A Homerun
Short sports story17 total reviews
Comment from al1801
The story really got me in. It was short, sharp and dsaid it all. It got me thinking, will Ricky develop his ball-hitting skills and be up there with Johny, or with his knowledge of stats, be one of the "Fourth Estate."
If I think that way, you, the author have fone your job. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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The story really got me in. It was short, sharp and dsaid it all. It got me thinking, will Ricky develop his ball-hitting skills and be up there with Johny, or with his knowledge of stats, be one of the "Fourth Estate."
If I think that way, you, the author have fone your job. Well done. :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
Comment from Norbanus
A nice twist on an old hat character. Most stories make out the old ladie looking out the window as a bad case. I happy to see her portrayed with court and good humor. What a souvenir, an indentation in the wall.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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A nice twist on an old hat character. Most stories make out the old ladie looking out the window as a bad case. I happy to see her portrayed with court and good humor. What a souvenir, an indentation in the wall.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you~Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This my friend is very well written mothers love to see there children happy in what they do and would laugh at a mishap like this well done I enjoyed this story regards Jill
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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This my friend is very well written mothers love to see there children happy in what they do and would laugh at a mishap like this well done I enjoyed this story regards Jill
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you~Debbie
Comment from JW
This was definitely a positive spin on an accidental circumstance. It's interesting that Judy wasn't upset. Most people I know are so wrapped up in themselves that their anger would have prevailed. JW
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This was definitely a positive spin on an accidental circumstance. It's interesting that Judy wasn't upset. Most people I know are so wrapped up in themselves that their anger would have prevailed. JW
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
As a mother of boys this short story rings true in so many ways. I have even had bats break storm doors as they shut the main door and the wind blew the storm door into the bat they were holding. This is a very good short story. Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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As a mother of boys this short story rings true in so many ways. I have even had bats break storm doors as they shut the main door and the wind blew the storm door into the bat they were holding. This is a very good short story. Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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My son played hockey and we do have some indentations from him playing in the house!!! Thank you~Debbie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Debbie, you penned a lovely story of the underdog and it made me smile. A wonderful story and a great read.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Hi Debbie, you penned a lovely story of the underdog and it made me smile. A wonderful story and a great read.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thanks Maureen, Take care~Debbie
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Debbie, I LOVE this sweet story! I have only one small suggestion - in the first paragraph you use some variation of 'watch' three times - perhaps changing one to 'gazed' or eyed' or something similar would be a bit better. This is a heartwarming story, well-crafted, and there isn't another thing I would change. Excellent!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Oh Debbie, I LOVE this sweet story! I have only one small suggestion - in the first paragraph you use some variation of 'watch' three times - perhaps changing one to 'gazed' or eyed' or something similar would be a bit better. This is a heartwarming story, well-crafted, and there isn't another thing I would change. Excellent!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thanks. I'll take a look at that!!! Debbie
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My pleasure, always.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I think you've done well with this as a story. Read nicely and smoothly too. Like the person of Judy for not flaring up at this event. Good post.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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I think you've done well with this as a story. Read nicely and smoothly too. Like the person of Judy for not flaring up at this event. Good post.
ola thomas
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you. I still need to do the poem!!! Debbie
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie, I loved this story, I always applaud the under dog. Their the one's that give you the most pleasure as your little story gave me, thank you. Kindest thoughts James xx
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Hi Debbie, I loved this story, I always applaud the under dog. Their the one's that give you the most pleasure as your little story gave me, thank you. Kindest thoughts James xx
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
My first homerun went through a neighbors windshield, costing my mother $15. Does that tell you how long ago it was? (LOL) This is very well written.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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My first homerun went through a neighbors windshield, costing my mother $15. Does that tell you how long ago it was? (LOL) This is very well written.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Sounds like a year or two ago, LOL. Thank you!!! Debbie
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Actually sixty-three years. You're welcome, Debbie. Charlie
