Day Closes Up Her Shop
quatrains in 8/7/8/7209 total reviews
Comment from tinams
This is another wonderful poem Brooke. I love the comparison of sunset to the closing of a shop at end of day. Glorious picture too :) Tina
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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This is another wonderful poem Brooke. I love the comparison of sunset to the closing of a shop at end of day. Glorious picture too :) Tina
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Tina, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dustybones
Great poem and I like the words too. The middle verse, who is he? I assume this is tied into Easter somehow. The crimson ink has me too. Maybe I am half awake. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Great poem and I like the words too. The middle verse, who is he? I assume this is tied into Easter somehow. The crimson ink has me too. Maybe I am half awake. :-)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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In the middle he is the Sun, personified. Nope, has nothing to do with Easter. It's just about sunset. Thanks for reviewing, Dusty :-) Brooke
Comment from HPicasso
The personification is great. Nice rhyme pattern.
This is a very original approach to the days ending.
The artwork is magnificant, it brings such a sense of warmth to the poem.
It is a great write in quatrains that tells of the sun and where she goes at night. Congratulation!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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The personification is great. Nice rhyme pattern.
This is a very original approach to the days ending.
The artwork is magnificant, it brings such a sense of warmth to the poem.
It is a great write in quatrains that tells of the sun and where she goes at night. Congratulation!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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HPicasso, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A playful poem of faith personifying Day as a shopkeeper and the Sun as her product - manufactured by God. Well done, Brooke. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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A playful poem of faith personifying Day as a shopkeeper and the Sun as her product - manufactured by God. Well done, Brooke. :) Nancy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Nancy, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Herb
very good.
Only you could weave a shop simile into a poem about the dawn. But it worked.
He signs his name in crimson ink
until the skies are burning, - Loved this line.
Peter
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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very good.
Only you could weave a shop simile into a poem about the dawn. But it worked.
He signs his name in crimson ink
until the skies are burning, - Loved this line.
Peter
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Peter, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from JennieClare
Love this way of thinking about the sun at the close of the day. What is really mind blowing thought is that as it shuts up shop in one place it's opening in another! Jenniexx
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Love this way of thinking about the sun at the close of the day. What is really mind blowing thought is that as it shuts up shop in one place it's opening in another! Jenniexx
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Jennie, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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my pleasure. Jenniex
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
He signs his name in crimson ink <<< Awesome metaphor! Superb! Makes the poem! And of course your point is obvious so you need not state that the sun is "working" elsewhere while we sleep here.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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He signs his name in crimson ink <<< Awesome metaphor! Superb! Makes the poem! And of course your point is obvious so you need not state that the sun is "working" elsewhere while we sleep here.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Phyllis, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
I guess we can't put life on hold, as much as we'd like to at times. "for Sun cannot be long consigned to shelves designed for storing." Great artwork, Brooke. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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I guess we can't put life on hold, as much as we'd like to at times. "for Sun cannot be long consigned to shelves designed for storing." Great artwork, Brooke. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Adrienne, thanks so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Harlequin
Your beautifully written poem, full of wonderful images reminded me of a poetic style called 'frame technique'. It is a not too well known 19th century technique when the 1st and last stanza of a poem is very similar. Your poem had a couple similar elements that made the poem even more exciting for me.
:) Ed
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Your beautifully written poem, full of wonderful images reminded me of a poetic style called 'frame technique'. It is a not too well known 19th century technique when the 1st and last stanza of a poem is very similar. Your poem had a couple similar elements that made the poem even more exciting for me.
:) Ed
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Ed, thank you so very much for your thoughtful reading of this poem and its composition :-) Brooke
Comment from Hareem.S
This is so beautiful indeed. I love the metaphors and the personification you have used here, such a melodious and refreshing poem. Enjoyed it a lot.
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This is so beautiful indeed. I love the metaphors and the personification you have used here, such a melodious and refreshing poem. Enjoyed it a lot.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Hareem, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review. I also very much appreciate your gracious and generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
