lovinia
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
Great 't' alliteration in your first line. Very funny satori line. Would you consider "such pressure overwhelms" or something like it to avoid the use of 'ing' which is usually considered a 'no-no' for senryu? Though it is just my thought, and is not mentioned in the rules of the contest. Great presentation! Definitely a fine contender for top rating in the contest. Good luck. Lovinia
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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I'll have to remember that. Your suggestion only has a 6 count., but i guess that would be under 17 syllables. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello and good humor. This is lucky because stress can cause the opposite effect of constipation. Good luck in the contest and cheers.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
Hello and good humor. This is lucky because stress can cause the opposite effect of constipation. Good luck in the contest and cheers.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you Benjamin.
Comment from MAMONIA
Maybe bad, but totally hysterical! I think it
is great. You did a wonderful job with this senryu.
It's supposed to be a play on words..and go..is
appropriate.
Great pic to go with your words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
Maybe bad, but totally hysterical! I think it
is great. You did a wonderful job with this senryu.
It's supposed to be a play on words..and go..is
appropriate.
Great pic to go with your words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thank you Marie, never do too well in contest, so thought this might get better attention. Though I am blushing!
Comment from October21
Woah. This is so funny and full of humour. Enjoyed the double meaning as they both made sense and love the joyful artwork. It's so cheerful and uplifting and great use of the form:-)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
Woah. This is so funny and full of humour. Enjoyed the double meaning as they both made sense and love the joyful artwork. It's so cheerful and uplifting and great use of the form:-)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thank you. Trying to get the hang of this stuff.
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow thats quite a picture lol loving this contest some great entries but yours is my favourite so far thanks my friend gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
wow thats quite a picture lol loving this contest some great entries but yours is my favourite so far thanks my friend gazzagodbod
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2013
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Thanks. There were some good ones. It was fun. Thank you!