Experiences of Death
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Comment from Sueellen11
Hi bicpen, drink the vile filth of sin, and eat our fill the gnashing of teeth upon the flesh and destroying the soul, this is true sin, devoured by hell, for eternity, great write if only all can see the truth, many wont handle the truth here, blessings, suellen.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Hi bicpen, drink the vile filth of sin, and eat our fill the gnashing of teeth upon the flesh and destroying the soul, this is true sin, devoured by hell, for eternity, great write if only all can see the truth, many wont handle the truth here, blessings, suellen.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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... anytime my friend !
Comment from minopavlic
This is outstanding. When the dark cloud of sin comes between your soul and God, when all around you is dark and forbidding, when the enemy stands ready to rob the soul of its integrity to God and His truth, then it is time to pray and exercise faith in God, for with a cherishing faith, the soul is enabled to rise beyond itself, and penetrate the hellish shadow of sin which the enemy casts along the pathway of every soul that is striving for an immortal crown. . . .
No_obstacle
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013
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This is outstanding. When the dark cloud of sin comes between your soul and God, when all around you is dark and forbidding, when the enemy stands ready to rob the soul of its integrity to God and His truth, then it is time to pray and exercise faith in God, for with a cherishing faith, the soul is enabled to rise beyond itself, and penetrate the hellish shadow of sin which the enemy casts along the pathway of every soul that is striving for an immortal crown. . . .
No_obstacle
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013
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Well, later on in my life thta exactly what did happen, hence, the other spiritual poems in my collection. Appreciate your kind thoughts and insight.
Comment from Gungalo
An open grave is my warmth;
lay still and drink my vile filth.
My name is sin:
throughout
all
my
will.
Well I'll be Bic, you have gone and done it. A free verse poem that rings out of the sin of sins. Wonderful words here.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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An open grave is my warmth;
lay still and drink my vile filth.
My name is sin:
throughout
all
my
will.
Well I'll be Bic, you have gone and done it. A free verse poem that rings out of the sin of sins. Wonderful words here.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
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Thanks G ... much appreciated!
Comment from PoeticXscape
Wow.......just wow. Talk about intense. I would say what I liked about it but I loved it all. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Wow.......just wow. Talk about intense. I would say what I liked about it but I loved it all. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Thank you ... muchly appreciated !!!
Comment from God's Writer
A well written and wonderful poem. Full of grand feelings and emotions. Great rhythm in this awesome write. Thank you
Shalom,
Rabbi Erick
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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A well written and wonderful poem. Full of grand feelings and emotions. Great rhythm in this awesome write. Thank you
Shalom,
Rabbi Erick
Comment Written 06-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
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You're welcome.
Comment from MM lives on :)
Bicpen, a true masterpiece my friend. The prison inside by expectations of failed religious and societal restraints is felt here. Brilliant!!!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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Bicpen, a true masterpiece my friend. The prison inside by expectations of failed religious and societal restraints is felt here. Brilliant!!!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013
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There is a brief author description in the review of Charade ... intresting thoughts!
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brilliant my friend and compelling. M.Christopher
Comment from seren james
A thought provoking poem about death. You have used good imagery and metaphors to express your views. I think sin is synonymous with satan. Good and evil, God and satan in a constant battle in the world. It is a wonderful thing that at the moment of death one passes away peacefully not knowing anything.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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A thought provoking poem about death. You have used good imagery and metaphors to express your views. I think sin is synonymous with satan. Good and evil, God and satan in a constant battle in the world. It is a wonderful thing that at the moment of death one passes away peacefully not knowing anything.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Just out of curiosity ... can I ask why you did not review the rest of the book.
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lack of time I guess.
Comment from 9999pool
This chapter is about sin..the temptations and the evil that men do. The imagery is a frightening one as we are capable of many heinous crimes and evil deeds. Rotting bodies of the sinners and everyone who sins get retribution of the worst kind. A dead man awaiting judgement for all his sins and evil deed cannot escape the prison he will be sent into. Excellent imagery and good expressions of men as sinners and the punishment waiting the dead men. Poignant. Cheers. ritchiesszzky.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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This chapter is about sin..the temptations and the evil that men do. The imagery is a frightening one as we are capable of many heinous crimes and evil deeds. Rotting bodies of the sinners and everyone who sins get retribution of the worst kind. A dead man awaiting judgement for all his sins and evil deed cannot escape the prison he will be sent into. Excellent imagery and good expressions of men as sinners and the punishment waiting the dead men. Poignant. Cheers. ritchiesszzky.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Excellent much obliged ... glad you like!
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Welcome, cheers, Ritchiesszzky.
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Anytime ... !
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:))))). Have a wonderful creative day mix and matching the lines, LOL. Ritchie.
Comment from October21
This is a well written poem with religious context laced between the words of the piece. Brilliantly chose artwork to reflect confusion!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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This is a well written poem with religious context laced between the words of the piece. Brilliantly chose artwork to reflect confusion!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Many thanks ...
Comment from adewpearl
I like the assonance in strong and drawn
I also like the question and answer format in your opening
and your use of repetition for effect
good assonance in seeks reaching
vivid and compelling detail in the cold corpse stanza
what a strong closing
this one is worth a second reading :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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I like the assonance in strong and drawn
I also like the question and answer format in your opening
and your use of repetition for effect
good assonance in seeks reaching
vivid and compelling detail in the cold corpse stanza
what a strong closing
this one is worth a second reading :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Excellent, glad you could appreciate.
