Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought this a nice little tale very well written piece, not hard to follow at all. I think you should use the H on his good picture and good message should resonate with many no errors. No typo's
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I thought this a nice little tale very well written piece, not hard to follow at all. I think you should use the H on his good picture and good message should resonate with many no errors. No typo's
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Alexander, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome
Comment from Malerie
Very nice, I really like this piece and the artwork you selected was made for this piece. Each line really adds to this piece. I like the first line "Day closes up her shop each night to take her inventory." It pulled me in right away. Great poem; great flow. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Very nice, I really like this piece and the artwork you selected was made for this piece. Each line really adds to this piece. I like the first line "Day closes up her shop each night to take her inventory." It pulled me in right away. Great poem; great flow. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Malerie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice personification of the sun and images of sunset. I like the metaphor of the sun being stored at night. Sometimes it seems like that during the weeks of cloudy weather. I also like the crimson ink as if it is just a drawing and not real.
The words echo the artwork well.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Nice personification of the sun and images of sunset. I like the metaphor of the sun being stored at night. Sometimes it seems like that during the weeks of cloudy weather. I also like the crimson ink as if it is just a drawing and not real.
The words echo the artwork well.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Dragonpoet, thank you so very much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork uou picked for your poerm and it's perfecty looking at the sunset or sun go down it told it all.
I enjoyed readi ng your poem and I loved how your poem flowed.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I love the artwork uou picked for your poerm and it's perfecty looking at the sunset or sun go down it told it all.
I enjoyed readi ng your poem and I loved how your poem flowed.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Miss Cookie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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My pleasure.
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work and words written here Brooke.
I like sunny days but not everyday.
I burn very easily but love to see the sun shine.
We would be lost without the sun
Very hot days I don't like as I burn easily.
The very hot days fires tend to start up somewhere.
Annie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I love the art work and words written here Brooke.
I like sunny days but not everyday.
I burn very easily but love to see the sun shine.
We would be lost without the sun
Very hot days I don't like as I burn easily.
The very hot days fires tend to start up somewhere.
Annie
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Annie, Thank you so very much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hey Brooke
You've the writer's touch, for sure
and I enjoyed this poem. I love sunsets
and sunrises. Your poem personifies the
sun perfectly.
Well done
R
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hey Brooke
You've the writer's touch, for sure
and I enjoyed this poem. I love sunsets
and sunrises. Your poem personifies the
sun perfectly.
Well done
R
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Ray, it is so good to hear from you. I hope you have a wonderful Easter. Thanks so much for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
And, after all, it's sunlight
That will make the flowers grow
And, without flowers
Where would she be?
A certain gal I know.
With only the kindest thoughts
Reg
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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And, after all, it's sunlight
That will make the flowers grow
And, without flowers
Where would she be?
A certain gal I know.
With only the kindest thoughts
Reg
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Reg, thank you so very much for you lovely comments, my friend : -) Brooke
Comment from ShekinahGlory
The personification of Day and Sun is awesome! The repeating of Day closes up her shop makes the poem succinct and tidy...the introduction and summary lends well and reiterates the opening of the shop each morning and night. I love the alternating rhyme of each second and fourth line. Great image of the Sun signing his name in crimson, as well as a great allusion to Christ! Also, I love the idea that Day has a store, and the Sun is its hottest commodity that cannot remain on the shelves. And the picturesque, breath-taking view of the sun rising each day is extraordinary! As always, you have done a splendid job at staying true to form and providing us with another great work of poetry!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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The personification of Day and Sun is awesome! The repeating of Day closes up her shop makes the poem succinct and tidy...the introduction and summary lends well and reiterates the opening of the shop each morning and night. I love the alternating rhyme of each second and fourth line. Great image of the Sun signing his name in crimson, as well as a great allusion to Christ! Also, I love the idea that Day has a store, and the Sun is its hottest commodity that cannot remain on the shelves. And the picturesque, breath-taking view of the sun rising each day is extraordinary! As always, you have done a splendid job at staying true to form and providing us with another great work of poetry!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Shekinah Glory, thank you so very much for your most thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from rightforyou
Hello Brooke
Wonderful job on this poem as well as the words selected making this a poem to ponder..The day closes up her shop each night..Nice way to to end the day ...Well Done ...Ron
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hello Brooke
Wonderful job on this poem as well as the words selected making this a poem to ponder..The day closes up her shop each night..Nice way to to end the day ...Well Done ...Ron
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, Ron :-) Brooke
Comment from beadyredeyes
Beautiful poem!
The personification is wonderful here. The distinction between the day (the shopkeeper) and the sun (a temperamental ware) creates a lovely, drama.
The third stanza's description is simply breathtaking!
Great job. :D
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Beautiful poem!
The personification is wonderful here. The distinction between the day (the shopkeeper) and the sun (a temperamental ware) creates a lovely, drama.
The third stanza's description is simply breathtaking!
Great job. :D
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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beadyredeyes, thank you so very much for your gracious comments and for your wonderfully generous exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
