Such is Life
Edward (Ned) Kelly. Australia's famous bushranger.19 total reviews
Comment from LAFraser
Dear Kace, it's been a pleasure reading your version of the last words of Ned Kelly. I've always felt he got the short end of the stick. "Ah, such is life." A great write, my friend. Have a wonderful day across the pond.
~Lisa
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Dear Kace, it's been a pleasure reading your version of the last words of Ned Kelly. I've always felt he got the short end of the stick. "Ah, such is life." A great write, my friend. Have a wonderful day across the pond.
~Lisa
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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G'day Lisa, gosh that was a long time ago that I wrote that story! Thanks so much for taking the time to read. Blessings, Kace.
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You're welcome, Kace. I love reading your stories of Australia. I hope you have a wonderful weekend, my friend. Blessings, Lisa
Comment from tinams
This is very well written entry to the Sentence Starts the Story Competition. You have done a great job writing about the man who was sentenced to death and maintained his innocence. i enjoyed reading this, good luck.:) Tina
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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This is very well written entry to the Sentence Starts the Story Competition. You have done a great job writing about the man who was sentenced to death and maintained his innocence. i enjoyed reading this, good luck.:) Tina
Comment Written 11-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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Tina, Thanks so much for reading; glad you like our history. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Mithma
This is a nice story. well said. One takes pity on Ned. Its very good to portray the whole story from his point of view. It seems these type of situations were common those days. Like Robin Hood
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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This is a nice story. well said. One takes pity on Ned. Its very good to portray the whole story from his point of view. It seems these type of situations were common those days. Like Robin Hood
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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Mithma, Thanks so much for reading, glad you like our history. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
Ned knew the cell was eight feet wide and six feet long, - replace the comma with a period or a semicolon.
The light from a single candle lit the walkway to his cell, the - use a period there
Father Kelly was Ned's uncle, and - add comma
The visit was important to Ned, on the morrow - use a semicolon or period there
You get into Ned's innermost thoughts and emotions well
Excellent description of setting
Good natural-sounding dialogue
Thank you, Father - add comma for direct address
Things got out of hand and all my friends joined in, - use a period
It was self defense, Father -add comma for direct address
He relates the back story well
Edward Kelly, you have been found - add comma
Time's up,Ned - add comma
He don't need no support, Father - add comma
Father Kelly held fast to Ned, he knew - change comma to period
Edward Kelly, on this day - add comma
The warden nodded to the executioner, and - add comma
How awful that he was cut apart like that. One would think executing him was enough...
You do a good job of being balanced and realistic - in showing he was no monster but also in showing he was no choir boy. Brooke
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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Ned knew the cell was eight feet wide and six feet long, - replace the comma with a period or a semicolon.
The light from a single candle lit the walkway to his cell, the - use a period there
Father Kelly was Ned's uncle, and - add comma
The visit was important to Ned, on the morrow - use a semicolon or period there
You get into Ned's innermost thoughts and emotions well
Excellent description of setting
Good natural-sounding dialogue
Thank you, Father - add comma for direct address
Things got out of hand and all my friends joined in, - use a period
It was self defense, Father -add comma for direct address
He relates the back story well
Edward Kelly, you have been found - add comma
Time's up,Ned - add comma
He don't need no support, Father - add comma
Father Kelly held fast to Ned, he knew - change comma to period
Edward Kelly, on this day - add comma
The warden nodded to the executioner, and - add comma
How awful that he was cut apart like that. One would think executing him was enough...
You do a good job of being balanced and realistic - in showing he was no monster but also in showing he was no choir boy. Brooke
Comment Written 10-May-2012
reply by the author on 11-May-2012
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Brooke, Thanks so much for vetting this story, I do have trouble with punctuation. Glad you like the story; our history. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from Ted S.
Very well told. I enjoyed the use of Australian grammar, it added to the texture of the story. It sounds like Ned was guilty of some crimes, if not the murder of Lonigan. Yet, like we do here in the states, gang members from that period of time are often made out to be folk heroes.
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Very well told. I enjoyed the use of Australian grammar, it added to the texture of the story. It sounds like Ned was guilty of some crimes, if not the murder of Lonigan. Yet, like we do here in the states, gang members from that period of time are often made out to be folk heroes.
Comment Written 09-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Ted, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed our history. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from fionageorge
Kay, my friend, what a wonderful condensed story about the life and death of our famous Ned Kelly. You have told it in such an interesting way, which will keep readers wanting to know more, especially those who have never heard of our Australian bushranger and his family. Thanks for putting it out there, and for doing it in such a well written piece.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxxxx
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Kay, my friend, what a wonderful condensed story about the life and death of our famous Ned Kelly. You have told it in such an interesting way, which will keep readers wanting to know more, especially those who have never heard of our Australian bushranger and his family. Thanks for putting it out there, and for doing it in such a well written piece.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxxxx
Comment Written 09-May-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Hello my freezing friend in Tassie! Glad you liked the condensed version. Gotta let 'em know about our history. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from jlsavell
Kay, you are a storyteller of all storytellers. Again the site will not allow me to give you a six and I do not understand it. I have only given one this week and I do not believe I have given you one in a month. I must investigate this. As for the story, very well written. I could envision the whole conversation. Please never stop writing, you are so gifted my friend.. jimi
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Kay, you are a storyteller of all storytellers. Again the site will not allow me to give you a six and I do not understand it. I have only given one this week and I do not believe I have given you one in a month. I must investigate this. As for the story, very well written. I could envision the whole conversation. Please never stop writing, you are so gifted my friend.. jimi
Comment Written 08-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Bless you Jimi. I love to tell tales about our country. So pleased that you enjoyed. Love, Kace.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Kace,
Your notes are so interesting and your have written this story with great skill. I felt to sorry for Ned as I read your words. He may not have been the most stellar man but he killed in self defense and shouldn't have been put to death for that. I wonder what happened to his head? Well done and good luck in the contest. The site won't let me give you a six that this write deserves!...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Hi Kace,
Your notes are so interesting and your have written this story with great skill. I felt to sorry for Ned as I read your words. He may not have been the most stellar man but he killed in self defense and shouldn't have been put to death for that. I wonder what happened to his head? Well done and good luck in the contest. The site won't let me give you a six that this write deserves!...blessings, chey
Comment Written 08-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Chey, Thank you so much for reading, glad you found it interesting. Love, K.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Aussie ....
What you have written here makes for interesting, though sad reading. In several places, you have put commas where fullstops are indicated to be followed by new sentences.
Whenever I read or hear of such things happening, I always think ... "He was some Mother's son" ... and my heart reaches out to her with sympathy.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Hullo Aussie ....
What you have written here makes for interesting, though sad reading. In several places, you have put commas where fullstops are indicated to be followed by new sentences.
Whenever I read or hear of such things happening, I always think ... "He was some Mother's son" ... and my heart reaches out to her with sympathy.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 08-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Bless you my friend, glad you found the history interesting. Love, K.
Comment from MumEsGirl
This was a very well written story which seems to have a lot of factual detail in it.
Many thanks for the authors notes which add authenticity to the work
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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This was a very well written story which seems to have a lot of factual detail in it.
Many thanks for the authors notes which add authenticity to the work
hugs
kate
Comment Written 08-May-2012
reply by the author on 09-May-2012
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Hello Kate, Thanks so much for reading, glad you liked the story. Blessings, K.
