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Comment from Solacium Mariae
Wow. If I had 7 stars, I would give it you. What an incredible poem (and it's your first attempt).
It's simply beautiful.
A rhyming pantoum where it all makes sense together--that's a task. Mine don't rhyme. I think that would take more planning, no?
I really love the capitalization throughout.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Wow. If I had 7 stars, I would give it you. What an incredible poem (and it's your first attempt).
It's simply beautiful.
A rhyming pantoum where it all makes sense together--that's a task. Mine don't rhyme. I think that would take more planning, no?
I really love the capitalization throughout.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Wow! You humble me with the glowing rating. Thank you so much!
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My honor.
Comment from Gianinas
I enjoyed the picture of your daughter and grandson. Happy belated birthday for him, and many more ahead. I read a couple of pantoums, on this side, but I still have to write one. Yours is very endearing. One can almost feel your grandfather-ly pride, exuding out of the computer screen. The pantoum format helps underline that.
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I enjoyed the picture of your daughter and grandson. Happy belated birthday for him, and many more ahead. I read a couple of pantoums, on this side, but I still have to write one. Yours is very endearing. One can almost feel your grandfather-ly pride, exuding out of the computer screen. The pantoum format helps underline that.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much
Comment from Soledadpaz
What a lovely tribute for your daughter and grandson. That must have been a truly happy moment for you and your family. The poem flows smoothly and the repetition makes it sound lyrical, like a song.
Sol
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What a lovely tribute for your daughter and grandson. That must have been a truly happy moment for you and your family. The poem flows smoothly and the repetition makes it sound lyrical, like a song.
Sol
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Sol
Comment from juliedickson55
Good job on your pantoum poem of childbirth and capturing the feelings of the new mother. I remember them well.
"labor-worn mother" Oh yes...
I like the repeating lines, and the pantoum is a form I have written a few poems, as well.
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Good job on your pantoum poem of childbirth and capturing the feelings of the new mother. I remember them well.
"labor-worn mother" Oh yes...
I like the repeating lines, and the pantoum is a form I have written a few poems, as well.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you Julie
Comment from artemis53
Lovely and very fitting poem, Treischel. You have merged childbirth through the ages meshing with it the dream fulfilled of a Redeemer.
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Lovely and very fitting poem, Treischel. You have merged childbirth through the ages meshing with it the dream fulfilled of a Redeemer.
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Terror2s
You do a magnificient job of recreating a mother's experience and thoughts of holding a newborn. It is truly a magical experience and a time when love comes from the heart. T2
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You do a magnificient job of recreating a mother's experience and thoughts of holding a newborn. It is truly a magical experience and a time when love comes from the heart. T2
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Thank you so much, T2
Comment from 9999pool
The picture of the mother and the baby boy is so charming. The stress on the mother's facfe can be seen and so is the hidden smile. The baby so peaceful and calm. Any woman can related to this having endure the greatest pain on earth. She survived the ordeal and why must childbirth be so painful. Did Mary felt the same as other woman? The smile beguiles the pain and it is worth the effort as in be fertile and fruitful.. Needless to say, this is a part of life that has so much significance. Bravo on the poem. Rich and consist of many flavors of emotions and feeling. Cheers.
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The picture of the mother and the baby boy is so charming. The stress on the mother's facfe can be seen and so is the hidden smile. The baby so peaceful and calm. Any woman can related to this having endure the greatest pain on earth. She survived the ordeal and why must childbirth be so painful. Did Mary felt the same as other woman? The smile beguiles the pain and it is worth the effort as in be fertile and fruitful.. Needless to say, this is a part of life that has so much significance. Bravo on the poem. Rich and consist of many flavors of emotions and feeling. Cheers.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Astounding review.
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Welcome. Cheers. Richard.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It is beautiful Pantoum! I don't think anything can compare with the magic a new born babe can bring to a family. How proud you must have felt looking down at your grandson when you took this photograph, and what a wonderful poem you have written for him to read when he is old enough to understand. Well done for writing this lovely Pantoum it was a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
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It is beautiful Pantoum! I don't think anything can compare with the magic a new born babe can bring to a family. How proud you must have felt looking down at your grandson when you took this photograph, and what a wonderful poem you have written for him to read when he is old enough to understand. Well done for writing this lovely Pantoum it was a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Sandra.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is poem is very well written my friend a baby is definitely a gift to be treasured . I recently became a grandmother myself to a grandson this poem I enjoyed and loved the meaningful closing well done regards Jill
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This is poem is very well written my friend a baby is definitely a gift to be treasured . I recently became a grandmother myself to a grandson this poem I enjoyed and loved the meaningful closing well done regards Jill
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you for this warm review.
Comment from c_lucas
The birth of a new born is one of God's miracles. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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The birth of a new born is one of God's miracles. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Lucas.
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You are welcome.
