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An Earlette of Lament ...38 total reviews
Comment from Ankh
This is deep. There is so much woven into the words, that the reader has to slow down before they can grasp it. Magic touching stuff hun :-)~
Seth x
Ps: The format variation is great!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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This is deep. There is so much woven into the words, that the reader has to slow down before they can grasp it. Magic touching stuff hun :-)~
Seth x
Ps: The format variation is great!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks very much Seth. Yep, its very deep.
CPJ xo
Comment from MissMerri
Okay... is it or isn't it??? I wish I were not such a curious cat, but either way, I loved the writing, I loved the expression of friendship cherished, wounded and reclaimed. Such a clear, heartfelt, touching poem, CP. It is so honest and forthright and relatable and well-cadenced and powerful, not to mention perfectly rhymed too. I liked EVERYTHING about it, so it has to be a six-star rating. Hugs... my adorable friend.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Okay... is it or isn't it??? I wish I were not such a curious cat, but either way, I loved the writing, I loved the expression of friendship cherished, wounded and reclaimed. Such a clear, heartfelt, touching poem, CP. It is so honest and forthright and relatable and well-cadenced and powerful, not to mention perfectly rhymed too. I liked EVERYTHING about it, so it has to be a six-star rating. Hugs... my adorable friend.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks Adonna and I'll let you guess, your an intuitive lady.
I appreciate the sixer very much. You make my day with such lovely comments and a sixer to match.
Clo xoxo
Comment from Louise Michelle
Well, C.P., I think it's biographical. On second thought, no I don't. Yes I do. No I don't. LOL My friend, it matters not. A writer has the ability to take a fleeting thought or feeling or word and turn it into a piece of art which you have done so well. Hope your protagonist hasn't banished sleep. Take it from an insomniac, it ain't no fun. Hugs, LL
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Well, C.P., I think it's biographical. On second thought, no I don't. Yes I do. No I don't. LOL My friend, it matters not. A writer has the ability to take a fleeting thought or feeling or word and turn it into a piece of art which you have done so well. Hope your protagonist hasn't banished sleep. Take it from an insomniac, it ain't no fun. Hugs, LL
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Haha, make up your mind! LOL Thanks very much and of course I'm sleeping...sounded impressive though right? LOL
Cheers and thanks a bunch.
C.P. xoxo
Comment from RebelRose
Hey, I'm southern. A lot of my one-syllable words sound like two and my two syllable words sound like one. Who am I to judge? Pri-or, prya, whatever. LOL.
Love this sonnet. Great job.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hey, I'm southern. A lot of my one-syllable words sound like two and my two syllable words sound like one. Who am I to judge? Pri-or, prya, whatever. LOL.
Love this sonnet. Great job.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Yep there aint nuttin wrong with that. Cheers and thanks for a thoughtful review.
Closet xo
Comment from Jean Lutz
So good to see you posting more often, but where have the other guys gone? Is it just me? Or have some poets gone missing? As for me, I can hardly find time to review much less write.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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So good to see you posting more often, but where have the other guys gone? Is it just me? Or have some poets gone missing? As for me, I can hardly find time to review much less write.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Thanks Jean, its only a little burst though! LOL Not sure where everyone has gone...maybe everyone is becoming unamused with things around here...I dunno to be honest.
Closet xo
Comment from Dougspoetry
Bio or not this poem speaks of the all important Friendship. Wether fan story friends, or family friends I think the Lord is pleased with friendships. That is probably why in Luke 15 Jesus called His disciples friends. It is so cool to think of the Creator of the universe as our Friend. Nice Rhyme and meter, great subject choice also.
God Bless!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Bio or not this poem speaks of the all important Friendship. Wether fan story friends, or family friends I think the Lord is pleased with friendships. That is probably why in Luke 15 Jesus called His disciples friends. It is so cool to think of the Creator of the universe as our Friend. Nice Rhyme and meter, great subject choice also.
God Bless!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hey Douglas, Wow..thanks so much I appreciate the wonderful review. Not sure the Lord is pleased with every friendship but this was and should still be a wonderful one. Thankyou for a wonderful sixer review and choice comments.
Blessings right back at ya.
Closet xoxo
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Friendship, real friendship is hard to come by, and should never be let go if you are lucky enough to find it. You poem tells us this, and the words are so good. I enjoyed the way you wrote this, it is a really good read.xsx
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Friendship, real friendship is hard to come by, and should never be let go if you are lucky enough to find it. You poem tells us this, and the words are so good. I enjoyed the way you wrote this, it is a really good read.xsx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Indeed it is. Thanks so much for a lovely review.
Most appreciated.
Cheers closet
Comment from Sally Carter
A most interesting form, and thanks for the author notes on this. Yes, a good opportunity to come back with a fresh point of view in that additional stanza.
I like the theme, ie the wonderful friendship that later ran into difficulty, and your reflection on truths you had once shared.
I know it's not autobiographical, but if it were, I would be hoping that forgiveness would be quickly forthcoming. Know what I'm saying? LOL
I have to share that I found the third stanza a little less fluent than the others. The tenses seemed a bit difficult. Fine with the "would" in the first line, but then it changed to simple past in "rocked", and I wonder if it would have been easier to stay with that tense for the remainder of the stanza.
Something like:
Foundations rocked, we bared unsettling loads (I'd add an "s" here) (and I take it you mean you bared/disclosed uncomfortable things, rather than bearing/carrying a load?)
When discord struck, I pushed you far away...
A lovely "Earlette" full of truths that I am sure most of us can identify with.
With warm wishes to you
Sal x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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A most interesting form, and thanks for the author notes on this. Yes, a good opportunity to come back with a fresh point of view in that additional stanza.
I like the theme, ie the wonderful friendship that later ran into difficulty, and your reflection on truths you had once shared.
I know it's not autobiographical, but if it were, I would be hoping that forgiveness would be quickly forthcoming. Know what I'm saying? LOL
I have to share that I found the third stanza a little less fluent than the others. The tenses seemed a bit difficult. Fine with the "would" in the first line, but then it changed to simple past in "rocked", and I wonder if it would have been easier to stay with that tense for the remainder of the stanza.
Something like:
Foundations rocked, we bared unsettling loads (I'd add an "s" here) (and I take it you mean you bared/disclosed uncomfortable things, rather than bearing/carrying a load?)
When discord struck, I pushed you far away...
A lovely "Earlette" full of truths that I am sure most of us can identify with.
With warm wishes to you
Sal x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thanks Sal, yes this is a great format when you have a little more to say.
Cheers and thanks a bunch...yes I would hope forgiveness is coming too...thats of course IF it was biographical. LOL
Clops xoxo
Comment from Hareem.S
Oh my this is such a lovely poem. I have been in such a situation though I have not tried to work out with my friend, but when a bond like this is broken it has a bad impact on you.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Oh my this is such a lovely poem. I have been in such a situation though I have not tried to work out with my friend, but when a bond like this is broken it has a bad impact on you.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Yes I agree Hareem. Thanks for your thoughtful review and I am sorry you too have been through this. Friendship should be valued and I am as much to blame for wrecking this one.
I hope we work it out.
Cheers and thanks a bunch.
Closet xo
Comment from the blue pixel
I could possibly, maybe, perhaps know what this poem is about Closet but for the purposes of this review, I will stick to what I know for sure. There is much heart in your every word. I especially liked "A world of verse, we took on, me and you". I really related to it and it made me think of all the poetry we read each other over the phone, sounding each other out so to speak. "Should I post this one?" "Should I not?" "unsettling load" is another expression I really understood. It is a nice variation on the sonnet but I am afraid, I don't know enough to really appreciate your referse volta. I DO get the regular one and saw it immediately. Most people will be able to extrapolate the message in your poem to themselves I am sure, especially what you say in your final couplet about distance can allow "thinking" time. The metre was flawless, nothing new there and the thoughts within speak of one of the most precious things in life, friendship. xxx Pix
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I could possibly, maybe, perhaps know what this poem is about Closet but for the purposes of this review, I will stick to what I know for sure. There is much heart in your every word. I especially liked "A world of verse, we took on, me and you". I really related to it and it made me think of all the poetry we read each other over the phone, sounding each other out so to speak. "Should I post this one?" "Should I not?" "unsettling load" is another expression I really understood. It is a nice variation on the sonnet but I am afraid, I don't know enough to really appreciate your referse volta. I DO get the regular one and saw it immediately. Most people will be able to extrapolate the message in your poem to themselves I am sure, especially what you say in your final couplet about distance can allow "thinking" time. The metre was flawless, nothing new there and the thoughts within speak of one of the most precious things in life, friendship. xxx Pix
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Good girl, stick to what you know for sure...guaranteed. Trust me when I say that. I know how it looks...LOL but thats all sorted, you know that. All good. Thanks so much for the thoughtful review and I have actually had a few different interpretations so reviews have been interesting. I believe the volta is the turn so when I said reverse volta it took a shift back to the original need for the friendship again which is what the initial stanzas related to. You are right, this was definitely about friendship but not the one that you possibly thought it might be. (I sent you a pm for exactly the purpose of explaining) You'll see what I mean. I really hope the person this was intended for reads this and we get things sorted. When your only contact is through words, sometimes this get misunderstood plus you know I have a short wick and without revealing all the gory details, I was under duress and made a bad decision about the friendship which I regret. To be honest I've had a stressful few months, still thats no real excuse. Thanks for your supportive review. I loved it, and YOU.
Cheers Closet xoxoxo
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I think I understand now Closet. I like the turn in the sonnet and I will have another look at your version to see how you reversed it though I think I actually saw that the first time-just wasn't certain. I'm glad things are sorted out for you. The written word alone will always present problems as will you, me, whoever sending PM's or replies as we never know when the recipient is actually going to see it. I do things in whatever order takes my fancy. xxx Pix
