Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 " A Winner by BROOKE ANNE"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
18 total reviews
Comment from abbasjoy
You can just feel the excitement in this chapter. The eagerness of the dogs to be off and running keeps the reader on the edge of their seat.
The camaraderie is felt between Brooke and James, even though they may be competitors, but they both end up winners.
Good read.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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You can just feel the excitement in this chapter. The eagerness of the dogs to be off and running keeps the reader on the edge of their seat.
The camaraderie is felt between Brooke and James, even though they may be competitors, but they both end up winners.
Good read.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thanks so much. This story is in print now under name of 'Whispers to a Deaf Dog'. So far, kids of all ages seem to love it.
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Congratulations, and all the very best.
Abbasjoy
Comment from Jay Squires
A fun, exciting, and articulate read. The reason for this is the feeling of authenticity brought about by your knowing dog-sled racing inside and out.
Only found one small nit. This was very well edited.
James feet fly in a run [James' feet fly]
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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A fun, exciting, and articulate read. The reason for this is the feeling of authenticity brought about by your knowing dog-sled racing inside and out.
Only found one small nit. This was very well edited.
James feet fly in a run [James' feet fly]
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thanks so much. This story is in print now under name of 'Whispers to a Deaf Dog'. So far, kids of all ages seem to love it.
Comment from Nosha17
What a beautiful story, it made me cry. I felt as if my two husky/malemute dogs were back with me (they both passed away last year at 12 years old). I loved them very much, the most loyal dogs anyone could ever have. Yours is such a heart warming story, promoting the lovely relationship between animal and human. Your narrative and descriptions were great and I thoroughly enjoyed it. My dogs were born in the USA, but I brought them back to England with me, where I now live. Thank you for sharing your super story. Faye
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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What a beautiful story, it made me cry. I felt as if my two husky/malemute dogs were back with me (they both passed away last year at 12 years old). I loved them very much, the most loyal dogs anyone could ever have. Yours is such a heart warming story, promoting the lovely relationship between animal and human. Your narrative and descriptions were great and I thoroughly enjoyed it. My dogs were born in the USA, but I brought them back to England with me, where I now live. Thank you for sharing your super story. Faye
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thanks so much for telling me about your wonderful dogs. This story is in print now under name of 'Whispers to a Deaf Dog'. So far, kids of all ages seem to love it.
Comment from JB Lynn
This was a real treat to read! The love Brooke feels for her dogs is tangible and there's definitely something brewing between her and James, which I'm sure you've built up previously in the story. I felt just as anxious as Brooke must have felt while waiting for James to finish the race. This means you did a great job of sweeping your reader up into the emotions of your characters. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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This was a real treat to read! The love Brooke feels for her dogs is tangible and there's definitely something brewing between her and James, which I'm sure you've built up previously in the story. I felt just as anxious as Brooke must have felt while waiting for James to finish the race. This means you did a great job of sweeping your reader up into the emotions of your characters. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks for your complimentary comments. It is always thrilling to hear from a reader who enjoyed the story. Marie
Comment from Zue65
Competition is not all about winning, it is how you play and treat your opponents that matter most. This is where humans are separated from animals, where sometimes animals exhibit more humane feelings that most of us. Your story touch on all these sensitive issues. I enjoyed your story very much. An excellent write.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Competition is not all about winning, it is how you play and treat your opponents that matter most. This is where humans are separated from animals, where sometimes animals exhibit more humane feelings that most of us. Your story touch on all these sensitive issues. I enjoyed your story very much. An excellent write.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Wonderful to hear your comments. Thanks so much for participation. Marie
Comment from A.R. Curry
You don't seem to be a beginner whatsoever . This read like you commanded it to your will and that's a great thing. Awesome, spag free, job.
Curry
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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You don't seem to be a beginner whatsoever . This read like you commanded it to your will and that's a great thing. Awesome, spag free, job.
Curry
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Your comments are very encouraging. Thanks so much! Marie
Comment from c_lucas
The race is on with the Huskies doing There thing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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The race is on with the Huskies doing There thing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks so much for such encouraging remarks. Marie
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You're welcome, Marie. Charlie
Comment from MissMerri
Another breath-stopping episode in the lives of Brooke and James. Brook seems to have changed the spelling of her name since falling in love, but sooner or later we all seem to do that. (Mine used to be Goodpasture.) I see a couple of small things I'd like to change, if I were an editor:
1. Dad and Walter ... with great pride, say that winning third place is an honor.
2. For a third time (should this be fourth time?) the signal horn goes off. I've never been to a dog race but just logically it seems like if the horn is to start the racers on their way, team number four (James) would be hearing the fourth blast of the horn.
3. I would prefer Amy to screech less or at least to use a different term now and then. Maybe sometimes she could show her excitement tin a different way?
There is so much here I wouldn't want to change. I love the stress and excitement and thrill of the dog races, the authenticity you give the whole scene with your specific details and I love the 'realness' of your characters. You are masterful at creating characters that we care about, people who come alive on the page. Your books are wonderful... All of them.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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Another breath-stopping episode in the lives of Brooke and James. Brook seems to have changed the spelling of her name since falling in love, but sooner or later we all seem to do that. (Mine used to be Goodpasture.) I see a couple of small things I'd like to change, if I were an editor:
1. Dad and Walter ... with great pride, say that winning third place is an honor.
2. For a third time (should this be fourth time?) the signal horn goes off. I've never been to a dog race but just logically it seems like if the horn is to start the racers on their way, team number four (James) would be hearing the fourth blast of the horn.
3. I would prefer Amy to screech less or at least to use a different term now and then. Maybe sometimes she could show her excitement tin a different way?
There is so much here I wouldn't want to change. I love the stress and excitement and thrill of the dog races, the authenticity you give the whole scene with your specific details and I love the 'realness' of your characters. You are masterful at creating characters that we care about, people who come alive on the page. Your books are wonderful... All of them.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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Ha! I caught the 'fourth' error this week as I get really close to getting it in print on CreateSpace under the title "Whispers to a Deaf Dog". I hope reading this was worth 2 cents to you, I truly appreciate your comments!!! However, I've made a few changes to every chapter, but the one that stumps me most are the last closing lines. Can you evaluate my latest? This is it:
Jamesâ?? irresistible stare washes over me, and he grins.
Just as I always do with Shemya, I throw my arms around James. Much louder than a whisper in a dogâ??s deaf ears, I shout, â??Congratulations, James. You are a winner!â??
More help from you sure would be great. But, dear friend Adonna, thanks a million for every suggestion you make!! luv, Marie
Comment from Nanashirley
The chapter is exciting and I like the way you involve all of the caracters, even the dogs. I saw no need for editing. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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The chapter is exciting and I like the way you involve all of the caracters, even the dogs. I saw no need for editing. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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You are so encouraging, Shirley. Thanks a million for reading this last chapter and taking time to review. Marie
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Great ending! Glad I caught this piece. this was a wonderful cool rush of freedom . I really liked the descriptions and the tension and the dialogue was realistic. Great write.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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Great ending! Glad I caught this piece. this was a wonderful cool rush of freedom . I really liked the descriptions and the tension and the dialogue was realistic. Great write.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2012
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Your comments and review make me mighty happy. Thanks so much for for finding the ending to your liking! Marie
