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Comment from Capricorn30
I so much enjoyed this story of the ferret's great adventure!
Good visual imagery as we envision Wymie soaring up into the clouds;
"fallen ferret friend"--nice alliterative good-bye to a cute creature who will be fondly remembered!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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I so much enjoyed this story of the ferret's great adventure!
Good visual imagery as we envision Wymie soaring up into the clouds;
"fallen ferret friend"--nice alliterative good-bye to a cute creature who will be fondly remembered!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
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You're welcome:)
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your name choices and imagining the "rodent thoughts." Your "hyperbole which becomes an irony" is choice, and ending on alliteration is fun! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed your name choices and imagining the "rodent thoughts." Your "hyperbole which becomes an irony" is choice, and ending on alliteration is fun! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2012
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Joan, Thank you for reviewing this story, and for noticing lines that others don't. Bill
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Glad to be on the same wavelength! Happy Saturday- Joan
Comment from Axiom Gray
Excellent story, Mr. Schott. I thoroughly enjoyed the diction in your short story. It was satirical at times, but mostly comical the whole way through. I walked away with a smile and I hope I read more from you in the future.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Excellent story, Mr. Schott. I thoroughly enjoyed the diction in your short story. It was satirical at times, but mostly comical the whole way through. I walked away with a smile and I hope I read more from you in the future.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, sir, for your stunning appraisal and ear for wit. It is appreciated.
Comment from visionary1234
ok ... strange sense of humor here - confusing beginning as I hadn't cottoned on to meteorological station with launching something into space (duh - weather balloon) - didn't know what an MRE was either ... so the beginning was very disjointed for me. I also didn't really get into the bad time the poor ferret had ... dragging himself around by his front legs for a few days? Sorry - didn't find it really funny - because I was thinking he was hurt & you were laughing at that? perhaps need to clarify if that was not the case ... but so far ... not a big laugh, sorry dear! Neither as the flattened carcass of Wymie. Ouch!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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ok ... strange sense of humor here - confusing beginning as I hadn't cottoned on to meteorological station with launching something into space (duh - weather balloon) - didn't know what an MRE was either ... so the beginning was very disjointed for me. I also didn't really get into the bad time the poor ferret had ... dragging himself around by his front legs for a few days? Sorry - didn't find it really funny - because I was thinking he was hurt & you were laughing at that? perhaps need to clarify if that was not the case ... but so far ... not a big laugh, sorry dear! Neither as the flattened carcass of Wymie. Ouch!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Eric Corsten
Did he really have to go like that ..jk ..loved it ..brilliant writing thorough and through..hope to ream more soon take care
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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Did he really have to go like that ..jk ..loved it ..brilliant writing thorough and through..hope to ream more soon take care
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from mommerry
This was well-written and gave me a good belly laugh. I could see my five sons, as grown, supposedly intelligent, men pulling off something just as ridiculous as Baggy and the gang. Good job!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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This was well-written and gave me a good belly laugh. I could see my five sons, as grown, supposedly intelligent, men pulling off something just as ridiculous as Baggy and the gang. Good job!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your kind and generous review. Bill
Comment from EMB
This was an enjoyable piece to read. Your narrator has a voice that's easy to listen to, and I had no problem staying with it. However, I think you should consider moving your first paragraph to the end. Your second paragraph should start this.
That's just my opinion, though. :)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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This was an enjoyable piece to read. Your narrator has a voice that's easy to listen to, and I had no problem staying with it. However, I think you should consider moving your first paragraph to the end. Your second paragraph should start this.
That's just my opinion, though. :)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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I see your point. I think I published this too quickly, as I should have continued to Wymie's death. I might edit it and re-enter.
Comment from Misrael
Oh honestly that was funny but sort of silly as well. I did enjoy it and look forward to reading more in the future. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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Oh honestly that was funny but sort of silly as well. I did enjoy it and look forward to reading more in the future. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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I think I published this too quickly, as I should have continued to Wymie's death. I might edit it and re-enter.
Comment from oozer
For a moment i thought it was me up there feeling the unearthly gravity and shiv-iv-iv-'ring ferritociously that i was very nearly out for the count. Yours ever so very ferrity.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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For a moment i thought it was me up there feeling the unearthly gravity and shiv-iv-iv-'ring ferritociously that i was very nearly out for the count. Yours ever so very ferrity.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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I had to quickly ferret out a story as I thought the deadline was today. However, now that I don't need to "f'ret" missing a deadline I might weasel in some more story. Thanks for the cool review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a cute story. So glad to see that Wymie survived and healed, traumatized for life, no doubt, scurrying under a porch whenever he sees a birthday balloon.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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What a cute story. So glad to see that Wymie survived and healed, traumatized for life, no doubt, scurrying under a porch whenever he sees a birthday balloon.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2012
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This is actually a true story, but I thought I'd protect the guilty by changing our names. Thank you for reviewing this.
