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Sir Nigel's Sins

A story, in many acts.

55 total reviews 
Comment from writeapoem
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I truly like the suspense and the time well spent reading this story in a poem I was hoping for a revealing of who done the killing. But the rhyme and style and the characters well described, those who lied, or given suspicion, even from the kitchen. All the best

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. I too have been off site for months and just checked back to make sure I hadn't been ousted for non-payment. I am so glad that the piece left you wanting. But while the poem is based on the game of Clue, I didn't want to show all the cards. The denouement missing, the reader to decide whodunit and visualize the act. I am so glad you liked it and hope you will read more of my musings. I do hope to get back to writing this winter when life at my B & B slows down. - Wendy
Comment from MumEsGirl
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This was a really fun read. I love the idea of all the guests having a reason for bumping the old fellow off. It reminds me of a game called cluedo that my friend used to play.

Great work
hugs
kate

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
Comment from grassroots08
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Rosehill,
This was quite an undertaking, and I'm sure it didn't happen in one sitting. I would have gone over this countless times, 'til I was sure it would work. I didn't see the end coming with the limerick shorts repeated, but then the end came nicely I had thought.
Also Limericks are a tough do, but you did it many times. Cheers, Don

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Good Morning,
    Thank you for taking precious time from your own work to read and review this. I had hoped readers would have almost as much fun as I did in the writing of it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head and the characters began screaming to be let out. Alas, It would seem that they have escaped without telling me who did it. Actually, the bulk of it was written rather quickly. This was one of those rare times when the muse was chattering so rapidly I could barely keep up with her. But I am a real stickler when it comes to rhyme and rhythm. Very OCD about it--that and finding the perfect word. What took hours was the fine tuning; shoving these nasty people into their proper place while they tried to run off to another room. Professor Plum and his revolver in the dining room in particular were very fond of trying to do their own tap dance while I tried to count beats. Thanks again for the sixth. It is much appreciated.
reply by grassroots08 on 18-Jun-2012
    Much deserved six, and you so hard at work. Cheers, Don
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
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Great historical feel to this one. Really enjoyed the characterization of Sir Nigel. Way to go! Thanks for sharing this here.

keep going...

cheers
js

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
reply by xxjsfuncxxxity on 18-Jun-2012
    Haha! that's great! Inspiration comes in unexpected forms. Keep going... cheers!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, rosehill, you did a great job writing this cute little poem about the murder and everybody's reason for wanting to do the deed. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi rosehill,

You have written a fine poem for the share a story contest. I love the rhyme, the expressive word choices and the theme. This was such a fun poem to read and I wish you the best of luck in the contest....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
Comment from Cragler
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A wonderful use of the players in your subject. The poem has a delightful tale that rhymes and flows well. The reader is left to ponder who did it. Well done

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
Comment from nomi338
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Can anyone say CLUE? This delightful poem reminds me of the game clue and that is a definite complement. It had me laughing a lot. You are to be commended for keeping the names and details straight. I could never have pulled a story this complex off. This is an excellent story/poem.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it. Thanks for the sixth, it is really appreciated.
Comment from sunnilicious
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Sir Nigel's Sins by rosehill

Mystery and Crime in limericks and poetry. This is a first read for me. It came out quite nice. Subtle rhymes. Good story. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it. Thanks for the sixth. It is much appreciated.
Comment from RaymondJohn
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I haven't played clue in ages, and this was fun. I enjoyed the clues, and multiple suspects. If Sir Nigel had suffered all the things that happened to him, it would be next to impossible to determine who had killed him. Enjoyable read. Ray.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2012


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
    Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.