haiku (fluff gliders)
3-5-3 air haiku15 total reviews
Comment from MoonWillow
I love this one, Helvi. As you can see, I've been visiting. :) The photo is fantastic and your words are perfect. Parasols & fluff gliders, love it. These little guys bring back so many childhood memories in all of us. Milkweeds and dandelions. Beautiful haiku! :)shawn
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I love this one, Helvi. As you can see, I've been visiting. :) The photo is fantastic and your words are perfect. Parasols & fluff gliders, love it. These little guys bring back so many childhood memories in all of us. Milkweeds and dandelions. Beautiful haiku! :)shawn
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
Comment from donaldww
This is an excellent, well formed haiku. 'fluff gliders' makes an excellent satori line for milkweed seed parasols.
Cheers!
DW
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This is an excellent, well formed haiku. 'fluff gliders' makes an excellent satori line for milkweed seed parasols.
Cheers!
DW
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
Comment from sgalletti
Beautiful image. Great consonance. Lovely breathe in/breathe out throughout. It's a pleasure to rad a well-constructed haiku. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
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Beautiful image. Great consonance. Lovely breathe in/breathe out throughout. It's a pleasure to rad a well-constructed haiku. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
Comment from Charlene0513
Yes they certainly are little parachutes or gliders as you specified.
The lovely way they have of making their presence known is eye- catching.(if you know what I mean)
Charlene
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Yes they certainly are little parachutes or gliders as you specified.
The lovely way they have of making their presence known is eye- catching.(if you know what I mean)
Charlene
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
Comment from Gloria ....
Author your air haiku captures the spirit of the contest very well. I feel like flying and also maybe having an afternoon libation with the parasols and gliders. Best of luck in the contest.
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Author your air haiku captures the spirit of the contest very well. I feel like flying and also maybe having an afternoon libation with the parasols and gliders. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
You've perfectly captured the art work with your wonderfully written air Haiku.
Your satoti line is good.
You used great alliteration in your Haiku.
I liked the lines:
milkweed seed
parasols drift by
fluff gliders
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your air Haiku to other reviewers.
Missy.
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Poet,
You've perfectly captured the art work with your wonderfully written air Haiku.
Your satoti line is good.
You used great alliteration in your Haiku.
I liked the lines:
milkweed seed
parasols drift by
fluff gliders
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your air Haiku to other reviewers.
Missy.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written short and very descriptive and beautiful you have done very well the art work finishes it off well good luck regards Jill
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Yes this is very well written short and very descriptive and beautiful you have done very well the art work finishes it off well good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a very delicate and light 3-5-3 with interesting imagery. Form and syllable count are correct according to the rules of this contest. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a very delicate and light 3-5-3 with interesting imagery. Form and syllable count are correct according to the rules of this contest. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
Comment from adewpearl
gorgeous pairing of photo and poem
your poem is in excellent 3/5/3 form
I love the idea of the milkweed seeds as parasols and as fluff gliders - this is so delightfully whimsical :-) Brooke
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gorgeous pairing of photo and poem
your poem is in excellent 3/5/3 form
I love the idea of the milkweed seeds as parasols and as fluff gliders - this is so delightfully whimsical :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
Comment from barkingdog
Isn't this a lovely thought? You have a very nice beginning to your 3/5/3 haiku with 'e' assonance( milkweed seed). Your second line actually does drift into your third with the 'l' consonance that you use in those lines(parasols/fluff gliders).
Your presentation is Beautiful.
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Isn't this a lovely thought? You have a very nice beginning to your 3/5/3 haiku with 'e' assonance( milkweed seed). Your second line actually does drift into your third with the 'l' consonance that you use in those lines(parasols/fluff gliders).
Your presentation is Beautiful.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
