Collision Course
It's not enough to say you care...27 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
I was touched by this and being one of HD Thoreau's buddies( he is my muse) you had me at the fort word. Great soul and care in the writing. It has the use the brain before operating muth theory. Great read that flows wel and makes sense.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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I was touched by this and being one of HD Thoreau's buddies( he is my muse) you had me at the fort word. Great soul and care in the writing. It has the use the brain before operating muth theory. Great read that flows wel and makes sense.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Hello, poetbear. Thank you for your kind and generous review. We are fortunate to have the writings of such great spiritual pioneers as Thoreau and Emerson. Living in an area that is filled with natural beauty, I can really relate to them. I so appreciate your time and interest! You are more than kind. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow Bev, this was a beautiful story and obviously a true one. I was saddened by the "geese and car" episode because I myself have hit and killed a grass parrot and two other small birds this week just taking my young fella the 12km trek through "the sticks" to his school. Its NOT a nice feeling at all to watch something bounce like a ball off your fender or windscreen in a cloud of feathers...only to have to pass it as YOUR road kill on the way back home and feel the guilt kick in...Look I can gut and scale a dead fish but it HAS to be dead...I do have a lot of trouble baiting the live shrimp on the hook when their tiny legs are flailing as I am about to spike them...Its horrible. I tell you I've felt wretched about these poor birds all week, to the point I decided on that particoolar road to take it slower and to let the birds cross first if I at all can and also to slow down a bit more...that road seems to have plenty of unsuspecting feathered inhabitants living in the roadside trees so along with my own thoughts, this story has had a flow on effect from that for starters. Secondly I love that you felt you should try and help this girl...maybe someone else will help her, somewhere along the way. I sometimes worry about things like that...with OLD people for some reason...If I see an old person alone walking, I often start to worry whether anyone cares about them, do they infact have a family?, why isn't anyone with them? should I stop and offer them a ride? you know?...all sorts of worry goes through my mind. Your story of coincidence and the near miss with one mother of the feathered variety and perhaps an opportunity to help another that slipped from your grasp perhaps IS some sort of sign from above. I take it that the lesson is, never underestimate the job of ANY mother feathered or epidermissed and if the opportunity arises to maybe make a difference, then get in there and risk the rejection or abuse...you never know though Bev. Sometimes we don't get to see the profound impact a caring look or gesture may have had on another persons life. If your eyes connected for a minute, then maybe that was cause enough for her to think differently at some point in her future, long enough NOT to make a fatal decision for her or the baby. Something you will never know I guess. This was a heartwarming story and told perfectly and the content was even nicer knowing it was someone that is dear to me. You are truly an inspiration AND the most wonderful story writer, true or otherwise. Don't ever forget that. Just remember THIS post may have an effect on others you'll never see, so maybe your help wasn't for "her" that day but indeed for someone out in fs land by writing what you wrote. I am sure her helping hand will come...maybe she was merely a catalyst for some sort of thought process required to burst forth within you and you were NOT meant to help her, she was indeed meant to help you...BET you didn't think of it that way huh? Maybe the resignation reflected in the fact her life or her baby's life could be over, was actually the hidden message for you to make the most of yours. See? Always a positive POV for you. Hahaha
Love ya Bevver. Enjoy this sixer and absolutely epic reveiw...sorry but I simply could NOT stop. I am often told I have no OFF switch. Indeed correct most of the time except when I am asleep. LOL
Cheers your aussiegalpal
Closet xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2011
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Wow Bev, this was a beautiful story and obviously a true one. I was saddened by the "geese and car" episode because I myself have hit and killed a grass parrot and two other small birds this week just taking my young fella the 12km trek through "the sticks" to his school. Its NOT a nice feeling at all to watch something bounce like a ball off your fender or windscreen in a cloud of feathers...only to have to pass it as YOUR road kill on the way back home and feel the guilt kick in...Look I can gut and scale a dead fish but it HAS to be dead...I do have a lot of trouble baiting the live shrimp on the hook when their tiny legs are flailing as I am about to spike them...Its horrible. I tell you I've felt wretched about these poor birds all week, to the point I decided on that particoolar road to take it slower and to let the birds cross first if I at all can and also to slow down a bit more...that road seems to have plenty of unsuspecting feathered inhabitants living in the roadside trees so along with my own thoughts, this story has had a flow on effect from that for starters. Secondly I love that you felt you should try and help this girl...maybe someone else will help her, somewhere along the way. I sometimes worry about things like that...with OLD people for some reason...If I see an old person alone walking, I often start to worry whether anyone cares about them, do they infact have a family?, why isn't anyone with them? should I stop and offer them a ride? you know?...all sorts of worry goes through my mind. Your story of coincidence and the near miss with one mother of the feathered variety and perhaps an opportunity to help another that slipped from your grasp perhaps IS some sort of sign from above. I take it that the lesson is, never underestimate the job of ANY mother feathered or epidermissed and if the opportunity arises to maybe make a difference, then get in there and risk the rejection or abuse...you never know though Bev. Sometimes we don't get to see the profound impact a caring look or gesture may have had on another persons life. If your eyes connected for a minute, then maybe that was cause enough for her to think differently at some point in her future, long enough NOT to make a fatal decision for her or the baby. Something you will never know I guess. This was a heartwarming story and told perfectly and the content was even nicer knowing it was someone that is dear to me. You are truly an inspiration AND the most wonderful story writer, true or otherwise. Don't ever forget that. Just remember THIS post may have an effect on others you'll never see, so maybe your help wasn't for "her" that day but indeed for someone out in fs land by writing what you wrote. I am sure her helping hand will come...maybe she was merely a catalyst for some sort of thought process required to burst forth within you and you were NOT meant to help her, she was indeed meant to help you...BET you didn't think of it that way huh? Maybe the resignation reflected in the fact her life or her baby's life could be over, was actually the hidden message for you to make the most of yours. See? Always a positive POV for you. Hahaha
Love ya Bevver. Enjoy this sixer and absolutely epic reveiw...sorry but I simply could NOT stop. I am often told I have no OFF switch. Indeed correct most of the time except when I am asleep. LOL
Cheers your aussiegalpal
Closet xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2011
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Aw, closet. Now you've brought tears to my eyes. You've expressed everything that was in my heart as I wrote this piece...the thoughts I didn't write down and the hopes I didn't express. I seriously have chills after reading your words. And I am deeply honored at your exceptional review and stars, closet. I know you to be a very honest person, one that I can count on to set me right when I wander off point! A very interesting thing happened yesterday and I think it has a mystical connection to your profound words: I was at a local drugstore and there was a gentleman who seemed confused a bit. He was very upset about having had to pay for something without getting a senior discount. The check-out gal was rolling her eyes and just being rude. Apparently he felt I was sympathetic because he directed his words to me and I happen to agree with him. When I got out to the parking lot to get into my car, he hailed me across the way and drew me in to further discuss his viewpoint. This is the part that brings tears to my eyes...he was buying a card for his wife. She is at the local hospital and in the advanced stages of dying. His daughters - he told me - were all coming to decide what to do with her. He said, "this may be the last card I buy for her". He thanked for listening to his complaints and touched my arm at one point. We parted and as I was leaving the parking lot, I pulled behind a car at the light that had the following bumper sticker, YOU ARE THE ONLY ONE WITH THE POWER TO CHANGE YOUR MIND. I said a prayer of gratitude that Spirit had offered me a redeeming opportunity that day. So, I'm forever grateful that I have come to know and cherish you my aussiegalpal (love that!) XXX Bev
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See? I told you.
Now you've made me howl.
Thanks Bev...I needed your kind words. I've had a shit week.
Thanks so much for a generous response and don't ever underestimate the power of YOUR words out there in FS land or otherwise...
BTW you earn the sixer on this one baby.
Closet xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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I wish I could do something to help you through this rough patch, closet. I know you're going to say you'll be fine, but its the little woundings and disappointments that add up. If you need an ear, you know you can call on me anytime. Thanks again for your truly generous heart! XXX Bev
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Thanks Bev and no, I have to wade through this sh*t myself I'm afraid...I married it, I gotta deal with it. You know? I know you do. LOL
Thanks always for your support and I promise I'll be okay.
Closet xo
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Okay, buddy. I'll be sending good energy your way and a prayer for healing the situation. Love ya, Bev
Comment from denhagan
This was a very interesting short story to read about a day in the life of the author, where she stops at a restaurant for lunch and encourters a troubled young pregnabt girl, wishing she had spoken some kind words of encouragement to her.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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This was a very interesting short story to read about a day in the life of the author, where she stops at a restaurant for lunch and encourters a troubled young pregnabt girl, wishing she had spoken some kind words of encouragement to her.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Thanks for stopping by and for your generous review. I much appreciate it! Bev
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You're welcome. Dennis
Comment from Showboat
Excellent essay and a very thought-provoking one at that. Here you have a choice, several choices, actually. You hesitate, thinking, wondering what to do, will you be considered 'interferring' by the young girl or will she welcome your kind intentions? And the opportunity disappears.
I've been there, too.
Great job, thanks for sharing,
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Excellent essay and a very thought-provoking one at that. Here you have a choice, several choices, actually. You hesitate, thinking, wondering what to do, will you be considered 'interferring' by the young girl or will she welcome your kind intentions? And the opportunity disappears.
I've been there, too.
Great job, thanks for sharing,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Hi, Gayle. You have expressed the dillemma perfectly! I so appreciate your awesome and sensitive review. Thank you very kindly...Bev
Comment from bookishfabler
I like your story and how wellit it written. You do have a gift. I would have slammed on the brakes too. It's just instinct. I don't like oppsums, yet rather than run the bugger over, I would up in a muddy ditch. Cursing, I manages to get my little car out, thought dirty it was unharmed as well as myself. Thanks for sharing
hugs book
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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I like your story and how wellit it written. You do have a gift. I would have slammed on the brakes too. It's just instinct. I don't like oppsums, yet rather than run the bugger over, I would up in a muddy ditch. Cursing, I manages to get my little car out, thought dirty it was unharmed as well as myself. Thanks for sharing
hugs book
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Hi, book. Thanks for your great review of my essay. The hardest ones to miss hitting are the squirrels. Unfortunately, a few of them have fallen victim to my car. But a mother goose and her babies - around here I'd end up being on the front page of the paper and receiving hate mail LOL. Thanks again for your time and gracious review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from ksherwoodrn
Words written with such a truthful message in them. We all need to listen to the Spirit when it guides us. I know how hard this is to do, but yet the rewards are great...kathleen
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Words written with such a truthful message in them. We all need to listen to the Spirit when it guides us. I know how hard this is to do, but yet the rewards are great...kathleen
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Hi, kathleen. It is easy to downplay those whispered words of the conscience...but the lessons always come back around, at least until we get them. Thanks for sharing your interest and understanding. I much appreciate it! Bev
Comment from WilliamDeen
Good work and a very enjoyable touching read. Thanks for sharing. A good story with a message and well written. Make me think twice and I'll be sure to remember it incase my opportunity comes.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Good work and a very enjoyable touching read. Thanks for sharing. A good story with a message and well written. Make me think twice and I'll be sure to remember it incase my opportunity comes.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Thanks so much! I really appreciate you taking time out, billy, to read my essay. Always good to hear from a fellow fiction writer!! Take care, Bev
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You can't fix everyone's problems, Bev. Say a prayer for a good outcome, and move on to the next crisis. You did avoid the geese, after all (and I would've stopped, too!). "The First Five Pages" is an excellent book, by the way. You can't beat his writing or his marketing advice. A tightly constructed essay. Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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You can't fix everyone's problems, Bev. Say a prayer for a good outcome, and move on to the next crisis. You did avoid the geese, after all (and I would've stopped, too!). "The First Five Pages" is an excellent book, by the way. You can't beat his writing or his marketing advice. A tightly constructed essay. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Great advice, Nancy. Thank you so much for reading my essay and sending along your insights. Your generosity both in time and interest is really inspiring. I agree, the book is one of the best I've ever read on writing! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I found this very moving indeed. You have written from the soul, and it shows in this piece. It is wonderfully told, and held my interest throughout. And I would have braked for the geese too. Bless you.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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I found this very moving indeed. You have written from the soul, and it shows in this piece. It is wonderfully told, and held my interest throughout. And I would have braked for the geese too. Bless you.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Hi, Avril. You are so very generous and kind. Thank you for taking time out to read my essay and share your insights. You have surely touched my heart. Blessings to you as well! Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bev? i love what you have written and we al have to think about the events that bring us to a place we nevere expected to go. i hope the girl and her baby are all right. i love carter and wish he could come to work on my house sometime.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, bev? i love what you have written and we al have to think about the events that bring us to a place we nevere expected to go. i hope the girl and her baby are all right. i love carter and wish he could come to work on my house sometime.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Hi, sweet. Thanks so much for your great review. I really appreciate your time and interest, my friend. I have to share a story about Carter: his parents were my Shaklee distributors, so I met Carter when he was just a young guy. His father is one of the handomest people I've ever seen in my life, but Carter takes after his Hispanic mother, more, who is really beautiful, too. So, he has good genes all around. Plus, they are some of the nicest people you'd ever want to meet. I've never run into him, but I do know where he lives when he visits LOL. Take care...Bev
