Gumball
Hot fun in the summertime26 total reviews
Comment from Bellringer
Susan, a very entertaining read with memorable characters. Your depiction of Bobby's world was highly believable and heartwarming. Your second character, Mrs.. Peeper, was also well developed and added color to this story. I bet that, secretly, many of the townsfolk wished they could be as free as Bobby. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Susan, a very entertaining read with memorable characters. Your depiction of Bobby's world was highly believable and heartwarming. Your second character, Mrs.. Peeper, was also well developed and added color to this story. I bet that, secretly, many of the townsfolk wished they could be as free as Bobby. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi again!! Thank you so much!! HA! I'm happy you got a kick out of this. I was remembering Opie Taylor in an episode doing this same thing..SO typical of certain kinds of kids. Just not thinking!! I sure miss Barney Fife...gee. hugs, Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. I remember the Andy Griffith show fondly. Blessings, Hector
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Great story Susan. Energetic boys can get into a heap of trouble. I love that he apologized and took her flowers. I love Forest Gump and your references to it!!! Love you, Debbie
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Great story Susan. Energetic boys can get into a heap of trouble. I love that he apologized and took her flowers. I love Forest Gump and your references to it!!! Love you, Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi there, Happy Tuesday! I thank you for reading and taking time to review this too!! SO glad you enjoyed it!! hug! Susan
Comment from forestport12
Fun read Susan. I've used that last line about the box of chocolates myself. As always, your writing is descriptive and engaging. Stan
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Fun read Susan. I've used that last line about the box of chocolates myself. As always, your writing is descriptive and engaging. Stan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi there, Happy Tuesday! I thank you for reading and taking time to review this too!! SO glad you enjoyed it!! hug! Susan
Comment from adewpearl
thrilling each time,to the sight - drop the comma
You introduce Bobby effectively :-)
Old lady Stokes' class - add apostrophe for possessive
Excellent character development and use of natural-sounding dialogue
I love Bobby's imagination with the sidewalk his freeway, the parking meters as foreign fighters :-)
What a lovely character-driven story with a great ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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thrilling each time,to the sight - drop the comma
You introduce Bobby effectively :-)
Old lady Stokes' class - add apostrophe for possessive
Excellent character development and use of natural-sounding dialogue
I love Bobby's imagination with the sidewalk his freeway, the parking meters as foreign fighters :-)
What a lovely character-driven story with a great ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Brooke! Thank you so much! I will fix these, as I've added it to a book. I am going to submit to some publishers and see what happens. In the meantime, I'm thrilled with your help and great reviews too! HUG! Susan
Comment from Sasha
6 stars doesn't begin to convey how much I enjoyed this story. You are a true genius with an imagination worth its weight in gold (how that for a cliche?). This is such a delightful, uplifting, and heartwarming story that put a giant smile on my face and literally warmed my heart.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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6 stars doesn't begin to convey how much I enjoyed this story. You are a true genius with an imagination worth its weight in gold (how that for a cliche?). This is such a delightful, uplifting, and heartwarming story that put a giant smile on my face and literally warmed my heart.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hi again! I'm just thrilled that you liked this so. I loved the look of joy and excitement on this boys face. Tho the pix is photoshopped, it's just great. I had to write something for it! Lol! Thank you for being the best fan Sasha! i don't deserve you. xoxo, susan
Comment from viaux
I love your story about Bobby, but a Kid like he is, is difficult to control in the classroom. You certainly brought him to life enough that I would think such a thing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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I love your story about Bobby, but a Kid like he is, is difficult to control in the classroom. You certainly brought him to life enough that I would think such a thing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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hi there Viaux! Hugs for this grand rating...and I am very happy you enjoyed this!! Hope to get to your work too asap!! :) susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with good imagery needs no edit and is written so the story keeps the readers interest. I enjoyed reading your story Susan keep up the good work. Mary
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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A good write with good imagery needs no edit and is written so the story keeps the readers interest. I enjoyed reading your story Susan keep up the good work. Mary
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Mary! Wow!! Thank you so much!! You're really so kind, and it's a pleasure to see how much you enjoy something! Very kind! I really appreciate this! love, susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
Whew, I'm tired after reading four story's of yours in a row, but I'm not complaining much since it was on different trips you took me to. This story stole my heart and if Evil
Eddie allowed me I'm giving this a six. The art work is priceless you used. This is a exceptional study of a character by the name of Bobbie. He did remind me of Forrest Gump. Tom Hanks did a brilliant job in that movie.
I'd recommend your magnificent story to other reviewers. Keep on writing enjoyable fiction. Thanks for entertaining me in with your flash fiction story . Keep on writing terrific stories with a creative pen. I wish you a nifty day and enjoy my six.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Susan,
Whew, I'm tired after reading four story's of yours in a row, but I'm not complaining much since it was on different trips you took me to. This story stole my heart and if Evil
Eddie allowed me I'm giving this a six. The art work is priceless you used. This is a exceptional study of a character by the name of Bobbie. He did remind me of Forrest Gump. Tom Hanks did a brilliant job in that movie.
I'd recommend your magnificent story to other reviewers. Keep on writing enjoyable fiction. Thanks for entertaining me in with your flash fiction story . Keep on writing terrific stories with a creative pen. I wish you a nifty day and enjoy my six.
Melissa.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Sweet Melissa! You read ALL four of my latest posts...you deserve a special award just for that! God love and keep you my friend. What an honor and gladness I feel to know you. Thank you so much. Wow! I wish I could send you a nice cold Diet Pepsi! HUG! Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent character study of a boy who could never stay still. Sounds like a case of ADHD. I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Susan,
This is an excellent character study of a boy who could never stay still. Sounds like a case of ADHD. I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hey there! Many many thanks for this kind and welcome review! SO glad you took a minute to read it for me! Have a great Sunday!! hugs, Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your story. My second son is a jogger and he joggs about 8 miles daily. When he gets tired while running, he says to himself, "Run, Forrest, run!" boys will be boys
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed reading your story. My second son is a jogger and he joggs about 8 miles daily. When he gets tired while running, he says to himself, "Run, Forrest, run!" boys will be boys
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hey there! Many many thanks for this kind and welcome review! SO glad you took a minute to read it for me! Have a great Sunday!! hugs, Susan
