Graveyard Kisses
A Dark Club Poem50 total reviews
Comment from sasil
I enjoyed your gothic tale of true love and devotion. Grim and haunting, this dedicated narrator/lover goes to great lengths to see and assuage his mate. Well-crafted lines and excellent choice of art and presentation--commendable.
Best wishes in future dark works--S.
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I enjoyed your gothic tale of true love and devotion. Grim and haunting, this dedicated narrator/lover goes to great lengths to see and assuage his mate. Well-crafted lines and excellent choice of art and presentation--commendable.
Best wishes in future dark works--S.
Comment Written 30-May-2011
Comment from God's Writer
A very well written poem. It is sad but shows a depth that comes from first hand experience. Your flow is wonderful. The mind pictures are exquisite and show the depth of knowledge of the English language. I will recommend this poem.
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A very well written poem. It is sad but shows a depth that comes from first hand experience. Your flow is wonderful. The mind pictures are exquisite and show the depth of knowledge of the English language. I will recommend this poem.
Comment Written 20-May-2011
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, dkldmcches, i enjoyed reading this poem about the graveyard kisses, you and dark club were meant to be together, your black and red backgrounds making your poems even more eerie.
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this is very well written, dkldmcches, i enjoyed reading this poem about the graveyard kisses, you and dark club were meant to be together, your black and red backgrounds making your poems even more eerie.
Comment Written 20-May-2011
Comment from Galadriel's Lyric
I love your darkness, dark lord. You capture the true essence of pain, regret, fear, hate and love. I enjoyed this tale and can see in my mind's eye someone going to a scary graveyard in the misty gloom, to be with a lost love.
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I love your darkness, dark lord. You capture the true essence of pain, regret, fear, hate and love. I enjoyed this tale and can see in my mind's eye someone going to a scary graveyard in the misty gloom, to be with a lost love.
Comment Written 20-May-2011
Comment from dtimes3
Ah, nothing like a little necrophilia to get the night started. I assume the "lover yearning for a touch" is a ghost. If not it is a strange location for fulfilling dreams no matter how deviant. Thanks for sharing.
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Ah, nothing like a little necrophilia to get the night started. I assume the "lover yearning for a touch" is a ghost. If not it is a strange location for fulfilling dreams no matter how deviant. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2011
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Dklrdmcches:
I think you are exactly right -- this certainly
qualifies for the Dark Club Poem group that our
friend, Gungalo, created. Your four non-rhyming
quatrains gave me chills -- and this, just before
I am to go to sleep. I'll let you know if I have
nightmares as a result.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
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Dklrdmcches:
I think you are exactly right -- this certainly
qualifies for the Dark Club Poem group that our
friend, Gungalo, created. Your four non-rhyming
quatrains gave me chills -- and this, just before
I am to go to sleep. I'll let you know if I have
nightmares as a result.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 19-May-2011
Comment from pickthorn
A ghoulish sort of poem as are most poems whose setting is in the cemetery. A great image you project here. I liked this one a lot. Good work.
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A ghoulish sort of poem as are most poems whose setting is in the cemetery. A great image you project here. I liked this one a lot. Good work.
Comment Written 19-May-2011
Comment from Espresso momma
Spooky indeed. I can't think of one darker at the moment. Glad you succeeded at that. You portray such dark sided poetry, how do you keep in that mindset? Thanks for the read.
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Spooky indeed. I can't think of one darker at the moment. Glad you succeeded at that. You portray such dark sided poetry, how do you keep in that mindset? Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 19-May-2011
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is your usual atmospheric write - there are a couple of little things that I would question:
Your tense changes from line 1 to line 2 - why?
'this clique' that they call life' - did you really mean 'clique'? 'cliche' might make more sense...
'and yet, the pain' - the comma could go.
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This is your usual atmospheric write - there are a couple of little things that I would question:
Your tense changes from line 1 to line 2 - why?
'this clique' that they call life' - did you really mean 'clique'? 'cliche' might make more sense...
'and yet, the pain' - the comma could go.
Comment Written 19-May-2011
Comment from DALLAS01
Your imagery and the story that is wrapped around it was fascinating. For me, the following line is what set the pace for the rest of the poem:Snapping twigs could be heard in the distance.
I think it is because it is an audio perk that enhances the visual aspect of lurking in the cemetery. The art work is eerie and the bold red font made me think of blood splattered on the night.
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Your imagery and the story that is wrapped around it was fascinating. For me, the following line is what set the pace for the rest of the poem:Snapping twigs could be heard in the distance.
I think it is because it is an audio perk that enhances the visual aspect of lurking in the cemetery. The art work is eerie and the bold red font made me think of blood splattered on the night.
Comment Written 19-May-2011
