A thousand Greens
Take a look at your garden. What does it remind you of?3 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
Thank you for this write, it stands as a awakening for my natural senses. A picture is produced to extract pleasure where as the green of nature is provided.
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Thank you for this write, it stands as a awakening for my natural senses. A picture is produced to extract pleasure where as the green of nature is provided.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
Comment from atlas-manoftherain
Okay, I liked this a lot. Now here's where poetry rocks my socks off and hopefully yours too: I picture scenes too (as it's ALL perfect to me) Then I pictured a thousand greens (I pictured a thousand green baby dragons all trying to spit out flame in a sea before a castle made of crimson and pearl that's contrasted against it with the green GREEN of the dragons) IT would rob me of my breath too (for various reasons, i.e. no water in the place as it's almost like hell hot in there from the fire; And I'd be scared as possible in front of the havoc that takes place in front of the grown up dragons trying to fight for land). Or did you mean vegetation? Well done whatever you meant; you inspired something in my mind either way.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Okay, I liked this a lot. Now here's where poetry rocks my socks off and hopefully yours too: I picture scenes too (as it's ALL perfect to me) Then I pictured a thousand greens (I pictured a thousand green baby dragons all trying to spit out flame in a sea before a castle made of crimson and pearl that's contrasted against it with the green GREEN of the dragons) IT would rob me of my breath too (for various reasons, i.e. no water in the place as it's almost like hell hot in there from the fire; And I'd be scared as possible in front of the havoc that takes place in front of the grown up dragons trying to fight for land). Or did you mean vegetation? Well done whatever you meant; you inspired something in my mind either way.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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WOW man! You have a wacko imagination. I like it
Comment from mirren rue
Flows very well, is not forced. All makes sense (unlike many 5-7-5's I have read). A picture that inspires you and connects with this work would enhance it. Nice job!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Flows very well, is not forced. All makes sense (unlike many 5-7-5's I have read). A picture that inspires you and connects with this work would enhance it. Nice job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thanks. I'm new and this kind of feedback is exactly what I need