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Comment from Shirlena
Nice work for a first try at this style poem. The repetition really drives home the point and the expressions in between have a great deal of substance, speaking honestly about what it takes to really love.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2012
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Nice work for a first try at this style poem. The repetition really drives home the point and the expressions in between have a great deal of substance, speaking honestly about what it takes to really love.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2012
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A very nice review. Thank you!
Comment from Jornee
I thought it was very good even though it took me a minute to understand it's my fault not yours. I really like the theme that the greatest love is one that endures so true.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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I thought it was very good even though it took me a minute to understand it's my fault not yours. I really like the theme that the greatest love is one that endures so true.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you Jornee
Comment from EMB
This poem covers quite a bit when it comes to what it takes to have a love that lasts. Beyond the passion and tender moments, it takes so much more for a love to survive life's many challenges and tests. This was a very comprehensive poem in that regard, and I really enjoyed it.
Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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This poem covers quite a bit when it comes to what it takes to have a love that lasts. Beyond the passion and tender moments, it takes so much more for a love to survive life's many challenges and tests. This was a very comprehensive poem in that regard, and I really enjoyed it.
Well done.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you Edward, sounds like your speaking from experience. So true!
Comment from Black_Oxygen
The greatest love is a love that endures
That comes through Heaven to Hell and right back
For better or for worse two pledge and track
The greatest love is a love that endures
That takes the heat of stress and doesn't crack
When health and marital problems attack
The greatest love is a love that endures
That comes through Heaven to Hell and right back
I really like your Love poetry. The rhymes are good and the
flow is easy to read. Thank you for your creation.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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The greatest love is a love that endures
That comes through Heaven to Hell and right back
For better or for worse two pledge and track
The greatest love is a love that endures
That takes the heat of stress and doesn't crack
When health and marital problems attack
The greatest love is a love that endures
That comes through Heaven to Hell and right back
I really like your Love poetry. The rhymes are good and the
flow is easy to read. Thank you for your creation.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you for this nice review.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
I'm impressed. A new form that you seem to have managed quite well. This form is very interesting. Your verse is lovely and well written, as always. Thought provoking. Love the message . Robin :)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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I'm impressed. A new form that you seem to have managed quite well. This form is very interesting. Your verse is lovely and well written, as always. Thought provoking. Love the message . Robin :)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you Robin. It Is a pretty good format. I had fun. I did screw up and had 8, 9, and 10 counts until Gungalo told me they had to be the same, so I changed them all to 10 counts.
Comment from Gungalo
The greatest love is a love that endures
That takes the heat of stress and doesn't crack
When health and marital problems attack
A fine triolet and 10 syllables to the line. Beautiful and full of a love that has seen and endured much.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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The greatest love is a love that endures
That takes the heat of stress and doesn't crack
When health and marital problems attack
A fine triolet and 10 syllables to the line. Beautiful and full of a love that has seen and endured much.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thanks for the great review, and the heads up on syllables.
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No problem. Smiling at you.
Comment from trimple
This is a super tribute to love and all that it entails.
As I read my thoughts are that this would have made a good sonnet with a few extra syllable.
For eg. The greatest love is love that does endure giving 10 to each line and perhaps taking out a couple here and there.
In many lines you do use the 10 so I automatically picked up the rhythm then kept loosing it. However this is just my heady thoughts on otherwise a smashing piece of poetry.
Kindest regards Trimple :)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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This is a super tribute to love and all that it entails.
As I read my thoughts are that this would have made a good sonnet with a few extra syllable.
For eg. The greatest love is love that does endure giving 10 to each line and perhaps taking out a couple here and there.
In many lines you do use the 10 so I automatically picked up the rhythm then kept loosing it. However this is just my heady thoughts on otherwise a smashing piece of poetry.
Kindest regards Trimple :)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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You thoughts are intriguing, but I didn't intend this for that, but may take that track in the future. Thanks for the review and thoughts.
Comment from H Darwin Reeves
Well said. I think of us who have been married for any length of time can certainly relate to your thoughts. You've done a good job at communicating the ups and downs that a marriage goes through and yet can--and should--survive. Thanks for posting this. Keep recording your thoughts.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Well said. I think of us who have been married for any length of time can certainly relate to your thoughts. You've done a good job at communicating the ups and downs that a marriage goes through and yet can--and should--survive. Thanks for posting this. Keep recording your thoughts.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much H Darwin Reeves for your thoughts as a fellow veteran of marriage.
Comment from eberry4
"The greatest love is love that endures"! I couldn't have said it better. You have many wonderful lines, "A love that bridges lif's prevailing pains" is another. I enjoyed your writing very much. Good luck in the contest and congrats on 38 enduring years...Eydie
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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"The greatest love is love that endures"! I couldn't have said it better. You have many wonderful lines, "A love that bridges lif's prevailing pains" is another. I enjoyed your writing very much. Good luck in the contest and congrats on 38 enduring years...Eydie
Comment Written 29-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thanks eberry for the wonderful review and encouragement.
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You betcha"!...E
