Comment from Tina55

Excellent

Nice, smooth writing, Bev. I find it a little odd that the priest doesn't ask his housekeeper 'who' tossed her into the closet when she mentions that 'he threw me to the floor and made the lights explode.' Have I missed something? I guess I'm just not giving enough leeway for him to help her to her senses.

Interesting, twisting dialogue between the priest and his housekeeper. I like how you use the dog to kind of give the scene a little breather.

Great tension!

Nicely done, Bev. Sorry it's taken me so long to catch up...

Tina
:)

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thanks so much, Tina. I can appreciate the lack of time issue! And I appreciate your comments and generous review of the chapter.

Father Brian did have an encounter with the energy in a previous chapter and felt it was demonic. He is convinced that he will have to face this demon personally.

Always good to get your keen insights on my writing, Tina. You don't miss much LOL.

Hugs, Bev

reply by Tina55 on 07-Nov-2012

Yes, I remember that Father Brian had that encounter...I guess I just couldn't remember if his housekeeper knew about it/HIM, or if the encounter had been kept secret. So, it wasn't clear to me that the Father would automatically know who she meant by 'HE'.

How's that for rambling? LOL

Have a great night!! :)

Comment from wordsfromsue

Excellent

Do you know what? I read this last Saturday, and it was soooo good, but I wanted to give you a six, so I was waiting until I got my new allowance, so then I forgot, until the next chapter came out, and now I see I can't give you a six anyway, because you're too good and already have your limit of them from me!!!

This chapter WAS scary darey and I loved it!!! I love that the terrifying bits of information are starting to come to light little by little.... so, this thing's been around for awhile..... and she smelled that stinky stank when the Monsignor lived there. I'm almost surprised she's still alive to talk about it.

Keep the doggie active in the story, I love his appearances. :-)

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012

Sue, you are such a sweetheart. How kind of you to want to give me a six. I'm just truly thrilled with your continued interest in my story and all the support you've given me! Yes, Alyx may end up being even more heroic as the story continues. So glad you enjoyed the read. The supernatural aspect will continue in further chapters, something I just can't seem to get away from LOL. Thanks so much! Hugs, Bev

Comment from GrayWitch

Excellent

Look forward to reading more. Good, believable characters and I like the Irish nomenclature throughout the piece. The chapter leaves the reader wanting to know more and adds to the suspense...

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Thanks for the great review, GrayWitch. I appreciate you taking time to read. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Scribbler67

Excellent

Another pacy and enthralling chapter. You have a clean, uncluttered style, with that added human touch which brings your well-realised characters into sharp relief.
I'm enjoying this very much. Very gripping.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Thanks for the really helpful review, Scribbler. I do appreciate you taking time to read my chapter and thank you for your generous support. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from kleck140

Excellent

Great writing again...I learn so much from your
writing. The descriptive writing that I wish I had.
You tell a great story and held my interest to the
end. I printed it, so I can read it again and learn.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Ellie, thank you so much for this postive and encouraging review. I am honored that you found my chapter interesting and helpful. There's so much we can learn from each other, isn't there? The great thing about this site. I appreciate you! Hugs, Bev

reply by kleck140 on 30-Oct-2012

Thanks for your quick response. How do you find time to write? That is the problem I have.

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

That's a very good point about time for writing. I am retired, which makes it easier. But the time I need to devote to improving my skills ends up taking up a lot of my day. I don't know how working folks do it and I admire their efforts even more.

Even with all the time I have, I still procrastinate. THAT's my biggest issue LOL.

Xxx Bev

reply by kleck140 on 30-Oct-2012

Thanks for your encouragement. I am trying to post Chapter One of my book this week.

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Good! I'm really looking forward to reading that. Xxx Bev

reply by kleck140 on 30-Oct-2012

Thanks for your quick response!

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

You bet! :0)

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

a great chapter, Bev - rather
creepy. The conversation between the
Brian and Carolyn flowed perfectly.

It seems a while since I read your work
so it was great to find a chapter waiting.

I've not been on line much at all since
I've been caring for my older sister, have
had family staying to feed - just not enough
time... thus I'm late in reviewing.

Margaret

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Thank you, Margaret. I definitely understand about the time constraints. I'm just glad you choose to read and follow. That's a blessing in itself. Hope your sister is better soon!

Hugs, Bev

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

Another great addition to the story. I'm not sure I'd want to meet that thing in the dark. Thank goodness for the good ghosts. Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012

Thank you, Tricia. I appreciate you staying faithful to my novel. Your support and generosity mean a lot. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

Along the Jericho Road

The name caught me and the picture dragged me

to read the chapter. I am sure glad that I did...

This is great! I like the way you write what previously

happened, thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012

Thank you! I really appreciate you choosing to read my chapter, mizzkris. Really nice to hear from you. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Sharp teeth in this one, had me holding my breath. :D

As always your writing has kept me glued to the screen and reading is smooth with great character emotion in this that grabs the reader too.
Well done my friend and thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012

Hello, my friend. Thank you so much for continuing to follow my story. I really do appreciate your generosity and support, given what's going on in your own life. You are such an inspiration! Love, Bev

Comment from RogerDodger

Exceptional

This is excellent work. It makes me want to read more. The work has been edited very well. I will review more of your work when time allows me to. Thank you for the great read.
Roger

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012

Thank you so very much, Roger. I am thrilled with this awesome and generous review. I really appreciate it! Warmest regards, Bev

reply by RogerDodger on 29-Oct-2012

Your welcome Bev.
I hope to see more of your work.
Roger

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2012

Thank you, Roger!