Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Intermission"Case Studies of Hauntings
61 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent interplay between the characters to establish their positions within the team, and to reveal characteristic details of ghost hunting that the average person is unaware of.
Oooo, this ghost is a bad one.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
  |
Excellent interplay between the characters to establish their positions within the team, and to reveal characteristic details of ghost hunting that the average person is unaware of.
Oooo, this ghost is a bad one.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
-
I'm glad the Team members are starting to feel fleshed out. It's a bit weird to try to keep four protagonists going--not something I even thought about before I started. Hope you're enjoying the weekend and this lovely summer's day.
Thanks so much for the great review, Debi.
:) Bev
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good read. We can feel the heightened emotions,and the irritability of the two men as they discuss the case and also the hint of a romance between Mia and Mike. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
|
A good read. We can feel the heightened emotions,and the irritability of the two men as they discuss the case and also the hint of a romance between Mia and Mike. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
-
Thanks so much Pearl. I'm glad you picked up on the romantic feelings Mike and Mia have for each other. Really appreciate the grand review!
:) Bev
Comment from rtobaygo
Hello!
I may be a bit rusty... Spent a lot of time reading the likes of Koontz, Cricton, King and Clancy and I find myself reviewing a post of that did not falter.
Your characters' dialogue and action were realistic and helped move the plot forward.
I didn't find any general spags.
Two questions:
(done." Emma answered in her usual straightforward manner.)
would it be an easier read of the period was a comma?
("Now, I'm) ready to go." Would it present a continued action?
Enjoyed the read!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Nucky Thompson
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
 |
Hello!
I may be a bit rusty... Spent a lot of time reading the likes of Koontz, Cricton, King and Clancy and I find myself reviewing a post of that did not falter.
Your characters' dialogue and action were realistic and helped move the plot forward.
I didn't find any general spags.
Two questions:
(done." Emma answered in her usual straightforward manner.)
would it be an easier read of the period was a comma?
("Now, I'm) ready to go." Would it present a continued action?
Enjoyed the read!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Nucky Thompson
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
-
Hi Ray, good to hear from you! I think your suggestions are good ones, and appreciate your sharp editorial eye. How are things going with you? Got something cooking that we'll be seeing sometime soon? Hope so.
Anyway, thanks for taking time to read and send along your gracious and generous review. Appreciate it very much!
Bev
P.S. I see you're a Boardwalk Empire Fan... my husband watched all the episodes as they slowly killed off all the important characters LoL. Sort of like Game of Thrones where you can't afford to get attached to any character.
-
Hi, Bev:
I had been out of commission since April 5th due to TB. That being said, my wife and I are huge fans of the BWE and we are sorry to see it end. Looking forward to watching new episodes the Game of Thrones.
As always, thoroughly enjoyed your post.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
-
Game of Thrones should be a very interesting when it finally returns. I was personally quite happy to see Daddy Dearest get his LoL.
:) Bev
Comment from DALLAS01
Your first paragraph runneth over with so many well honed descriptive details that I felt wrapped the kitchens warm embrace..
This is the chapter I have been waiting for; the one that gives me a peek into the various personalities emerging, and how they relate to one another.
Luke slammed his elbows into the table and leaned forward to respond. Emma, feeling the open hostility that enveloped all of them, intervened. "Guys, listen to yourselves. I think Charles Bellingham's malevolence is affecting all of us. Here we are at each others' throats, and we haven't even really started the investigation."
Tensions building. Great way to emphasize raw nerves.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
|
Your first paragraph runneth over with so many well honed descriptive details that I felt wrapped the kitchens warm embrace..
This is the chapter I have been waiting for; the one that gives me a peek into the various personalities emerging, and how they relate to one another.
Luke slammed his elbows into the table and leaned forward to respond. Emma, feeling the open hostility that enveloped all of them, intervened. "Guys, listen to yourselves. I think Charles Bellingham's malevolence is affecting all of us. Here we are at each others' throats, and we haven't even really started the investigation."
Tensions building. Great way to emphasize raw nerves.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
-
Thanks so very much, Dallas. The first version of this chapter was quite a bit different. I know that this isn't the same kind of novel as Along the Jericho Road, and a few have mentioned that. But it's been very interesting to see how I can go back to a novel I wrote three years ago and see how many ways it can be improved. I'm so glad you found this new and improved edition a good read! Thanks for the generous and encouraging review, which helps me know I'm on the right track.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Zue65
I am not really into paranormal encounters genre, but your story is quite fresh and made credible with the way your characters get information supported by research. This team the team is no nonsense group trying to solve the puzzle surrounding their friend Mia. I like the flow of events and the conflicts introduced with subtle hints unfolding slowly for the readers. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
|
I am not really into paranormal encounters genre, but your story is quite fresh and made credible with the way your characters get information supported by research. This team the team is no nonsense group trying to solve the puzzle surrounding their friend Mia. I like the flow of events and the conflicts introduced with subtle hints unfolding slowly for the readers. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
-
Thank YOU for this wonderful review, Nassus. I appreciate your perspective, especially because you don't normally like this genre. And I also appreciate that you get that I'm trying to develop my characters before throwing them into action. All-in-all, a most encouraging review.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
This story is wonderful, the characters each sparkle with their own special personalities. You have done such a great write showing a normalcy in their lives, aside from the time when solving paranormal activity. This shines through with Mike's concern for Mia, Luke's conversation with Bernadette and the bantering between friends as they dined. As always, your ending leaves the reader hungry for more. Excellent write!
Bye, my friend!
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
|
Hi, Bev.
This story is wonderful, the characters each sparkle with their own special personalities. You have done such a great write showing a normalcy in their lives, aside from the time when solving paranormal activity. This shines through with Mike's concern for Mia, Luke's conversation with Bernadette and the bantering between friends as they dined. As always, your ending leaves the reader hungry for more. Excellent write!
Bye, my friend!
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
-
Hi, Rosalyne. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this chapter. My characters are a bit old-fashioned, but I am too, so I guess that's how I have to write them :). Thanks so much for your really wonderful insights, generosity and encouragement. Hugs, Bev
-
Hi, Bev.
Your characters are wonderful! You give each of them such life and personalities. There is nothing old-fashioned about you or your characters! They are fun, unique and each one an individual. This is great writing!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
-
Your encouragement is so appreciated, Rosalyne. Thank you for being so helpful and kind. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Connie C
Seems like I'm always commenting on your excellent use of dialogue, Bev, but you really do have a knack for getting it just right. Makes me feel like I'm right there with the characters engaged in their discussion. What more can I say? You are a captivating writer. Great job, as always!
Connie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
|
Seems like I'm always commenting on your excellent use of dialogue, Bev, but you really do have a knack for getting it just right. Makes me feel like I'm right there with the characters engaged in their discussion. What more can I say? You are a captivating writer. Great job, as always!
Connie
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
-
Hi, Connie. I do so appreciate this very gracious review. Thank you for taking time out of your busy schedule to read my chapter. And I couldn't be happier to read that you enjoyed the dialogue. It's something that I work hard to get right, so you've made my day!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, aside from making me hungry (which is NOT a good thing, since I'm at Micky D's and I already had supper - LOL), you've managed again to make me feel like I'm part of the story. Geez Louise, you sure do come up with gab that sounds so real! descriptions too! (I make a mean clam chowder, btw. LOL)
Outstanding, but what else is new? :)
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
|
Well, aside from making me hungry (which is NOT a good thing, since I'm at Micky D's and I already had supper - LOL), you've managed again to make me feel like I'm part of the story. Geez Louise, you sure do come up with gab that sounds so real! descriptions too! (I make a mean clam chowder, btw. LOL)
Outstanding, but what else is new? :)
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
-
Hi, Dawn. Thanks so much for the compliment on the dialogue. I am never sure if it's going to sound realistic, so it's nice to know this chapter passed the test LoL. I haven't found the perfect recipe for clam chowder myself, which is okay because I enjoy eating it in restaurants. In fact, just had a great sample here in Chicago (visiting) yesterday.
Thanks so much, Dawn, for your support and generosity.
Hugs, Bev
-
LOL - I'll send the my recipe but there's just one problem - fresh clams I dug myself on PEI was the best one. :)
-
That's what I'm not able to get around here - fresh clams. But, I'd still love to see your recipe. Thanks, Dawn! xxx Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hello my dear Bev, honestly how do you come up with the superb dialogue that leaves us begging for the next chapter. Again I am a poet but am bemused how ghastly and real you make the setting...it as if we were all there and never want to come back, wow!
BRAVO...7 STARS...1000 HUGS AND BRING ME MORE!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
|
Hello my dear Bev, honestly how do you come up with the superb dialogue that leaves us begging for the next chapter. Again I am a poet but am bemused how ghastly and real you make the setting...it as if we were all there and never want to come back, wow!
BRAVO...7 STARS...1000 HUGS AND BRING ME MORE!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
-
Thanks so much, Christopher. I'm humbled by your awesomely generous review. It's so nice to know that you're enjoying the paranormal adventures -- comforting too, my friend! XXX Bev
-
you are science my love. intoxicating of mind. xxxooo
-
How cool, Christopher. I love physics, so this is a great compliment. xxoo Bev
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for another interesting chapter that continues to set the foundation with a heavier concrete base. Your story can go in so many directions that it has me dangling like a bobble-head. Great chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
|
Thanks for another interesting chapter that continues to set the foundation with a heavier concrete base. Your story can go in so many directions that it has me dangling like a bobble-head. Great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
-
Thanks, Ric. I like your visual very much! Thanks for reading and for your encouragement. :) Bev
