Hot Bath
The bare facts.27 total reviews
Comment from LucidDreem
I never get tired of these time pieces. You seem to know an awful lot about the language of eras as far back as the 1800s.
"Well, six weeks' time in the wilderness don't wash off with rain, my celestial friend, needs some soakin' "
I feel there should be a period after 'friend.' Otherwise it just feels like a run-on.
"an instant wilty"
I laughed at this phrase.
I like the banter between the MC and the doctor. I also liked the juxtaposition of the doctor being fearless enough to bath next to a man. There's a lot of good character description in there without you having to point it out.
As usual, you flex your knowledge of the time's language in a credible and stylish way. A good read.
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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I never get tired of these time pieces. You seem to know an awful lot about the language of eras as far back as the 1800s.
"Well, six weeks' time in the wilderness don't wash off with rain, my celestial friend, needs some soakin' "
I feel there should be a period after 'friend.' Otherwise it just feels like a run-on.
"an instant wilty"
I laughed at this phrase.
I like the banter between the MC and the doctor. I also liked the juxtaposition of the doctor being fearless enough to bath next to a man. There's a lot of good character description in there without you having to point it out.
As usual, you flex your knowledge of the time's language in a credible and stylish way. A good read.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Thank you, LucidDream. Perhaps you're a bit too literal when you expect proper punctuation during dialogue. People don't always punctuate according the Chicago Style Book when they speak. Just an observation. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from jb wade
You have a very good read. I like the details. The story content is perfect for a western theme. I hope you enjoyed the challenge. Thanks.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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You have a very good read. I like the details. The story content is perfect for a western theme. I hope you enjoyed the challenge. Thanks.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, jb. I really enjoyed your prompt. I hope I met your expectations. Peace, Lee
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Very happy. Glad you won. I will have another one soon. Just working out the time.
Comment from mommerry
The cowboy language, the banter between the cowboy and the Chinaman and the unexpected bather had me laughing all the way through your story. Great.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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The cowboy language, the banter between the cowboy and the Chinaman and the unexpected bather had me laughing all the way through your story. Great.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank youm mommerry. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Spitfire
Big surprise. The cowboy expects a man and what's more a great conversationalist. Quite an ego, I'd say. I loved to see that he got a bit of his own back: where did a saddle sore like you come up with concubine? Perfect ending.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Big surprise. The cowboy expects a man and what's more a great conversationalist. Quite an ego, I'd say. I loved to see that he got a bit of his own back: where did a saddle sore like you come up with concubine? Perfect ending.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Shari. I'm glad you enjoyed. Even saddle sores know what a concubine is--I hear. Peace, Lee
Comment from purrfect tale
Great story. And it was a complete story with beginning, middle, end and conflict. Even the environment was well set up for the reader's imagination.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Great story. And it was a complete story with beginning, middle, end and conflict. Even the environment was well set up for the reader's imagination.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, purr. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from gazzagodbod
yeahh love westerns and love your little piece fabulous work my friend should do well good luck in the contest my friend gazza
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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yeahh love westerns and love your little piece fabulous work my friend should do well good luck in the contest my friend gazza
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Hey gazza, I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Adri7enne
Kept me reading with anticipation all the way through. I liked her moxie and his bravado. Fun story.
"THERE'S only two tubs in this two-tree town and I REQUIRE TO BATHE every morning." I know it's conversation, but still, seeing as how she's the new doctor, I'd keep her end of the conversation grammatically correct. "THERE ARE only ... and I INSIST ON A BATH every morning."
Yep. Sounds like she had fine credentials, all right!
Well done, author. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Kept me reading with anticipation all the way through. I liked her moxie and his bravado. Fun story.
"THERE'S only two tubs in this two-tree town and I REQUIRE TO BATHE every morning." I know it's conversation, but still, seeing as how she's the new doctor, I'd keep her end of the conversation grammatically correct. "THERE ARE only ... and I INSIST ON A BATH every morning."
Yep. Sounds like she had fine credentials, all right!
Well done, author. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Adri7enne. You bring up an interesting point, but I suspect a naked doctor might let the rules of grammar slip a bit.
Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Pretty darn funny.
Well told with ample and satisfying charachter development in spite of the word budget.
Enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Pretty darn funny.
Well told with ample and satisfying charachter development in spite of the word budget.
Enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Ingrid. I'm really glad you enjoyed. Still mad at me?
Peace, Lee
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I'm not mad at you at all.
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
I LOVED IT! The accent you gave Chen was straight out of Bonanza! hahaha. And having the new local Doctor come in was a pleasant surprise.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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I LOVED IT! The accent you gave Chen was straight out of Bonanza! hahaha. And having the new local Doctor come in was a pleasant surprise.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, kra-z, Hop Sing grad you like! Peace, Lee
Comment from Bina1
An excellent, fun write! Your characters developed nicely as the story unfolded. An excellent entry for the contest, good luck! Sounds like the start of a good book!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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An excellent, fun write! Your characters developed nicely as the story unfolded. An excellent entry for the contest, good luck! Sounds like the start of a good book!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Bina1. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
