Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. You brought out the contrast of sizes between the great ocean and our little boats. It took courage for man to conquer the seas. Great work.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012

Very nice review. Thanks so much!

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Excellent job on your poem. I enjoyed reading your choice of words. We hope the boat will remain buoyant at least at the present moment of speaking. Other than this, nice! Good luck and have a Happy Thanksgiving. Cheers.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Benjamin. Happy Thanksgiving to you. anon.

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

wonderful little Clarity Pyramid poem about sailing across the sea, i especially liked how lines 7 and 8 rhyme.

great job and GL in the contest

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks for your nice review

Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your Clarity Pyramid. You followed the format correctly. This is an interesting and new form of poetry to me. Well done.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

New for me too! Thanks.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Nicely done and expressive. The comparison to a boat and the terminology are relevant. I like the buoyancy line. It shows that people and things can bounce back for a disaster. Very good

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks Ryme. I appreciate the visit and incite.

Comment from MidnightWriter4U

Excellent

A very good pyramid poem--true to form. The artwork is fabulous! I especially like the second verse--and especially: "On the surging Sea". The use of the word "surging" creates a marked image of the conditions in contrast to the beginning word "Float". It makes the meaning of the starting word more of a prayer. Great work!

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks, it seems you have managed to mine the multiple meanings I buried in this. Really appreciate the encouragement and hope you vote for it.

reply by MidnightWriter4U on 21-Nov-2012

You are welcome. I'll be on the lookout for the voting booth. MN :)

Comment from amada

Excellent

I like the theme of your your Clarity Pyramid Poem. For sure it refreshed and enlightens. I enjoyed the last line ""So glad my small boat is Buoyant."

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012

Thanks Amanda. Hope I get you vote.