Dance Me to the Moon
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Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, good job on this story Bev...she certainly made a huge step going to the reunion and understandably declined Kyles offer, but I couldn't work out why. Until of course she revealed all back at here hotel room. You never waste a syllable, this was told completely convincingly and I felt empathy as her reason for declining became apparent. Still, she made the first brave step going to the reunion. Obviously the therapy session did wonders. Nicely told and shared and good to see her feeling alive and sensual.
Cheers closet xoxo
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Wow, good job on this story Bev...she certainly made a huge step going to the reunion and understandably declined Kyles offer, but I couldn't work out why. Until of course she revealed all back at here hotel room. You never waste a syllable, this was told completely convincingly and I felt empathy as her reason for declining became apparent. Still, she made the first brave step going to the reunion. Obviously the therapy session did wonders. Nicely told and shared and good to see her feeling alive and sensual.
Cheers closet xoxo
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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I so appreciate your kind and encouraging words, closet. It was a project on the burner for a while - ever since my days of working for a surgeon who did mastectomies. I love what you have said about the character and that you caught the nuances so well of her healing. Not everyone got that lol! What a beautiful review, my friend. Thank you...Bevvski
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
The mind must be purged of its belief of inadequacy; a psychologist can do that, with the skill of a surgeon, yet with no invasive physical instruments; better than a drug; psychology is an answer, not a balm.
Easy to ready, no throw-away big medical terms; a story, a lesson, a healing.
Go girl.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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Excellent.
The mind must be purged of its belief of inadequacy; a psychologist can do that, with the skill of a surgeon, yet with no invasive physical instruments; better than a drug; psychology is an answer, not a balm.
Easy to ready, no throw-away big medical terms; a story, a lesson, a healing.
Go girl.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much for this inspiring and encouraging review, El. You have, absolutely, got exactly what I intended. I so appreciate your generosity and time...Bev
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Inspirational. There are answers out there; caring people.
Well done.
Comment from Shirley B
I love the positive message of this flash fiction. My best friend had brest cancer and had her breat removed. Her attitude was so good during all the chemotherapy. Best of luck to you in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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I love the positive message of this flash fiction. My best friend had brest cancer and had her breat removed. Her attitude was so good during all the chemotherapy. Best of luck to you in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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Hi, Shirley B. Thank you for this wonderful review. I really appreciate your time and interest. And I hope your friend continues to do well. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from The Stranger
my aunt had to undergo this life saving operation, it is now nearly 27 yres since she underwent the surgeons knife and is still alive today thanks to the skill and dedication of the doctors and nurses
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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my aunt had to undergo this life saving operation, it is now nearly 27 yres since she underwent the surgeons knife and is still alive today thanks to the skill and dedication of the doctors and nurses
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011
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The procedure was much more extensive back then. I was working for a surgeon during those years and many women had no choice bu the have the very debilitating radical mastectomy. Things have, thankfully, changed much. I appreciate your review, Bev
Comment from fayesh
A story that gives a glimpse of someone in psychotherapy for depression. No doubt she was on some type of medication besides the one-on-one therapy, because therapy alone doesn't work for depression.
Also, you are wrong about capitalizing the word "champagne"
You can capitalize the region (place), but not the drink unless it has a brand name.
Also you have a syntax error;
"I believe your instinct that it's time to leave psychoanalysis is a good one,"
s/b - "I believe your instinct to leave psychoanalysis at this time is a good one,
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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A story that gives a glimpse of someone in psychotherapy for depression. No doubt she was on some type of medication besides the one-on-one therapy, because therapy alone doesn't work for depression.
Also, you are wrong about capitalizing the word "champagne"
You can capitalize the region (place), but not the drink unless it has a brand name.
Also you have a syntax error;
"I believe your instinct that it's time to leave psychoanalysis is a good one,"
s/b - "I believe your instinct to leave psychoanalysis at this time is a good one,
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Thank you Fayesh. Moet Chandon is French Champange, therefore it is correct.
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As i said, the brand name should be capitalized, but you wrote "champagne" alone in one of your lines without the brand name "Moet Chandon". By the way, it's written "French champagne" with no capital on champagne.
Check a grammar book if you don't believe me.
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I think it is rather crappy to low-ball review a competing conest entry. Maybe you can find a book on class.
Comment from Slaqueur
This story touched me very deeply as my best friend is about to undergo a bilateral mastectomy with reconstruction. She has such an incredible attitude about it and her body and her self-image. I can only wonder if I'd be so brave. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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This story touched me very deeply as my best friend is about to undergo a bilateral mastectomy with reconstruction. She has such an incredible attitude about it and her body and her self-image. I can only wonder if I'd be so brave. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from writerwish
Great story here showed how therapy can help one overcome things. It was good to see how totally she was still in touch with her body after the reunion. Good descriptions used and interesting throughout.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Great story here showed how therapy can help one overcome things. It was good to see how totally she was still in touch with her body after the reunion. Good descriptions used and interesting throughout.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Hi, writerwish. Thank you for your awesome review. I really appreciate it, my friend. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from RobinWrites
This is beautiful. I have a friend who will be going through reconstruction surgery tomorrow, and I can only hope she has people to help her heal. So, very well written.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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This is beautiful. I have a friend who will be going through reconstruction surgery tomorrow, and I can only hope she has people to help her heal. So, very well written.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Hi, Robin. Thank you so much for your lovely, generous review. I hope that your friend will consider getting some counselling. I saw a lot of women scarred emotionally, more than physically, while working for a surgeon who did mastectomies. She's lucky to have a friend like you. Take care, Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
Bev, this is a wonderful example of flash fiction where unneeded words are trimmed away and you're left with a great story that's memorable and well written. You portray the character's fears well, and also her triumph of survival. best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Bev, this is a wonderful example of flash fiction where unneeded words are trimmed away and you're left with a great story that's memorable and well written. You portray the character's fears well, and also her triumph of survival. best wishes in the contest, my friend.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much, Karyn. I am thrilled by your words and generous support. Appreciate you taking time to read and review, my lovely friend. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from butterfly31
This was very positive. It was a great ending and it was easy to feel Paige's relief and pride in her achievement in attending the reunion after such a harrowing ordeal.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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This was very positive. It was a great ending and it was easy to feel Paige's relief and pride in her achievement in attending the reunion after such a harrowing ordeal.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your generous and heart-warming review, butterfly31. I really appreciate your interest. Kind regards, Bev
