Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Brook's Best Offer by BROOK ANNE"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
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Comment from Allezw2
Lady Alaskastory,
A nice touch with the dialogue and Brook's internal musings. AS I said before, it is interesting to read of this sport and feel a certain familiarity with it through these individuals you characterize.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
For your consideration:
- Full chest - Um well, forgive me if I seem to devolve to a sexist comment, however I always thought of men as having broad chests; well-endowed women as filling their clothes.
- Not everyone understands the prevalence of crew cab trucks as most PUs only have two doors.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Lady Alaskastory,
A nice touch with the dialogue and Brook's internal musings. AS I said before, it is interesting to read of this sport and feel a certain familiarity with it through these individuals you characterize.
Nicely done,
Fantasist
For your consideration:
- Full chest - Um well, forgive me if I seem to devolve to a sexist comment, however I always thought of men as having broad chests; well-endowed women as filling their clothes.
- Not everyone understands the prevalence of crew cab trucks as most PUs only have two doors.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thanks for the tips and for taking time to read and review this chapter. I appreciate your comments so much. Marie
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You're quite welcome. It is an exciting story.
Comment from guinea
Sounds like a good story . sled dogs are a beautiful dog to me. I think your story is great. look forward to reading more. good writing.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Sounds like a good story . sled dogs are a beautiful dog to me. I think your story is great. look forward to reading more. good writing.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for giving this chapter your time to read and review. Marie
Comment from Writingfundimension
I love the integrity of your protagonist, Alaskastory. What a generous gesture on her part to move into another category in order for her 'rival' to gain the use of two more dogs. This story has a great moral timbre to it. A great read, my friend.
Blessings, Bev
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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I love the integrity of your protagonist, Alaskastory. What a generous gesture on her part to move into another category in order for her 'rival' to gain the use of two more dogs. This story has a great moral timbre to it. A great read, my friend.
Blessings, Bev
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Your comments and fine review are inspiring, Bev. Maybe I'll get to the end of this novella soon. Many thanks! Marie
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Oh, take your time, Marie. I'm enjoying the ride along :) Xx Bev
Comment from forestport12
Very descriptive from the start Marie. You employ strong verbs with sensory descriptions as good as anybody. Yet what you write is liked by most ages and it is fresh, original and never disappoints. Not to mention that we learn from this and get more than mere entertainment, we are educated. Stan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Very descriptive from the start Marie. You employ strong verbs with sensory descriptions as good as anybody. Yet what you write is liked by most ages and it is fresh, original and never disappoints. Not to mention that we learn from this and get more than mere entertainment, we are educated. Stan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much, Stan. It's wonderful of you to keep following this story that I'm so slow to post chapters. You're much appreciated! Marie
Comment from misscookie
This is a marvelous chapter. And the story is very well written and easy for readers to read and understand. You had my attentuion from the first line to the last. there was ne ver a dull moment.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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This is a marvelous chapter. And the story is very well written and easy for readers to read and understand. You had my attentuion from the first line to the last. there was ne ver a dull moment.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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You comments and review are a delight, misscookie. Thanks for giving this chapter your time and a review. Marie
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My pleasure.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
You use very descriptive language to lend for great imagery. I really followed this piece well, especially with the dialogue. Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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You use very descriptive language to lend for great imagery. I really followed this piece well, especially with the dialogue. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for inspiring me to carry on with the next chapter. Very nice of you to give this one your time and fun review. Marie
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
this is so well written, making a most
enjoyable read.
I wonder if my fresh-brushed hair distracts him[.](?) I took this as a question
He nods his head [nods] but doesn't bother to speak - lose 2nd "nods"
Well-penned, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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this is so well written, making a most
enjoyable read.
I wonder if my fresh-brushed hair distracts him[.](?) I took this as a question
He nods his head [nods] but doesn't bother to speak - lose 2nd "nods"
Well-penned, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Thanks for catching the 'nods', Margaret. I appreciate the time and help you've given me with this chapter. Marie
Comment from irishauthorme
Had to fire my six-gun for this chapter, the interplay between Brook and James was some of your best writing. The chapter was well-coordinated, with everything that happened pertinent to the story. Brook's feelings and confusion were well told, and accurately reflect the emotions of a teen-age girl caught between her reason and her heart.
Very good work!
irish
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Had to fire my six-gun for this chapter, the interplay between Brook and James was some of your best writing. The chapter was well-coordinated, with everything that happened pertinent to the story. Brook's feelings and confusion were well told, and accurately reflect the emotions of a teen-age girl caught between her reason and her heart.
Very good work!
irish
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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You continue to inspire me, Irish!! Now, I get going on the next chapter. Thanks for taking time to read and review this chapter. luv, Marie
Comment from Shirley McLain
I do love this story and look forward to reading more. You do such a great job with your writing and it draws me right into the story.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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I do love this story and look forward to reading more. You do such a great job with your writing and it draws me right into the story.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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It's a delighful thought that you are drawn to the story, Shirley. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Marie
Comment from tinams
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. It is well written and flows nicely. The picture you chose to accompany your story is picture perfect :) Tina
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. It is well written and flows nicely. The picture you chose to accompany your story is picture perfect :) Tina
Comment Written 28-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Isn't it great fun to be able to pick FanArt pictures for our stories? I like this one a lot too, Tina. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter.
