Independence
Acrostic18 total reviews
Comment from sasil
Beautiful presentation of this--the colors pop! I love the words and phrases you've chosen to define your topic--the words flowing naturally, without awkward interuption or feeling "forced". Bravo and best wishes as you redefine and re-establish your definitions. You have a beautiful soul...S.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Beautiful presentation of this--the colors pop! I love the words and phrases you've chosen to define your topic--the words flowing naturally, without awkward interuption or feeling "forced". Bravo and best wishes as you redefine and re-establish your definitions. You have a beautiful soul...S.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind words and review. Have a wonderful day!!! Debbie
Comment from swosugrad09
I thought this was going to be about the fourth of july when I saw your artwork and read the title. I love this great acrostic! So descriptive and real. Independence means so much more after we lose it for a while.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I thought this was going to be about the fourth of july when I saw your artwork and read the title. I love this great acrostic! So descriptive and real. Independence means so much more after we lose it for a while.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I was worried people wouldn't get that it was about personal independence so close to Independencence Day-but so far so good. Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
Comment from misscookie
If I had the sixth star I would surly give it to you.
Like what your saying because I can relate since my strokes and other illness.
I came to the conclusion that I don't see myself as a person with a disability ... But a person with protenial. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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If I had the sixth star I would surly give it to you.
Like what your saying because I can relate since my strokes and other illness.
I came to the conclusion that I don't see myself as a person with a disability ... But a person with protenial. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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That is a good way to look at it. I'm sure I will get used to all this, but I am struggling with it now. Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
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Your very welcome.
Comment from jackpeg
I don't know if there are any written rules about acrostics, but I've always understood that each line should contain a complete thought, suggestion or an item in a list related to the acrostic word and all in the same tense. The last seven lines reads like a run-on sentence.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I don't know if there are any written rules about acrostics, but I've always understood that each line should contain a complete thought, suggestion or an item in a list related to the acrostic word and all in the same tense. The last seven lines reads like a run-on sentence.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I thought the idea was to make it flow more like a single thought. I'll have to try to find that out. Anyway, thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Bellringer
Debbie, your acrostic is very well composed and clearly delivers your message of independence. The strongest part is the pep-talk to self and encouragement to persevere--as freedom is a state of mind. There are many folks with use of all their limbs who don't feel independent because of their thought process. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Debbie, your acrostic is very well composed and clearly delivers your message of independence. The strongest part is the pep-talk to self and encouragement to persevere--as freedom is a state of mind. There are many folks with use of all their limbs who don't feel independent because of their thought process. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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You are so right. Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
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My pleasure, Debbie. Warm regards, Hector
Comment from denhagan
This is a very beautiful acrostic poem for the contest, about independence. The poem spells out what independence means to the author. Heart-felt and a good read.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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This is a very beautiful acrostic poem for the contest, about independence. The poem spells out what independence means to the author. Heart-felt and a good read.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
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You're very welcome. Dennis
Comment from deb552
I'm very much impressed with your acrostic poem. You've described independence and the desire for it, in each line. It has a great flow and expresses the feeling for many who want and need to be in charge of their own lives. It's not the easiest form of poetry, but you've mastered it here. deb
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I'm very much impressed with your acrostic poem. You've described independence and the desire for it, in each line. It has a great flow and expresses the feeling for many who want and need to be in charge of their own lives. It's not the easiest form of poetry, but you've mastered it here. deb
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thanks Deb. I should be grateful for all the help I am getting, but right now I am resentful and miss my privacy~Debbie
Comment from MariJo
So well spoken! I am a fanatic about being independent & free. I understand what you a feeling & trying to convey.
This is a perfect acrostic. Very well done. I like your choice of words for the subject. It reads well.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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So well spoken! I am a fanatic about being independent & free. I understand what you a feeling & trying to convey.
This is a perfect acrostic. Very well done. I like your choice of words for the subject. It reads well.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I should be grateful for all the help I am getting, but right now I am resentful and miss my privacy~Debbie Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from l.raven
I understand what you are saying.When I hurt my neck,I had to give up my job after working and raising my kids.For a while you feel lost.Than you find another path.Love your poem.Very well said.Very true.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I understand what you are saying.When I hurt my neck,I had to give up my job after working and raising my kids.For a while you feel lost.Than you find another path.Love your poem.Very well said.Very true.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I know I will get used to it. It has just been a very hard adjustment as I have fiercely fought to maintain my independence. Thanks for reviewing! Debbie
Comment from jaded831
I can't tell you what I didn't like, cause I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end. It's meaning touched me, I too know what it's like to struggle for independance and you said it well without sugar coating. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I can't tell you what I didn't like, cause I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end. It's meaning touched me, I too know what it's like to struggle for independance and you said it well without sugar coating. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
