The Rose of Sharon
A Valentine's letter to my wife18 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Ingrid, this is a very special piece. I love the voice you assumed, and I loved your gentle telling of a tragic yet hopeful tale. This may be fiction, but it is also fact.
So well done.
Peace, Lee
In my mind...followed by...was my idea of heaven---redundant?
There, under the moonlight,...
Obscure? Maybe quaint?--more romantic?
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Ingrid, this is a very special piece. I love the voice you assumed, and I loved your gentle telling of a tragic yet hopeful tale. This may be fiction, but it is also fact.
So well done.
Peace, Lee
In my mind...followed by...was my idea of heaven---redundant?
There, under the moonlight,...
Obscure? Maybe quaint?--more romantic?
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Those two changes made all the differance. who knew a simple comma could command such a change in intimacy?
It's my unofficial declaration of a new national holiday and I'd like you to be a charter member. I've declare, in addition to the obvious signifigance of February 14th that it will also be "Give a Bag lady a Rose Day." I'm thinking that a single random kind gesture today, might pierce someone's lonliness. thanks for your generousity. ingrid
Comment from FlamingSpade
What a sad ending! I loved your story but I so expected a happy ending. Not him heading off to the cemetery for a Valentine's date! I mean this in the nicest of ways...meanie
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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What a sad ending! I loved your story but I so expected a happy ending. Not him heading off to the cemetery for a Valentine's date! I mean this in the nicest of ways...meanie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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It's wise to remember that not everyone is walking around today waiting for chocolates and forced declarations. Some love exists without tangable proof. Happy Valentine's Day.
Comment from wordsfromsue
NO! I don't like the ending at all. You've just ripped the rug from under my feet and turned things upside down. :-(
This is so painfully well written. Riveting. Sad.
Tiny spag right at the end: I walkrd (walked) toward...
Sad but brilliant. :-(
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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NO! I don't like the ending at all. You've just ripped the rug from under my feet and turned things upside down. :-(
This is so painfully well written. Riveting. Sad.
Tiny spag right at the end: I walkrd (walked) toward...
Sad but brilliant. :-(
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Repaired the spag, thank you. No one likes sad endings, but sometimes they serve to remind us that for many people who have lost their great 'love of their life' it is a horribly sad and melancholy day. Perhaps you know of one who might benefit from a random act of kindness.
Comment from sasil
Wow. EXCELLENT characterization. You saved the zinger for the ending. I kept waiting for it, but then thought, "maybe the couple will divorce or something." This was truly bittersweet--a term that even tastes bad rolling off the tongue--trite--but exactly the perfect word to describe this contest entry. Best wishes and good luck. And thank you for sharing this with us.
S.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Wow. EXCELLENT characterization. You saved the zinger for the ending. I kept waiting for it, but then thought, "maybe the couple will divorce or something." This was truly bittersweet--a term that even tastes bad rolling off the tongue--trite--but exactly the perfect word to describe this contest entry. Best wishes and good luck. And thank you for sharing this with us.
S.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Not my contest entry, just a free write, remembering a couple of women, old friends I miss a lot. Thanks for reading.
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You've honored them (and their men) well here.
Comment from RUMLOVE1000
Heartfelt story and wonderful writing! Dealing with a lost love, a person who you shared the smallest things to the most joyous moments of your life with is a very difficult thing to overcome. And this was a very sweet story which shows how true love also lingers on.
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Heartfelt story and wonderful writing! Dealing with a lost love, a person who you shared the smallest things to the most joyous moments of your life with is a very difficult thing to overcome. And this was a very sweet story which shows how true love also lingers on.
Blessings,
Rumlove1000
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Your kind words are appreciated. Thank you.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, spiritual echo, you did a great job writing this valentine story about the man who stuck by his wife's side even in death, it is beautiful and heartfelt, good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, spiritual echo, you did a great job writing this valentine story about the man who stuck by his wife's side even in death, it is beautiful and heartfelt, good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Not a contest entry, but thanks for reviewing and responding, ingrid
Comment from rchitwood
Your story is very touching and I can relate I lost my sister to cancer. The only time I saw tears in her eyes was when she had her hair shaved. Your story has strong emotions describing the pain of losing a loved one. Very believable and good dialogue. Blessings Rita
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Your story is very touching and I can relate I lost my sister to cancer. The only time I saw tears in her eyes was when she had her hair shaved. Your story has strong emotions describing the pain of losing a loved one. Very believable and good dialogue. Blessings Rita
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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As we have both lost special people its not hard to recognize past conversations and frozen tears. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
OMG.....Those last ten or eleven words nearly stopped my heart. I had not expected that to be the ending. This was so beautifully written and I saw nothing that was even near a mistake. It grasped my attention and held on tight for the entire ride! What an exceptional story, thus the six!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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OMG.....Those last ten or eleven words nearly stopped my heart. I had not expected that to be the ending. This was so beautifully written and I saw nothing that was even near a mistake. It grasped my attention and held on tight for the entire ride! What an exceptional story, thus the six!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Your generousity humbles me. Thank you very much, ingrid
