Comment from BethShelby

Exceptional

I loved it. I like the way you surprised us with the fact he was with his wife the whole time. Apparently the role playing worked. It is so great when couples are that much in love and just waiting for the right moment. You fooled us in to believing he was about to cheat on his wife.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Thanks so much, Beth. I am so encouraged that you liked this short. It's ben so long since I wrote one. LOL...And the six stars are such great icing on a fine and positive review. Thanks again, Beth. Bob

Comment from elliejean

Exceptional

I love the story. You should always make time for one you love. You showed a little play acting doesn't hurt either. You had me going at first. I thought he was cheating with another woman. I am so glad he wasn't. Great work.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Aaaah! Ellie, you are such a sweetheart in your understanding. You would be surprised how many people don't get it?? LOL..Bless you for taking the time and of course the six stars look so good to a writer. X0 Bob

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Very well written story. I thought the fortune teller was a little to easy. I'm eager to see what you come up with next. Your very talented. Shirley

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Okie gal. Fortuneteller a bit too easy? LOL...Did you forget this guy and his wife were really overdue for sex? LOL...She was anxious as was he...I thought it came across as such. Sorry. Thanks again for the time and review. X0 Bob

reply by Shirley McLain on 14-Oct-2012

Hi Bob, I'm on the slow side and didn't realize it was his wife until the end. It did become understandable at that point to me. You don't have to tell me sorry for any thing you write. Hugs Shirley

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

That's fine,Shirl...It's exactly what I was going for....a surprise ending...LOL...Bob

Comment from Spiritual Echo

Exceptional

You rascal, you! Hey, I got horny just reading it and I'm a 15 year veteran of the born again virgin club!

Very erotic scenes and superb build up. A great Sunday morning romp.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Ooooooh! "born again virgin club?" Whew! Thanks so much, Ingrid for your fine review andd stars. Go take a cold shower. (LOL) Bob

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Apart from being very well written, I found this entertaining. You started telling about how many couples fare. Then Arnie goes to see this fortune teller and gets attracted to her and they make love. If I'm not wrong: she was his own wife. Best wishes for the contest, Bob.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Robina. Thanks so much for the review. Yes, as mentioned inthe first part of the story, theynwere indeed living out a fantasy...Arnie and Maureen. Bob

reply by robina1978 on 14-Oct-2012

I overlooked the first part. But it still remains an excellent story.

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

I kinda guessed the ending, but it was fun anyway, Bob. There's one question, though:

She wore silky black panties, - from that position, how would he know their color?

You didn't mention any mirrors. :D Nancy

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Nancy. Yep...You are right...I changed it. Thanks so much...Bob

reply by N.K. Wagner on 14-Oct-2012

just repaying your many favors. Great story. :) nancy

Comment from smudge

Exceptional

Romance belongs to every age not just the young starting out on life's journey. The prose is professional as always and the dialogue flows easily.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Maureen. Thank you so much for your fine review and comment. The six stars are such a great additional gift. Bob

reply by smudge on 14-Oct-2012

Your very welcome my friend

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

Hmm, steamy screen time! A great tale about keeping marriage alive, though I saw the ending coming from a mile off, it was the best ending. Would have been awful if he'd cheated on his wife. It's not really a genre I read much of, but this wasn't too slushy or silly. I enjoyed it

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Thanks so much, emsey. I appreciate your time and comments. I will be watching for your work as well. Bob (Mastery)

Comment from God's Writer

Exceptional

Now I understand Master why you told me what you said about my story. Don't tell till the end. I am going to bookmark it so I can study it further. Such a flow undresses your story. A deception drawn from an inner drive for perfection. It is no wonder you have taken so much to post this story. You rank in professionalism with J.R.R.Tolken and Mark twain. Before I read your story about the detective. Such a wonderfully Memorexed read and fantastic switching together the ending. I thank you for the privilege I feel to be your student.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Erick! Well, thanks so much forthe nice remarks. Very encouraging, indeed. You know you can do it too...just put your mind to it. (Notice though...I did not have to be overly graphic in order to paint the picture. Right? Bob

reply by God's Writer on 14-Oct-2012

I am studying the form you are using. It is all mathmatical. Once I get the form and the formula. I will be off and running. I have posted several stories since we last talked. Would love to know your opinion. Especially the one called "The Pinks." Talk to you later.

shalom,
Erick

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

I willdo my best to give you an opinion asap, Erick. Bob

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

two kid's activities - - should be kids' - plural possessive
You explain well the many obstacles keeping this couple from coupling :-)
backed his wrecker into it's parking slot - drop the apostrophe
I'm a little confused about the fortune-telling thing - is his wife a part time fortune teller when she is not waitressing? If not, where did they come up with this whole tarot card fortune telling set up?
A cute story with a thoughtful message :-) Brooke

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

Hi, Brooke. Thanks so much for your read and comments. I always appreciate your input. Fantasy....purely a fantasy created by the two parties in order to get some time away and have a bit of fun at the same time. I do hope you get it now....LOL...otherwise, I worry...Bob

reply by adewpearl on 14-Oct-2012

I understand it's role playing - but the way you described it with the parking lot and the building and the tarot cards made it sound to me like it was a fantasy being played out in an actual place :-) Sorry I misunderstood.

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012

LOL...Yes....it was played out at an actual place....His wife set it all up beforehand...he went there after work...How she rented the building or whatever isn't really important, I didn't think. LOL...Thanks again, Brooke....Bob