Firecracker
A Naughty, Naughty Modified Rondeau Redouble ...33 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hello, closet. It's great to see you back posting! And congratulations on your book of poetry!!! That is just so awesome and you must be thrilled. I've taken a look at the packaging and your comments on the writing of the book and what you hope to accomplish. Very professionaly done, my friend. Now to this poem: Well it certainly puts it out there. I love the way you play with words using your Australian slang and super wit. Bravo, buddy. Hugs, bevarooni
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Hello, closet. It's great to see you back posting! And congratulations on your book of poetry!!! That is just so awesome and you must be thrilled. I've taken a look at the packaging and your comments on the writing of the book and what you hope to accomplish. Very professionaly done, my friend. Now to this poem: Well it certainly puts it out there. I love the way you play with words using your Australian slang and super wit. Bravo, buddy. Hugs, bevarooni
Comment Written 29-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Haha thanks so much Bev...I have had soooo much on including my own publication that I barely have time to breathe lately, let alone post. This was my latest effort from about a months break from posting so of course I had to return with a bang...hopefully the spluttering tallywacker lifts its game! Bahaha
Cheers and I be into see you soon...I see your post in my message box.
Closet xoxo
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey CPJ
Well hell yes I would smack her to see her cracker. I might be old but I still posses a working tallywacker that is ever wackier than me
Bear
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Hey CPJ
Well hell yes I would smack her to see her cracker. I might be old but I still posses a working tallywacker that is ever wackier than me
Bear
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Haha, Thanks Bear...I am kind of banking on the fact HE might! LOL Maybe I should let him read this. Hmmm, on second thoughts. Nope. Your review was hilarious.
Thanks a bundle.
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from steevie
a cheeky little write, mate! I didn't google tallywacker, but I have a pretty good idea of what that is ...
The screen really heated up on this spicy poem about coupling and the like. Perhaps these two in the poem should just thrown a shrimps on the barby ...
cute write, CPJ
take care
steve
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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a cheeky little write, mate! I didn't google tallywacker, but I have a pretty good idea of what that is ...
The screen really heated up on this spicy poem about coupling and the like. Perhaps these two in the poem should just thrown a shrimps on the barby ...
cute write, CPJ
take care
steve
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Haha, thanks Steve...nice to know you are up with the terminology. LOL Glad I could give someone some heat. Homefires sure aint sparking at the moment but this WAS a gross exaggeration of any truth...thats why its NOT a bio...RIGHT? *smirk*...I am DEFINITELY no firecracker. Ask ANYONE here! Bahaha Thanks for dropping by...I WILL be back to read more of your stuff when I get a chance.
Cheers CPJ
BTW I HATE shrimps...I am a prawn girl...here, shrimps and prawns two VASTLY different things. Damn Paul Hogan for screwing us over on that! LOL
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Tee hee, your replies are the best! You had me laughing out loud when I read this. My daughter lived down under for about six years and now she's back in Canada. Whatis the difference between prawns and shrimp? I was told one was fresh water and the other, salt water. Is this true? G'day, mate. I just thought of that so I just threw it in. So, what's the weather like? Any good fishing there.
steve
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Shrimp = (river) prawn - A ring in!!! LOL
Prawn = (ocean) REAL prawn ... See?
Correct with the freshies and salties...however our CROCS are the same...salties - come after you and eat you...freshies - smaller and less likely to attack - however eat you if you wanna tangle!! LOL
Weather is CRAP...we just got out of 40 degree heat and now it is pissing with rain. Your Aussie accent is great! Haha
Re: the fishing - yes always good fishing...trouble is my hub DON'T know where to find it!
Actually I lie. He is making good now...last few times been out, he finally caught the (legal sized) mulloway he wanted. Up til then he usually only caught shark and snapper.
Cheers and thanks for askin...
Take it easy Steeve...haha
CPJ
Comment from Judian James
YOU at your best. What a wordsmith you are! I LOVED everything about this. It's so sexy, naughty and saucy and well it should be if that's how he behaves!! BRAV-the-fook-O
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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YOU at your best. What a wordsmith you are! I LOVED everything about this. It's so sexy, naughty and saucy and well it should be if that's how he behaves!! BRAV-the-fook-O
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Wow, many thanks Jude. I appreciate your top rating and enjoyment on this one. Not everyones cup of tea but those who know me closely kinda liked it! LOL
Cheers and thanks a bundle...loved your review.
Clo xoxo
Comment from Ankh
Haha Tallywacker is such a great sounding word. It rolls off the tongue in a beautiful way. Fantastic job with the mono-rhyme hun. I do agree that we need to pay attention to the one we are with. A stagnant relationship will go nowhere :-)~
Seth x
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha Tallywacker is such a great sounding word. It rolls off the tongue in a beautiful way. Fantastic job with the mono-rhyme hun. I do agree that we need to pay attention to the one we are with. A stagnant relationship will go nowhere :-)~
Seth x
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha thank you and yes...relationships have NO room for complacency...trouble is, its a fuckin effort, every damn minute of it. BTW NOT a monorhyme honey...I appreciate your review and thoughtful comments though.
Cheers J xo
PS Yes, "tallywacker" is such a cool word and believe it or not, it was the word that popped up in my mind and then "firecracker" chimed in as a great rhyme next and well...then the sassy little fuckin piece just wrote itself! LOL
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It all ends in 'er' lol. Er...well...um haha. Btw I have stopped smoking. 2 weeks now :-)~
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Oh shit.
You are right about that.
So it COULD indeed be a monorhyme honey.
Strike out what I said.
I'm sorry.
*hanging head*
WTF? You've given up?
Good for you.
Hope you are not too irritable.
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I am bloody raging like a hormonal bull with a full sack right now haha x
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You can take something for that.
Its called...
a woman
hahaha
LOL
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Good luck...I was one irritable bitch for 5 months.
Good luck xx
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lol....I am still lacking in that department :-)~
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Well get to it ... LOL
Sounds like you have the ammo! haha
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Just need somewhere to fire it.
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Oh, I forgot to say:
C*O*N*G*R*A*T*U*L*A*T*I*O*N*S for kicking it.
If you need ANY moral support at ANY time...please pm me.
You know I have plenty of x-smoking advice...and tips!! haha
It will be 8 years on March 27.
I WILL NEVER SMOKE AGAIN.
Its a wonderful feeling...you are well on the way.
Did you know your lungs actually start to clear after 5 days?
If you went cold turkey great going but don't be afraid to use patches or chewies if you're having trouble.
I went the six week patch course and it really worked. I just had a lot of really spinny halucinagenic dreams for a few weeks. A bit like cheap acid! Haha
NOT that I condone acid or have EVER used it. But you know what I mean.
Cheers J xo
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Oh I do lol. I am struggling now tho. Smoking sux....literally haha x
Comment from psalmist
I've missed your posts, glad to see you back with this humdinger! Hmm, what does it say about me that I had no problem figuring out what tallywhacker meant, lol. Great job with the rondeau redouble. I've only written one, and know the challenge it presents. Terrific job with the rhymes. The naughtiness made me both blush and laugh. Linda
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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I've missed your posts, glad to see you back with this humdinger! Hmm, what does it say about me that I had no problem figuring out what tallywhacker meant, lol. Great job with the rondeau redouble. I've only written one, and know the challenge it presents. Terrific job with the rhymes. The naughtiness made me both blush and laugh. Linda
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Awww Linda thanks so much. I appreciate your delightful review. Yeah the old tallywacker could be a humdinger if its used in conjunction with a little emotion! LOL
Glad my "naughty" could run you through such a gamut of emotion. Heehee...I had a feeling this would NOT be well-received with some. Hmmm, wonder why?
LOL Thanks for your support. I have been so busy with my own publication and another and life in general, hardly time to review, let alone post. I am often here but in the back blocks.
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
Comment from Louise Michelle
OMG - I see you are back in your usual form, you naughty girl. I did have to look up tally wacker, and it wasn't on the old FS spell check (wonder why-lol) . Does your husband read your poetry? If only I could be a fly on the wall of yall's bedroom. On second thought, I don't think I'd like to be witness, lol. Congratulations - I see you are now in print. Keep 'em coming, C.P. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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OMG - I see you are back in your usual form, you naughty girl. I did have to look up tally wacker, and it wasn't on the old FS spell check (wonder why-lol) . Does your husband read your poetry? If only I could be a fly on the wall of yall's bedroom. On second thought, I don't think I'd like to be witness, lol. Congratulations - I see you are now in print. Keep 'em coming, C.P. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha...hello LL. Thank you for your humorous review and the answer is NO he doesn't. This is NOT a bio though! LOL
Cheers SQ xo
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Sort her out ... you can write the grandest stuff P and make me laugh while I read . This is clever and funny love the rhyming scheme and the flow of the piece. Tally whacker indeed ... loved it ... I am reading the sleeping beauty trilogy just now and man that one is something else! Great write but then you always do cool ones my friend. See ya soon...xoxo kiwi
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Sort her out ... you can write the grandest stuff P and make me laugh while I read . This is clever and funny love the rhyming scheme and the flow of the piece. Tally whacker indeed ... loved it ... I am reading the sleeping beauty trilogy just now and man that one is something else! Great write but then you always do cool ones my friend. See ya soon...xoxo kiwi
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Haha thanks kiwi, glad you enjoyed. Yeah I was stuck on "tallywacker" and "firecracker" so built the whole poem around those two words. Many thanks for your delightful review. Happy reading. Cheers P xoxo
Comment from rightforyou
LOL
I enjoyed reading this talleywacker of a fourth of July evening of fizzling romance...Sounds Like a challenge for a woman in heat to keep the flame burning wile the roman candle can't light his own wick...A Ha you say ...Sparkle The way using some foreplay..Along with a stiffly in the form of a pill and back to the bedroom to lite the cracker...Opps, Sorry I am back...
Wonderful poem and the funniest on of the day...Well done...Ron
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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LOL
I enjoyed reading this talleywacker of a fourth of July evening of fizzling romance...Sounds Like a challenge for a woman in heat to keep the flame burning wile the roman candle can't light his own wick...A Ha you say ...Sparkle The way using some foreplay..Along with a stiffly in the form of a pill and back to the bedroom to lite the cracker...Opps, Sorry I am back...
Wonderful poem and the funniest on of the day...Well done...Ron
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Yes I guess it would be a challenge but I wouldn't know. *wink*...Thanks for your thoughtful review of my NON biographical piece.
Cheers Closet
PS The funniest one? Really? How lovely! Thanks a bunch!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Well my friend you penned a neat piece of poetry here. I like the way you admonish this slacker for not using his tallywacker the way he should. It is obvious to me she knows what she needs but he's a dolt.
Loved the theme of this as you put it "a little tongue in cheek" poetry.
Great choice with the artwork. Well done,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Well my friend you penned a neat piece of poetry here. I like the way you admonish this slacker for not using his tallywacker the way he should. It is obvious to me she knows what she needs but he's a dolt.
Loved the theme of this as you put it "a little tongue in cheek" poetry.
Great choice with the artwork. Well done,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2012
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Why thankyou so much Jim...I appreciate your thoughtful and humorous review. Glad you liked my poem. I DID think the firework pic was kinda sexy! LOL It took a while to find one! Most looked pretty dangerous! Hahaha
Cheers Closet
