Humanity's Mockery
Quatrains-a dedication to Stranger15 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, you are brave to go against the tide! I relished your biting mono-verse rhymes in these quatrains and finale in rhymed couplets. You are the king of political satire! -Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Wow, you are brave to go against the tide! I relished your biting mono-verse rhymes in these quatrains and finale in rhymed couplets. You are the king of political satire! -Joan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Joan my friend, I am very pleased to read your wonderful comments, as always, so encouraging, I am grateful my friend, thank you very much.
Comment from thmedina
I can only hope my poetry can flow so powerfully yet glide over the surface with such ease as your does my friend. Thank you... Tm
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I can only hope my poetry can flow so powerfully yet glide over the surface with such ease as your does my friend. Thank you... Tm
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Medina my friend, very kind of you to visit, appreciate the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Kamran, my friend. This is really brilliant- you really should write more of this length, because you really let loose. I agree that Britain and america both have exploited the world all over. There is something very disturbing and unsettling about that monarchy. Wonderful piece! God bless, Holly
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Kamran, my friend. This is really brilliant- you really should write more of this length, because you really let loose. I agree that Britain and america both have exploited the world all over. There is something very disturbing and unsettling about that monarchy. Wonderful piece! God bless, Holly
Comment Written 04-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Hello again my friend, I am delighted you like poem and I know you'd appreciate the tone/essence of the write, I thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Comment from sunnilicious
'Humanity's Mockery' is well thought out like a joker you appear. Politics are suppose to be fair. Personally, I think of her as shallow with a stern face. The Great Queen Grannie sure has many things to be proud of like her new grandbabies. You should add them in too.
Anyways, good flow of rhymes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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'Humanity's Mockery' is well thought out like a joker you appear. Politics are suppose to be fair. Personally, I think of her as shallow with a stern face. The Great Queen Grannie sure has many things to be proud of like her new grandbabies. You should add them in too.
Anyways, good flow of rhymes. Nice work.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Glad you like the write my friend, appreciate the time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
When I saw the picture I about fell off my chair laughing. Why is it we don't think of royalty sitting on a toilet? I love the satirical poem with its good rhyme and meter. You have done an excellent job with mono-rhyming a poetic device I forget to use. I wonder what it would feel like to be a royal...oh Well I shall never know. This is an excellent poem and well deserving of six stars.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Hi ameen,
When I saw the picture I about fell off my chair laughing. Why is it we don't think of royalty sitting on a toilet? I love the satirical poem with its good rhyme and meter. You have done an excellent job with mono-rhyming a poetic device I forget to use. I wonder what it would feel like to be a royal...oh Well I shall never know. This is an excellent poem and well deserving of six stars.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 04-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Hello again my friend, I am so excited and so encouraged by your awesome comments, so kind of you my friend, thank you very much for the generous review, God bless.
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Spitfire
The picture with its play on words is hysterical. I love the rhyme scheme. And your rhymes seem so natural. Another satirical comment on the hypocrisy of ruling aristocracy.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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The picture with its play on words is hysterical. I love the rhyme scheme. And your rhymes seem so natural. Another satirical comment on the hypocrisy of ruling aristocracy.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2012
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Shari my friend, so pleased you like the poem, I thank you my friend, take care.
Comment from artemis53
I was reading about that last night, Ameen. The Brits pay a very high cost for their royals that amazes me. I believe that the Bell tower will always be called "Big Ben."
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I was reading about that last night, Ameen. The Brits pay a very high cost for their royals that amazes me. I believe that the Bell tower will always be called "Big Ben."
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Diane my friend, I appreciate your time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from rashi kumar
This is a masterpiece, not only for the poetic essences but such a message. A terrific satire!
While the half of globe suffers, there are people who are busy showing off opulence.
Very well-written, such phrases and alliteration!
A great work to be understood and remembered!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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This is a masterpiece, not only for the poetic essences but such a message. A terrific satire!
While the half of globe suffers, there are people who are busy showing off opulence.
Very well-written, such phrases and alliteration!
A great work to be understood and remembered!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Namaste beti, how are you? So pleased to read your insightful review, thank you very much for the generous review, God bless you.
Comment from mohit_sharma
good one....i loved reading this....too good.....last stanza needs a minute revision....
Fools wagging tongues join the circus;
Caesars Monarchs and Brutus,
Accomplices that are donning god
launches humanity on heavenly abode.
rest is fine.....excellent
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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good one....i loved reading this....too good.....last stanza needs a minute revision....
Fools wagging tongues join the circus;
Caesars Monarchs and Brutus,
Accomplices that are donning god
launches humanity on heavenly abode.
rest is fine.....excellent
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Hello mohit and welcome to the site. Thanks for stopping by, appreciate your time and the kind suggestion. However, one thing we have to realize is to maintain the cadence, rhyme/rhythm in poetry and if I use your suggestion, that would increase the syllable count in both lines and spoil the rhythm of the poem; and please check the site's rules/guidelines when you read/review and rate work, you don't give less than five if the poem meets the requirements of being a poem, i.e., in terms of its mechanics; again, welcome and good luck.
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Thanks for the welcome note Mohd. Kamran.....but the total syllable count is still 34........In my review two times i have mentioned that its very good....I don't know what has been reflected at your end through my rating...and in the rules/regulations it has also been stated that you cannot object about the reviewer's rating..Thanks for welcome note....Thanks for replying....all the very best....
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You are missing the point Mohit, each line is eight syllables, i.e., the lines are measured/patterned and or metered, hope that helps; and I am not objecting, just trying to enlighten you my friend, good luck.
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Thank u Mohd. Kamran....I was not aware of this....i assumed it to be in free style....okay.....good luck to u too.....all the best
Comment from Patti R.
And I think we all know she is the figurehead: the living facade. Is it fair to nail her to the cross? She, too knows that all she can do is stand in a lovely suit and wave. She has had no power since her day one. Perhaps to criticize the woman is harsh, let's criticize her house, her government, there is the evil, blind, hopelessness. Just my humble opinion. Good write.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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And I think we all know she is the figurehead: the living facade. Is it fair to nail her to the cross? She, too knows that all she can do is stand in a lovely suit and wave. She has had no power since her day one. Perhaps to criticize the woman is harsh, let's criticize her house, her government, there is the evil, blind, hopelessness. Just my humble opinion. Good write.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Patti my friend, I thank you for sharing your insights, no offense to her, but the reflections are upon the dynasty/monarchy; appreciate your time my friend, thank you very much.
