Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from Mastery
Another fine offering, Brooke. It seems somewhat more appropriate with Easter just around the corner, doesn't it? Your visuals with words are superb as always. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Another fine offering, Brooke. It seems somewhat more appropriate with Easter just around the corner, doesn't it? Your visuals with words are superb as always. Bob
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Bob, thanks so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Idamarty
Absolutely loved this one. So full of beautiful images and colors. How true...the sun signs his name in the promise of his return...loved your words...thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Absolutely loved this one. So full of beautiful images and colors. How true...the sun signs his name in the promise of his return...loved your words...thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Idamarty, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem and for your generous exceptional rating. I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
The six is because I love the analogy, and even envied it as I am still cleaning up the shop. My days are more like Pink Floyd's song called, "Time:"
"And you run and you run to catch up with the sun, but it's sinking And racing around to come up behind you again
The sun is the same in the relative way, but you're older
And shorter of breath and one day closer to death."
So this poem is actually a stark realization for me, as I get to enjoy both day and night between the ticks, tocks and beats. Well written, nice analogy and I feel you captured a wonderful mood.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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The six is because I love the analogy, and even envied it as I am still cleaning up the shop. My days are more like Pink Floyd's song called, "Time:"
"And you run and you run to catch up with the sun, but it's sinking And racing around to come up behind you again
The sun is the same in the relative way, but you're older
And shorter of breath and one day closer to death."
So this poem is actually a stark realization for me, as I get to enjoy both day and night between the ticks, tocks and beats. Well written, nice analogy and I feel you captured a wonderful mood.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Mike, thank you so very much for your gracious comments and your generous exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
What a lovely central metaphor, encompassing nature, humanity, and our daily lives to their mutual benefit. This is gorgeous, Brooke, and I very much enjoyed reading it :-).
Mike
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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What a lovely central metaphor, encompassing nature, humanity, and our daily lives to their mutual benefit. This is gorgeous, Brooke, and I very much enjoyed reading it :-).
Mike
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Mike, thank you so very much, my friend, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Eaglewolf
Beautiful poem. The imagery is wonderful. It makes you wonder what's going on after the sun's disappeared over the horizon. Is she cashing out her drawer and making sure it's balanced before she heads onwards to light up someone else's day?
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Beautiful poem. The imagery is wonderful. It makes you wonder what's going on after the sun's disappeared over the horizon. Is she cashing out her drawer and making sure it's balanced before she heads onwards to light up someone else's day?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Eaglewolf, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from wan890
This is a beautiful poem. I like the thought of day closing her shop each night. You should put together a book of poetry.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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This is a beautiful poem. I like the thought of day closing her shop each night. You should put together a book of poetry.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Wan, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and encouraging review : -) Brooke
Comment from The Stranger
We run and we run to catch up with the sun, but its sinking,
racing around to creep up behind us again,
the sun is the same in a relative waym but we're older, shorter of breath and one day closer to death....
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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We run and we run to catch up with the sun, but its sinking,
racing around to creep up behind us again,
the sun is the same in a relative waym but we're older, shorter of breath and one day closer to death....
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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The Stranger, thank you for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
What a beautiful piece! I love sunsets and sun rises... So, the photo is just like a precious present for me...I Really enjoyed this sweet and lovely poem.
Have a Happy Easter time!
:)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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What a beautiful piece! I love sunsets and sun rises... So, the photo is just like a precious present for me...I Really enjoyed this sweet and lovely poem.
Have a Happy Easter time!
:)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Aurora, thank you so very much, and Happy Easter to you :-) Brooke
Comment from Aunt Mame
This picture is certainly a part of the poem. I wondered whether it was in the tropics - what a great idea of 'shutting up shop'! Really enjoyed reading this - terrific!
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This picture is certainly a part of the poem. I wondered whether it was in the tropics - what a great idea of 'shutting up shop'! Really enjoyed reading this - terrific!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Aunt Mame, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
A breath-taking picture you have there. Another brilliant masterpiece from you. I personally think that this is very sweet and serene. Thanks for posting
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A breath-taking picture you have there. Another brilliant masterpiece from you. I personally think that this is very sweet and serene. Thanks for posting
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Asyraf, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
