As Berries Burst With Juice
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Comment from Linda England Bonam
Thanks so much for sharing this one, Brooke. I loved how you worded it, dining on nature's fine designing...(not word for word what you had, but I loved that part!)
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Thanks so much for sharing this one, Brooke. I loved how you worded it, dining on nature's fine designing...(not word for word what you had, but I loved that part!)
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Linda, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke,
I like the 6/7 syllable count, it is musical and makes a great read. Good alliteration in berries/burst/ brook/burbles. This is one of those poems I wish I had written! Great writing, my friend....blessings, chey
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Hi Brooke,
I like the 6/7 syllable count, it is musical and makes a great read. Good alliteration in berries/burst/ brook/burbles. This is one of those poems I wish I had written! Great writing, my friend....blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Chey, thanks so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Joy Graham
Very nice, Brooke. I love the hymn "Now Thank We All Our God". An excellent hymn to set to your poem. Thanks for sharing :)
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Very nice, Brooke. I love the hymn "Now Thank We All Our God". An excellent hymn to set to your poem. Thanks for sharing :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Joy, thank you so very much - I love that hymn, too :-) Brooke
Comment from WRITER1
This is a very nice piece. I can't wait for the spring and all the wonderful bounties it affords. I think even though we did not have a bad winter I will be happy to see the spring
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This is a very nice piece. I can't wait for the spring and all the wonderful bounties it affords. I think even though we did not have a bad winter I will be happy to see the spring
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Donna, thanks so much - great to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from fauntee
I could connect with the imagination cos I just love nature and all that it gives. Beautiful presentation of your thoughts. I think you've got a good flow except for the "designing", didn't sit well with me. just my thought.
Cheers.
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I could connect with the imagination cos I just love nature and all that it gives. Beautiful presentation of your thoughts. I think you've got a good flow except for the "designing", didn't sit well with me. just my thought.
Cheers.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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fauntee, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from jeslaf
Superb! Classic ring to the language, rhyme and meter, and the deference to the One who made it all and the cycle of life/water/growth and natural rhythms of the earth was marvelous. Amen. Preach it, sister. :)
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Superb! Classic ring to the language, rhyme and meter, and the deference to the One who made it all and the cycle of life/water/growth and natural rhythms of the earth was marvelous. Amen. Preach it, sister. :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Jes, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from elspeth glenn
You have such a gift for zooming our attention in the nature's bounty. Another glorious piece! Thanks for your ever continuing gifts!!
E.
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You have such a gift for zooming our attention in the nature's bounty. Another glorious piece! Thanks for your ever continuing gifts!!
E.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Elspeth, thanks so much for your thoughtful and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from artemis53
wonderful, Brooke. The description of the fruit is enticing especially with "all season they've been saving." I'm back in my childhood once more at the mulberry bush by the creek.
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wonderful, Brooke. The description of the fruit is enticing especially with "all season they've been saving." I'm back in my childhood once more at the mulberry bush by the creek.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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artemis, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
I'm awed. Your talent leaves me frustrated. That you can bend your message to all these different forms is a great mystery to me. I've read it several times. The only thing I can figure is that your brain is wired differently than most of ours. LOL! You're a phenomenon!
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I'm awed. Your talent leaves me frustrated. That you can bend your message to all these different forms is a great mystery to me. I've read it several times. The only thing I can figure is that your brain is wired differently than most of ours. LOL! You're a phenomenon!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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Adrienne, thanks so very much for taking the time to read this several times - I'm honored! :-) Brooke
Comment from krazykats2011
You know something, this poem really did touch me in more ways than one. First, because of the picture and colors you used, it was perfectly written. Second, because it made me think of some of the things in my life which I've taken for granted, like eating fresh vegies or fruit right from the vine. If He hadn't provided, we wouldn't have it, and I never give any thanks for it-I just take it for granted that it's there for the taking. Thanks for bringing that a little closer to my life through your words.
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You know something, this poem really did touch me in more ways than one. First, because of the picture and colors you used, it was perfectly written. Second, because it made me think of some of the things in my life which I've taken for granted, like eating fresh vegies or fruit right from the vine. If He hadn't provided, we wouldn't have it, and I never give any thanks for it-I just take it for granted that it's there for the taking. Thanks for bringing that a little closer to my life through your words.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
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krazykats, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
