A Little Viking's Tale
A rhyming short story for children122 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
I enjoyed your poem about Eric as I am sure children would.
Nice way to relay an important message. No preaching just an interesting little example that kids should understand.
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I enjoyed your poem about Eric as I am sure children would.
Nice way to relay an important message. No preaching just an interesting little example that kids should understand.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from justatuna
This was truly excellent. Great flow and rhyming scheme. Didn't trip at all. Really enjoyed the message. Like how you ended it to make it work on different levels. Very well done.
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This was truly excellent. Great flow and rhyming scheme. Didn't trip at all. Really enjoyed the message. Like how you ended it to make it work on different levels. Very well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Gloria ....
Eric what a lovely verse for children. My neighbor's cat's name is Eric the Red, so I totally relate. Darned explorers.
I especially loved this verse in the middle:
Eric didn't know what he should think
He saw things he hadn't seen before
He saw cars that go zoom... buildings that loom
And saw a stop sign that he couldn't ignore
Can't ignore a stop sign or else you get a hefty ticket.
Keep writing.
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Eric what a lovely verse for children. My neighbor's cat's name is Eric the Red, so I totally relate. Darned explorers.
I especially loved this verse in the middle:
Eric didn't know what he should think
He saw things he hadn't seen before
He saw cars that go zoom... buildings that loom
And saw a stop sign that he couldn't ignore
Can't ignore a stop sign or else you get a hefty ticket.
Keep writing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Soledadpaz
A delightful story in a poem. Seems like Eric did some time traveling. Those Vikings did get around, looking for their Valhalla. You should turn this into a picture book.
Sol
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A delightful story in a poem. Seems like Eric did some time traveling. Those Vikings did get around, looking for their Valhalla. You should turn this into a picture book.
Sol
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Cedar
I love the story you tell in this piece. It is perfectly rhymed and it flows smooth, which makes it very easy to read. I'm sure the children will enjoy this one, I did. Bill
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I love the story you tell in this piece. It is perfectly rhymed and it flows smooth, which makes it very easy to read. I'm sure the children will enjoy this one, I did. Bill
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Glasstruth
The picture's a great match flor your story-poem. I think children would get a kick out of this. The rhyming and flow moves it right along smoothly. Wonderfully written! Les
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The picture's a great match flor your story-poem. I think children would get a kick out of this. The rhyming and flow moves it right along smoothly. Wonderfully written! Les
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Keeper Tony
A fantastic piece of poetic writing here Eric with a great message weaved into it. I am a strong believer in defeating obstacles which stand in my way no matter how difficult it can be, and to read this type of thinking in verse which children are going to obviously read is so commendable. Nicely done. Thoroughly enjoyable.
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A fantastic piece of poetic writing here Eric with a great message weaved into it. I am a strong believer in defeating obstacles which stand in my way no matter how difficult it can be, and to read this type of thinking in verse which children are going to obviously read is so commendable. Nicely done. Thoroughly enjoyable.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from anarchist12
Wow.. what a wonderful job you did crafting this poem .. If i had a child i would totally be reading this to him or her... excellent work crafting this .. I'm sure the kids will enjoy
thank you for sharing...
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Wow.. what a wonderful job you did crafting this poem .. If i had a child i would totally be reading this to him or her... excellent work crafting this .. I'm sure the kids will enjoy
thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
Comment from Bayberry
The children should love this engaging little poem offering an important lesson to learn. The picture complements the tale very well. It is a super posting all the way.
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The children should love this engaging little poem offering an important lesson to learn. The picture complements the tale very well. It is a super posting all the way.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
A very cute story here with a good moral. I say story, because I think it would make a marvelous one, interspersed with rhyming poetry. What you have written here is excellent for children, but a bit ragged in the rhyme in places and very ragged in the rhythm. It is also quite long, and the little ones have trouble staying with it and the parent reading it might get frustrated trying to sort out which syllables to emphasize and how to get them to fit into one rhythm. Kids might not notice as much, but they do notice and prefer what I call clappable rhythms which are steady and predictable. It helps them to learn the words. That said, you might try to fix it all up and sail with it, or try it as a story with the verse interspersed for effect and see what happens. Good effort here and with a bit of a nudge, I think it could be great
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A very cute story here with a good moral. I say story, because I think it would make a marvelous one, interspersed with rhyming poetry. What you have written here is excellent for children, but a bit ragged in the rhyme in places and very ragged in the rhythm. It is also quite long, and the little ones have trouble staying with it and the parent reading it might get frustrated trying to sort out which syllables to emphasize and how to get them to fit into one rhythm. Kids might not notice as much, but they do notice and prefer what I call clappable rhythms which are steady and predictable. It helps them to learn the words. That said, you might try to fix it all up and sail with it, or try it as a story with the verse interspersed for effect and see what happens. Good effort here and with a bit of a nudge, I think it could be great
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your input it is greatly appreciated
