Bottom of the Genetic Pool
a continuing reflection of an ancient post16 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
I thought I remembered reading and commenting on this but maybe something else about your son, the house he bought? This deserves to be there. You have shown all your particular strengths of style. Good luck!!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I thought I remembered reading and commenting on this but maybe something else about your son, the house he bought? This deserves to be there. You have shown all your particular strengths of style. Good luck!!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I think we have shared a great deal together. What has it been two years? Time flies when we are just yawning, doesn't it?
Think of me as your first die-heart fan and accept my thanks for the bouquet of stars.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a beautiful story that shows your love for you son and grandchildren and how wrapped up in their pain you are. I'd like to read more of this story. Like you, I feel my children's pain even though they have the own homes and children to raise.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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This is a beautiful story that shows your love for you son and grandchildren and how wrapped up in their pain you are. I'd like to read more of this story. Like you, I feel my children's pain even though they have the own homes and children to raise.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I think the most signficant story I ever put on this site was a re-worked letter my son sent to me entitled "Michael's Life Decision." I originally posted three years ago, then pulled it back up when I posted this one. I've come to accept and realize that if I've done nothing more than breathe life into another person that that, that single moment in time, was likely good enough.
Comment from Titanx9
This such a poignant heartfelt letter. It seems you, and your son have weathered some pretty rough storms and have managed to survive. I like all the details and descriptions, like "devil-child." That was so funny. Thanks for allowing me to see this small part of a special relationship. I enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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This such a poignant heartfelt letter. It seems you, and your son have weathered some pretty rough storms and have managed to survive. I like all the details and descriptions, like "devil-child." That was so funny. Thanks for allowing me to see this small part of a special relationship. I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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You might want to read 'Michael's Life Decision' We wrote this a year ago, but when I posted this letter I decided to reactivate the story that explains it all. It is very touching and a true life story that is available in my portfolio. ingrid
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Wonderful. Heartfelt. He sounds like a wonderful man. Take a bow, Ingrid. He's yours. You're proud of him, as you should be. You should also be very proud of yourself, methinks.
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Wonderful. Heartfelt. He sounds like a wonderful man. Take a bow, Ingrid. He's yours. You're proud of him, as you should be. You should also be very proud of yourself, methinks.
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Gosh, shucks. Had dinner with him and the two kids and guess what he told me that I believe he thought I might have an opinion about? He's going to get spayed and he's not even dating...LOL. Told him it was a personal decision...I think he was mildly shocked I had no attitude.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is very intriguing... what an amazing thing for a teenaged boy to do. He was just a natural father. You may not realize yur part in it, but there must have been some nurture in addition to nature to make him that way. Great story!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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This is very intriguing... what an amazing thing for a teenaged boy to do. He was just a natural father. You may not realize yur part in it, but there must have been some nurture in addition to nature to make him that way. Great story!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I was on his tail all the time and he knew that he couldn't escape my love.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi Spiritual Echo,
It is obvious you wrote this from your heart and a beautiful story it is. Captivating, well written with a smooth flow. I did find one place you might want to check.
4th. Paragraph,1st. Sentence, last word. Could you have possibly meant to use the word disdain.
Thank you so much for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Hi Spiritual Echo,
It is obvious you wrote this from your heart and a beautiful story it is. Captivating, well written with a smooth flow. I did find one place you might want to check.
4th. Paragraph,1st. Sentence, last word. Could you have possibly meant to use the word disdain.
Thank you so much for sharing your story.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I sure did. What a sharp eye. Thanks.
Comment from reconciled
no six...sorry. Man....your a great mom.....and it sounds like you raised a great son....I pray his life finds no more struggle. love Michael
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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no six...sorry. Man....your a great mom.....and it sounds like you raised a great son....I pray his life finds no more struggle. love Michael
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Me too, darling. He's been on his own with the kids as the centre of his unverse. I hope one day he'll find someone to share a life.
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yea me too...
Comment from jjstar
This is a beautifully written tribute to your son. I too, have spent so many years trying to figure out how this gene pool works. My oldest son has always been a handful. I tried my best throughout his life to provide him with every tool to become an outstanding individual who makes good decisions. I don't know if my best was enough, as he continues to baffle me. I hope one day I can sing his praises the way you have your sons. Congratulations! You must be an amazing mother!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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This is a beautifully written tribute to your son. I too, have spent so many years trying to figure out how this gene pool works. My oldest son has always been a handful. I tried my best throughout his life to provide him with every tool to become an outstanding individual who makes good decisions. I don't know if my best was enough, as he continues to baffle me. I hope one day I can sing his praises the way you have your sons. Congratulations! You must be an amazing mother!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I was an outrageous mother. One night when he was about seven there was roadwork happening on our street and I stole the electronic saw horse with the flashing lights and put it in his bedroom to create shock and awe when he woke up.. Told him a construction crew was coming in later that day because of a pollution report and he should probably say goodbye to the toys he had strewn two feet deep on his bedroom floor. Man did he clean his room up quickly!
But, the hardest thing I had to learn, as I'm sure you've found, is to be a mother to an adult child. That takes a lot of practice and my tongue was swollen for years as I clenched down and bit my tongue. Regardless of your situation, continue to love and throw coins into wishing wells.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Spiritual Echo,
This is well written and interesting summation of your love of your son. You chastise yourself for not being a good parent but marvel at how well he turned out. However, the reason for the four is there is no back story, no description of the characters you introduce. I feel much more could and should be related to the reader in your story.
One misspelling lazar should be laser.
Regards,
Winslow
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Dear Spiritual Echo,
This is well written and interesting summation of your love of your son. You chastise yourself for not being a good parent but marvel at how well he turned out. However, the reason for the four is there is no back story, no description of the characters you introduce. I feel much more could and should be related to the reader in your story.
One misspelling lazar should be laser.
Regards,
Winslow
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I'll accept your four, but you failed to read the category and judged by short story standards which do not apply to a post under the category 'Letter' It would hardly seem appropriate for me to describe my son to himself in a letter I am writing to him. It would equally inappropriate for the 'writer' to describe herself to a son.
Thank you for the spag alert. This is written in Canadian English and automatically flagged laser as the UK spelling, however I will change the spelling.
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If this is a letter than you should begin by saying Dear Son so there is no confusion. I would also put in a foreward to the reader stating what this is about.
Regards,
A Fanstorian
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The first word in this is Michal followed by a comma and then beginning clearly to address him and the category is self-explanatory. Not everyone begins their written communication with the word 'Dear' I am not disputing your ranking or opinion, but I simply feel you are being insistent on a POV that should be self-explantory to a reader who pays attention to the category.
However, I thank you for your time.
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Many times I don't even look at the category. I still feel that since this was posted for a review by fanstorians you could have easily included a foreward or a section describing this as a letter to your son. It is well written, but for a general reader it needs clarification, which is easy to do. Winslow
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In you author's notes you also refer to this letter as a story.
Comment from Janeyjane
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing. I don't have much experience on writing myself, its good to be able to see others style and use of language. The words and descriptions you have used fit together well. Im looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for
sharing
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing. I don't have much experience on writing myself, its good to be able to see others style and use of language. The words and descriptions you have used fit together well. Im looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for
sharing
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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If you are new to the site and find authors you enjoy, you can go to profile, find a member and click on to see their full portfolio that has been posted. Thanks for reading.
