Day Closes Up Her Shop
quatrains in 8/7/8/7209 total reviews
Comment from J.Byers
I liked the use of imagery and metaphor in this poem, it flowed well and the rhyming was excellent, not forced. I could see 'Day' as an older woman with grey hair trying to force the gleaming sun into a box. I know your poem is not meant to be interpreted literally, but this is an image I have taken from it. Well done.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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I liked the use of imagery and metaphor in this poem, it flowed well and the rhyming was excellent, not forced. I could see 'Day' as an older woman with grey hair trying to force the gleaming sun into a box. I know your poem is not meant to be interpreted literally, but this is an image I have taken from it. Well done.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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J, thank you so very much for your thoughtful comments and for your wonderfully generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Each day is likened to a shop where our "Transactions" decide if it is prfitable, or not. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Each day is likened to a shop where our "Transactions" decide if it is prfitable, or not. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Charlie, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Diny
Well I just love sunsets and sun rises so this poetic expressions ate just as beautiful as the real thing! Great poem, Brooke you just plain rock! Write on as always, Di
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Well I just love sunsets and sun rises so this poetic expressions ate just as beautiful as the real thing! Great poem, Brooke you just plain rock! Write on as always, Di
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
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Di, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Chris Tee
This is a brilliant personification of dun and day that you have composed here Brooke. Well done indeed with this excellent and clever poem ma'am.
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This is a brilliant personification of dun and day that you have composed here Brooke. Well done indeed with this excellent and clever poem ma'am.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
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Chris, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review. Brooke
Comment from Merajul
You have drawn a very good comparison in your poetry.The words are simple , easy to understand and comparison appropriate.Nice Work!
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You have drawn a very good comparison in your poetry.The words are simple , easy to understand and comparison appropriate.Nice Work!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
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Merajul, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from pugdogy
excellent, I really enjoyed reading this piece of work. using the day and night and the sun with it being a little shop was very imaginative.
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excellent, I really enjoyed reading this piece of work. using the day and night and the sun with it being a little shop was very imaginative.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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pugdogy, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Thanks for the lovely image of the close of the day and the promise it brings of refreshment and renewal in preparation for the next.
As usual you paint quite an image with your words.
I hope you have a happy and blessed Easter. I trust all is still well with the expected grandchild?
Patrick
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hi Brooke,
Thanks for the lovely image of the close of the day and the promise it brings of refreshment and renewal in preparation for the next.
As usual you paint quite an image with your words.
I hope you have a happy and blessed Easter. I trust all is still well with the expected grandchild?
Patrick
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Patrick, thank you so much for your review. I wish you a blessed Easter too. The grandbaby is due in one month, and he is doing well :-) Brooke
Comment from Enrique28
A fine little verse about the inexorable presence of the sun. Our giver of life and incessant marker of time in a poetic allusion to God's creation. We are not abandoned! Wonderfully presented, and subtle enough for universal appreciation.
Enrique
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A fine little verse about the inexorable presence of the sun. Our giver of life and incessant marker of time in a poetic allusion to God's creation. We are not abandoned! Wonderfully presented, and subtle enough for universal appreciation.
Enrique
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Enrique, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
A very nice personification of the sun. It is a great picture that lends itself nicely to your work. It's after midnight here so I'd best be going to bed (his light is soon returning) Good stuff. Bill
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A very nice personification of the sun. It is a great picture that lends itself nicely to your work. It's after midnight here so I'd best be going to bed (his light is soon returning) Good stuff. Bill
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
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Bill, thank you so very much for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
I loved this poem and the picture that you chose. The imagery was captivating. "Day closes up her shop each night", is just lovely wording.
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I loved this poem and the picture that you chose. The imagery was captivating. "Day closes up her shop each night", is just lovely wording.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Jmf, thank you so very much for your gracious and encouraging review and your generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
