Gliding Wings
Designer or Shape Poem72 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I had to read it through twice to find out the correct way to read it. It does tell us about how beautiful a soaring bird looks. I think mustaches is a good metaphor for wings.
I don't think it looks like birds. The dots kind of take away from the picture.
Are you saying the picture of wings isn't one you chose. It does match the poem though.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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I had to read it through twice to find out the correct way to read it. It does tell us about how beautiful a soaring bird looks. I think mustaches is a good metaphor for wings.
I don't think it looks like birds. The dots kind of take away from the picture.
Are you saying the picture of wings isn't one you chose. It does match the poem though.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from Permelia
This is one of the most intriguing poems I have ever read and you are also an artist as well as a poet to have designed this poem the way you did. It is beautiful!
reply by the author on 24-May-2012
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This is one of the most intriguing poems I have ever read and you are also an artist as well as a poet to have designed this poem the way you did. It is beautiful!
Comment Written 23-May-2012
reply by the author on 24-May-2012
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Bless You My Friend! I have done others like this and have posted them here as well. I wanted to do more than a shape poem! I wanted the poem itself to really show off the shape.Right now I'm working on a butterfly I hope to post soon. Thanks for the wonderful review Permelia! Hugs, Helvi
Comment from Janet Foor
I loved your creative designer poem, "Gliding Wings". I think you have mastered the form beautifully. Your words and the form matched perfectly. Very nicely done .
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I loved your creative designer poem, "Gliding Wings". I think you have mastered the form beautifully. Your words and the form matched perfectly. Very nicely done .
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from szavoda
The image is perfect. I haven't seen too many poems that take the shape of the subject itself. I thought it added so much to it.
you have a way with words, certainly. I love "Cobalt Sky" it's unique and does the job here.
Excellent job. Beautiful poem, in words and picture.
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The image is perfect. I haven't seen too many poems that take the shape of the subject itself. I thought it added so much to it.
you have a way with words, certainly. I love "Cobalt Sky" it's unique and does the job here.
Excellent job. Beautiful poem, in words and picture.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from justchillin
YOur poem is enchanting, and yes I am glad I stopped by, A joy to read. I love the style of the poem that you have designed and create with such talent. Beautifully described, great imagery. Well done x
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YOur poem is enchanting, and yes I am glad I stopped by, A joy to read. I love the style of the poem that you have designed and create with such talent. Beautifully described, great imagery. Well done x
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from jaeladarling
I used to do shape poems in high school. They were nearly as beautiful as this one! I love all types of birds (we have a family perched on a light just outside a side door), so this was an especially brilliant poem for me. Your words flow nicely, both in poetic style and artistic format. Love this! Thanks for sharing!
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I used to do shape poems in high school. They were nearly as beautiful as this one! I love all types of birds (we have a family perched on a light just outside a side door), so this was an especially brilliant poem for me. Your words flow nicely, both in poetic style and artistic format. Love this! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from mermaids
THey rule the blue of heaven's space is a line that makes me feel good. It definately describes the birds. Ia dmire your creativity and the beautiful artistic design of the poem. This is not any easy form to write,I tried before and was not successful.
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THey rule the blue of heaven's space is a line that makes me feel good. It definately describes the birds. Ia dmire your creativity and the beautiful artistic design of the poem. This is not any easy form to write,I tried before and was not successful.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from linsbm
This is very unique and I admire your extra artful creativeness. You printed a vivid imagery in the minds of readers. Thoughts flow smoothly and well chosen words and vocabulary that fits into your nice presentation. A well written designer poem, as you call it. Thanks for sharing.
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This is very unique and I admire your extra artful creativeness. You printed a vivid imagery in the minds of readers. Thoughts flow smoothly and well chosen words and vocabulary that fits into your nice presentation. A well written designer poem, as you call it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
Comment from J. P. Egry
A lovely poem with a beautiful image. I know you worked hard on this one. I've done a few "shape" poems---none as nice as this one---and I can't imagine myself trying to get it right on Fan Story. I don't even know what the alternative editor is or how to use it.
Your images with the blue and white are stunning. And of course the poem reads perfectly just as a straight poem with fine meter and rhyme, but I'm glad you added the design. I think it would make an elegant cover design for a book of your poems.
reply by the author on 22-May-2012
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A lovely poem with a beautiful image. I know you worked hard on this one. I've done a few "shape" poems---none as nice as this one---and I can't imagine myself trying to get it right on Fan Story. I don't even know what the alternative editor is or how to use it.
Your images with the blue and white are stunning. And of course the poem reads perfectly just as a straight poem with fine meter and rhyme, but I'm glad you added the design. I think it would make an elegant cover design for a book of your poems.
Comment Written 22-May-2012
reply by the author on 22-May-2012
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J.P, A LOT of people have blessed me with a six for this poem and I am extremely honored by that, but with your review I'm turning things around! I'm giving YOU six stars for the lovely review you wrote. Your review and comment at the end really touched me! THank you for REALLY making my day! Hugs and Smiles, :o) Helvi
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You do deserve a six and I was remiss there---not sure if I have one to give, but thank you so much for the compliments about my review. I always try to write what I feel about a piece, and Gliding Wings made me soar with the winged ones.
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I always try to write the feelings I get from each piece I read too!I know how much it means to the writer.
Knowing I made you soar with my poem makes me beyond happy! I'm SO glad YOU enjoyed it! :o) Helvi
Comment from Aletheia(2)
This is a beautiful poem, and I'm very impressed with the form. Your gentle words match the beauty of the subject matter. Very nice. I enjoyed it. Anabelly
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This is a beautiful poem, and I'm very impressed with the form. Your gentle words match the beauty of the subject matter. Very nice. I enjoyed it. Anabelly
Comment Written 22-May-2012
