Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Lean on Me"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great place to finish this chapter and I'm glad I'm still catching up so I can read straight on. Powerfully written as you put us right there in the situation with these four team members.
great write.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Great place to finish this chapter and I'm glad I'm still catching up so I can read straight on. Powerfully written as you put us right there in the situation with these four team members.
great write.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thanks again, Pearl. I'm glad someone else likes to safe up chapters to read all at once. I do that with a few of my favorite writers. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from w.j.debi
You know how to build the suspense. Just a little noise here and a feeling there. Something is not right and this team is experienced enough to know they are heading into serious trouble. I have my worries for Jim going into that house alone. And leaving us dangling at the sound of a shot gun blast wondering who, if anyone, is hurt, wounded or dead....
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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You know how to build the suspense. Just a little noise here and a feeling there. Something is not right and this team is experienced enough to know they are heading into serious trouble. I have my worries for Jim going into that house alone. And leaving us dangling at the sound of a shot gun blast wondering who, if anyone, is hurt, wounded or dead....
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hi, Debi. Thank you for this very gracious review. I appreciate your comment about building suspense. I'm so glad you feel that way as that is how I like my suspense to be delivered--in doses. I always worry about being over-the-top.
Hope you are having a great weekend. Finally, it feels like summer here in Northern Michigan.
I really appreciate your generosity and support!
:) Bev
Comment from Zue65
This post ended at the point when readers wanted more to know the source of that gunshot sound. This complications only doubled the already tensed atmosphere on the experiences of Mia and Mike about a satanic entity and its evil presence. Quite creative.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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This post ended at the point when readers wanted more to know the source of that gunshot sound. This complications only doubled the already tensed atmosphere on the experiences of Mia and Mike about a satanic entity and its evil presence. Quite creative.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Hi, Nassus. Thank you for the grand review. I appreciate your encouragement.
:) Bev
Comment from Wabigoon
Writing--
This seems to be very well done. I cannot pretend to know the ins and outs of your plot, or the nuances of the characters. But you catch us up on past action, proceed forward and, in general, what's happening is comprehensible. I will look for more in the future.
I saw no "spags."
Thanks
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Writing--
This seems to be very well done. I cannot pretend to know the ins and outs of your plot, or the nuances of the characters. But you catch us up on past action, proceed forward and, in general, what's happening is comprehensible. I will look for more in the future.
I saw no "spags."
Thanks
Wabigoon
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you for taking time to read and review, W. I appreciate your encouragement and support.
:) Bev
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Bev, my dear,
You've got so many writing projects going on, I'm skipping to keep up!
A spine-tingling read. I think the knowledge that you've really been in the midst of this kind of 'stuff' adds credibility in my eyes. :)
Just saw the book of poetry created for Brooke. I've been offsite for ages. What happened?
Have a super weekend, my friend.
Hugs and love,
Sonali xxx
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Hello Bev, my dear,
You've got so many writing projects going on, I'm skipping to keep up!
A spine-tingling read. I think the knowledge that you've really been in the midst of this kind of 'stuff' adds credibility in my eyes. :)
Just saw the book of poetry created for Brooke. I've been offsite for ages. What happened?
Have a super weekend, my friend.
Hugs and love,
Sonali xxx
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Hi, Sonali
Thank you for the gracious review!
Yes, lots happening--juggling several projects. Don't know if that's wise, but I get bored easily :)
Brooke's in the midst of a catastrophic health crisis. They're trying to discover the source of her stroke-like symptoms. Seems like it may be an aggressive form of M.S. You can get caught up through the Forum under general topics. A very dark time for the family for sure.
You have a lovely weekend, too, Sonali.
Hugs, Bev
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I'll check out the forums. Thanks, Bev dear.
Poor Brooke.
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Yes, a real disaster for all concerned.
You're welcome, Sonali.
XX Bev
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This is my first exposure to the story, but it is compelling and well written. I love all the ghostly stuff, and I like the way you have rules that you follow on what the characters are able to do. It seems well organized in that way, as it allows you to stay in defined characters. I enjoyed the read,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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This is my first exposure to the story, but it is compelling and well written. I love all the ghostly stuff, and I like the way you have rules that you follow on what the characters are able to do. It seems well organized in that way, as it allows you to stay in defined characters. I enjoyed the read,
Rhonda
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Hello, Rhonda
Thank you for your great insight into the chapter. I appreciate you pointing out the delineation of my characters' roles. I am patterning this after the professional paranormal investigators as I enjoy watching those shows. I experienced an extended, and quite terrifying, haunting in a house I lived in as a teenager. It's leaves an indelible mark.
Much appreciated,
Bev
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Oh, wow!!! I've felt them before, and been to places that are haunted, but never any real contact. I'll bet you never forgot! Thanks for sharing.
Rhonda
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Thanks for caring, Rhonda! :) Bev
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Always!
Comment from JasmineNikki
For the sentence - "Luke shoved his hands in his pocket and watched Mike retreat."- I believe pocket should be pockets.
Otherwise a good read with an interesting ending for the chapter. Good job.
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reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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For the sentence - "Luke shoved his hands in his pocket and watched Mike retreat."- I believe pocket should be pockets.
Otherwise a good read with an interesting ending for the chapter. Good job.
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Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ha! Nice cliff hanger (and not very fair, since you make me wait so darn long - remember - this is MY first time reading this story. LOL)
As always, Bev, pure excitement, and your characters are so believable, I am dying to see what Jim is going to do when he is confronted for the first time with a real, live, frightening, undeniable, and DEMONIC spirit (and I'm betting he will be - soon). LOL!
You haven't missed a trick in this chapter, IMO. MORE!!!
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Ha! Nice cliff hanger (and not very fair, since you make me wait so darn long - remember - this is MY first time reading this story. LOL)
As always, Bev, pure excitement, and your characters are so believable, I am dying to see what Jim is going to do when he is confronted for the first time with a real, live, frightening, undeniable, and DEMONIC spirit (and I'm betting he will be - soon). LOL!
You haven't missed a trick in this chapter, IMO. MORE!!!
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Hi Dawn. Thanks so much for the grand review. I'm sorry to be keeping you hanging. Working several projects at once which isn't really a great idea sometimes. I do have plans for Jim
which will unfold a bit more in the next chapter.
So appreciate your generosity and support, Dawn.
Hugs, Bev
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Oh dear, not to worry at all - I am teasing - I KNOW only too well what several ongoing projects entails!
You are very welcome, my friend!
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XXOO
Comment from irishauthorme
Your writing has grown clearer, you express your points with much less embellishment and that adds to the force of your delivery.
Dialogue is lively and gave me an insight into the characters. It is more interesting to me that you rely on the characters to carry the story, and the spirits to add tension and create "The Problem."
I see a maturity in your work, close to a professional edge that you could sharpen and polish into a published work.
yes, lots of editing work, but most time worth it!
irish
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Your writing has grown clearer, you express your points with much less embellishment and that adds to the force of your delivery.
Dialogue is lively and gave me an insight into the characters. It is more interesting to me that you rely on the characters to carry the story, and the spirits to add tension and create "The Problem."
I see a maturity in your work, close to a professional edge that you could sharpen and polish into a published work.
yes, lots of editing work, but most time worth it!
irish
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Hi, Irish. I've been fortunate to be working with an excellent editor on another project - Along the Jericho Road. Thank you very much for noticing the improvement. You seem to be very familiar with the editing process, and I totally agree that it's tough but worth it. I feel fortunate to have a top-notch person for the job.
I really appreciate both your generosity and support, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment from judiverse
Mike and Mia have both had frightening psychic experiences, and that draws them closer. Mike describes his experience as feeling like someone had taken over his mind. Luke consults with the contractor, but doesn't expect much help from him. Jim is there mainly because his boss told him to help. He's gone to activate the fuse box, and the team is about to go inside when they hear a gunshot. I don't believe ghosts fire shotguns, so some human must be trying to scare the team. They are on the alert and plan to take all precautions for the night. Great description of Mike's experience and his reaction. Excellent work with characters. judi
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Mike and Mia have both had frightening psychic experiences, and that draws them closer. Mike describes his experience as feeling like someone had taken over his mind. Luke consults with the contractor, but doesn't expect much help from him. Jim is there mainly because his boss told him to help. He's gone to activate the fuse box, and the team is about to go inside when they hear a gunshot. I don't believe ghosts fire shotguns, so some human must be trying to scare the team. They are on the alert and plan to take all precautions for the night. Great description of Mike's experience and his reaction. Excellent work with characters. judi
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Hi, Judi. Thanks for the great review! Yes, a human is involved for sure:)
