Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Give the Devil his Due"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from Joy Graham
Well if the contractor missed the ghostly noise before he certainly is hearing some now. Quite frightening. Your description is spot on.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Well if the contractor missed the ghostly noise before he certainly is hearing some now. Quite frightening. Your description is spot on.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thank you SO much, Joy. You rock! Xx Bev
Comment from closetpoetjester
I think Jim is in a spot of trouble here Bevski. I think maybe he should have left well enough alone. A good build up of tension in this chapter with very little dialogue so you relied on your wonderful narrative skills to paint the picture for your reader. A nice level of squirmy angst for me and good solid continuation of an already well told story. I'm always on the edge of my seat til the last hurrah, great ending in this one. Laid out and expressed well, not too long and you manage to capture the essence quickly due to your fabulous command of the English language. I'd read this book. Hang on,...I am! Haha
Anyway, I am enjoying catching up on this story. (in the daytime ONLY mind you Bevspookski! LM*O
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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I think Jim is in a spot of trouble here Bevski. I think maybe he should have left well enough alone. A good build up of tension in this chapter with very little dialogue so you relied on your wonderful narrative skills to paint the picture for your reader. A nice level of squirmy angst for me and good solid continuation of an already well told story. I'm always on the edge of my seat til the last hurrah, great ending in this one. Laid out and expressed well, not too long and you manage to capture the essence quickly due to your fabulous command of the English language. I'd read this book. Hang on,...I am! Haha
Anyway, I am enjoying catching up on this story. (in the daytime ONLY mind you Bevspookski! LM*O
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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You know, as good as your reviewing is, I absolutely love the way you come up with new names for me, p. I laughted out loud at this one!! I'm feeling like I ought to dust the mothballs of this series after all your generous compliments and thoughts! I'm taking a horror class right now on the site, so when I'm done I may have to post a 'chlling' new chapter LOL! I love your great personality, p. You always bring a smile to my face. And thank you so much for your loyalty!! Love ya, Bevspookski (hehehehe)
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Jim, Jim, you will never learn. It's not nice to mess around with paranormal when you're not prepared (idiotic). Things are really beginning to shake and bake and I hope the team can stay intact and survive this mess. A job well done my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Jim, Jim, you will never learn. It's not nice to mess around with paranormal when you're not prepared (idiotic). Things are really beginning to shake and bake and I hope the team can stay intact and survive this mess. A job well done my friend.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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You've got that right, PT. Right on, in fact. I'm sort of getting my frustration out in this write for people who go bumping around and defying forces they don't understand and wonder why later they have a nasty little devil hanging around. Duh!!! Thanks for a great review and good insights, PT. You rock...Bev
Comment from Bellringer
Bev, Excellent view into Jim Norris's seamy character while maintaining heightened tension that culminates in a macabre scene. The narrative details enabled me to enter the story as a silent but horrified observer. I look forward to your next installment. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Bev, Excellent view into Jim Norris's seamy character while maintaining heightened tension that culminates in a macabre scene. The narrative details enabled me to enter the story as a silent but horrified observer. I look forward to your next installment. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Hi, Hector. Thank you for taking time out this busy time of year to read my chapter. I've certainly got a lot of bad guys so far - hope I can keep them all straight LOL. Now it's time to line up the good guys and get them in position to deal with the nasties. Glad to know you're still interested, my friend. Thanks a bunch! Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Blessings, Hector
Comment from IndianaIrish
I do love this book, Bev, and your writing continues to hold me deep into your characters and their story. You write such wonderful hook endings!!
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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I do love this book, Bev, and your writing continues to hold me deep into your characters and their story. You write such wonderful hook endings!!
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Hi, Karyn. Thank you for your gracious review! I really appreciate your continued interest and support in my paranormal adventures. You rock, sister! Hugs, Bev
Comment from psalmist
This chapter had such a malevolent feel to it, from sneaky Jim Norris to the hair-raising ending. The dead dog, the unconscious caretaker, even the incident with the rat all added to the sinister feel. Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter. Linda
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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This chapter had such a malevolent feel to it, from sneaky Jim Norris to the hair-raising ending. The dead dog, the unconscious caretaker, even the incident with the rat all added to the sinister feel. Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter. Linda
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Hi, Linda. Thank you so much for taking time out read my chapter. And I appreciate knowing what works for the readers as it helps me going forward. Your gracious support is much appreciated, my friend. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Tina55
Great opening; you grab my attention right away.
I find I'm holding my breath in the beginning, squinting into the darkness with Jim. Very well done!
Norris lifted the carcass and flung the rat's body in the direction of the unconscious caretaker before pausing to clean his blade of brains and blood and replace it in its sheath. (Fantastic visual. What was he smelling when he did that?)
Whoa-ho-ho...great build to the ending! The pace didn't let me pause, let alone look away for a minute. This is gripping!
Love it!
Tina
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Great opening; you grab my attention right away.
I find I'm holding my breath in the beginning, squinting into the darkness with Jim. Very well done!
Norris lifted the carcass and flung the rat's body in the direction of the unconscious caretaker before pausing to clean his blade of brains and blood and replace it in its sheath. (Fantastic visual. What was he smelling when he did that?)
Whoa-ho-ho...great build to the ending! The pace didn't let me pause, let alone look away for a minute. This is gripping!
Love it!
Tina
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Hi Tina. I really appreciate your awesome review! I'm especially grateful to have gotten a positive nod in my direction from such a talented writer as I consider you to be. Thanks, also, for letting me know what you felt worked in the piece - that always helps. Kind regards, Bev
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I love hearing how parts of my writing affects the reader...that's the connection we strive for, yes? Have a great night, Bev!!
Love,
Tina
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It sure is, Tina. You, too, my friend. Xxx Bev
Comment from Connie C
While I haven't read most of your chapters, I still found this easy to follow and the writing to be exceptional, Bev. You really do have a knack for making your reader feel and see what is going on. Your description and dialogue are that good. As an ex-Engish teacher, I am always looking for SPAG errors so I can at least offer some constructive criticism. I was hard pressed to find any in this wonderfully written chapter except for perhaps one place. The chapter that starts with "He hated being in a checkmate . . ." should have a comma after "plans" in the first sentence and another one after ". . . Manor tonight." Those are such trivial concerns, though; but at least you know I am reading your chapter closely! And, by the way, I find this excellent writing to be worthy of a six, my friend. Unfortunately, FS won't allow me to give you one at this time. I guess I've already given you a few in the past month. They really should change the rules on that. Oh well, you get my virtual six anyway. Connie xoxo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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While I haven't read most of your chapters, I still found this easy to follow and the writing to be exceptional, Bev. You really do have a knack for making your reader feel and see what is going on. Your description and dialogue are that good. As an ex-Engish teacher, I am always looking for SPAG errors so I can at least offer some constructive criticism. I was hard pressed to find any in this wonderfully written chapter except for perhaps one place. The chapter that starts with "He hated being in a checkmate . . ." should have a comma after "plans" in the first sentence and another one after ". . . Manor tonight." Those are such trivial concerns, though; but at least you know I am reading your chapter closely! And, by the way, I find this excellent writing to be worthy of a six, my friend. Unfortunately, FS won't allow me to give you one at this time. I guess I've already given you a few in the past month. They really should change the rules on that. Oh well, you get my virtual six anyway. Connie xoxo
Comment Written 06-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2011
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Thank you so much for this awesome review, dear lady. I'll be sure to make your suggested corrections and I so apprecite your eye for the details! I can't tell you how much your support and insights mean to me, Connie. Knowing you have the English background adds extra weight to your words - which mean more than a hundred stars. I've been frustrated with the star system from the beginning, myself. Hopefully, we'll see a change in that, too. Blessings, lovely friend, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
Now I'm wondering what's going on. The old man, Jenkins Porter suddenly, becomes a monster. What will happen next? My curiosity has been stirred, and wanted to know more.
Good writing.
April
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Now I'm wondering what's going on. The old man, Jenkins Porter suddenly, becomes a monster. What will happen next? My curiosity has been stirred, and wanted to know more.
Good writing.
April
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hiya, April. I appreciate your reading my chapter and offering your generous support! Thanks so much...Bev
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You're welcome, Bev.
Comment from God's Writer
Well I asked for details. I got details. Very good setting. Well filled out with description. Gives one the feeling of knowing where you are. Feelings sprinkled like the stars build to the climax of this story. CAn't say I enjoy the images. Prefer love to violence.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Well I asked for details. I got details. Very good setting. Well filled out with description. Gives one the feeling of knowing where you are. Feelings sprinkled like the stars build to the climax of this story. CAn't say I enjoy the images. Prefer love to violence.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thank you, Eric. I appreciate your generosity given this is not a genre you enjoy. The support is appreciated! Kind regards, Bev
