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Comment from hopeflys
I really like reading your poem. The words flowed beautifully together and I really enjoyed reading your work. Hopeflys 0:D
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2012
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I really like reading your poem. The words flowed beautifully together and I really enjoyed reading your work. Hopeflys 0:D
Comment Written 30-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much.
Comment from eberry4
A really adorable poem. It's a cute, thoughful way to reminisce. ( I have no idea if that is how you spell that). What is it about our own kids that do make other's "sag"? No one feels about your child like you do and we should SHOUT IT OUT. Way to go with this poem....Eydie
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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A really adorable poem. It's a cute, thoughful way to reminisce. ( I have no idea if that is how you spell that). What is it about our own kids that do make other's "sag"? No one feels about your child like you do and we should SHOUT IT OUT. Way to go with this poem....Eydie
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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You exuberance is lovely. Thank you.
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YOu're welcome....E
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the heartwarming story in both your poem and notes. I enjoyed your use of alliteration and appeal to our sense of sound, along with your rhyme scheme in these quatrains. (I think in stanza two, line three, "are" should be "is".) I liked the way you presented the photograph too. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Thank you for sharing the heartwarming story in both your poem and notes. I enjoyed your use of alliteration and appeal to our sense of sound, along with your rhyme scheme in these quatrains. (I think in stanza two, line three, "are" should be "is".) I liked the way you presented the photograph too. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Thank you Joan. You are correct. I fixed it.
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Thanks for your gracious response--glad I could be helpful. -J
Comment from 9999pool
A very touching story of daughters especially now that they are grown up. How time flies. With some loved ones gone, the young getting old and more births to come. Life just goes on and we cannot think too much about life anymore. We just follow the wave and the crowd. Very good imagery for all our children. Excellent write and heartfelt and made of happy moments. Lucky Triesel. Cheers, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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A very touching story of daughters especially now that they are grown up. How time flies. With some loved ones gone, the young getting old and more births to come. Life just goes on and we cannot think too much about life anymore. We just follow the wave and the crowd. Very good imagery for all our children. Excellent write and heartfelt and made of happy moments. Lucky Triesel. Cheers, Ritchie.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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I'll bow to that review, thank you.
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Welcome. Always a pleasure reviewing your poems on varying topics that never runs dry, LOL. Cheers.
Comment from elliejean
I LOVE THE PICTURE. I LOVE THE POEM. A CHILD CONCEIVED IN love IS DEFINITELY WORTH BEING BORN. You TWO MADE THE RIGHT CHOICE.The love you showered her with was certainly good for you too. Great work on the poem and with the girl.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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I LOVE THE PICTURE. I LOVE THE POEM. A CHILD CONCEIVED IN love IS DEFINITELY WORTH BEING BORN. You TWO MADE THE RIGHT CHOICE.The love you showered her with was certainly good for you too. Great work on the poem and with the girl.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Very nice. Thank you so much, elliejean.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of rhyme and internal rhyme
love your use of the fanciful verb kerplop
great descriptive detail
good alliteration in tickle her tummy
milk-dabbed chin - add the hyphen
my opinion of other kids sag - my opinions sag
What a wonderfully appreciative and celebratory portrait of your daughter - I am betting she cried for a half hour after reading this :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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excellent use of rhyme and internal rhyme
love your use of the fanciful verb kerplop
great descriptive detail
good alliteration in tickle her tummy
milk-dabbed chin - add the hyphen
my opinion of other kids sag - my opinions sag
What a wonderfully appreciative and celebratory portrait of your daughter - I am betting she cried for a half hour after reading this :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Thank you Brooke, yes she did. She loved it.
Comment from EMB
This is a wonderful poem that should really bring a smile to readers who know the joy of having a baby girl, but I'm sure sons can do the same. These are the words of every proud parent. No other child can ever compare to our own, right? Of course not, and that poem illustrates this fact so well.
Nicely done, my friend. :)
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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This is a wonderful poem that should really bring a smile to readers who know the joy of having a baby girl, but I'm sure sons can do the same. These are the words of every proud parent. No other child can ever compare to our own, right? Of course not, and that poem illustrates this fact so well.
Nicely done, my friend. :)
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Thank you Edward. Spoken from the heart!
Comment from Fluffyhead
I know what you mean. Feel the same way about my nephew. I don't like the circumstances he was born into , but I am glad he is here and love his puffy dandelion hair and his squeeky little voice.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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I know what you mean. Feel the same way about my nephew. I don't like the circumstances he was born into , but I am glad he is here and love his puffy dandelion hair and his squeeky little voice.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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There you go! Sounds like a nice nephew. Thank you for the review.
Comment from nurendi
A lovely poem, and a true representation of the bond between mothers and their children, with each verse capturing another aspect. Very well written.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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A lovely poem, and a true representation of the bond between mothers and their children, with each verse capturing another aspect. Very well written.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Thank you nurendi
Comment from Harbans
Wow, you really must be so proud of your daughter. After reading your poem, how I wish I had a daughter too. But children are so innocent and cute when they are young.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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Wow, you really must be so proud of your daughter. After reading your poem, how I wish I had a daughter too. But children are so innocent and cute when they are young.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012
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True the teenage years were Hell, but still worthwhile. Thanks for the wonderful review.
