Strangest World
Sensible non-sense17 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I like the flow in your lines and the strong rhyming couplets
and love the whimsy of the visuals you so fancifully create in your opening stanzas
In the second half you issue a most impassioned cautionary warning. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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I like the flow in your lines and the strong rhyming couplets
and love the whimsy of the visuals you so fancifully create in your opening stanzas
In the second half you issue a most impassioned cautionary warning. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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Thank you for this nice review of my silly poem. I guess I couldn't decide to be serious or funny. Maybe both or neither.
Comment from Mithma
This is a very meaningful poem. I particularly like the way your choosing colours to portray the message you deliver and again using the same notations to deliver the advise at the end. "start every day that has begun
before the colors start to run."
I noticed when reading your poems that you (too) criticize the modern world...?
reply by the author on 02-May-2011
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This is a very meaningful poem. I particularly like the way your choosing colours to portray the message you deliver and again using the same notations to deliver the advise at the end. "start every day that has begun
before the colors start to run."
I noticed when reading your poems that you (too) criticize the modern world...?
Comment Written 02-May-2011
reply by the author on 02-May-2011
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Thank you for your positive review. However, I would like to note that I do not criticize the modern world. I accept it as a transition to something better or at least to suggest a better world where truth is worshiped over all deception. Evolution is the process of gradual change over time. Revolution is sudden change and disruption. To criticize is not necessarily to find fault. One can use constructive criticism to suggest change or to justify the status.
Comment from pearlecat
WOW! What a creative mind you have. I love this!
Especially the last stanza. Tight on rhyme and rhythm with an awesome message at the end. Great job! Pearl
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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WOW! What a creative mind you have. I love this!
Especially the last stanza. Tight on rhyme and rhythm with an awesome message at the end. Great job! Pearl
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Wow! I am overwhelmed. Thank you for the very wonderful review.
Comment from missy98writer
fastdigits,
your poem is well written and rich in imagery. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. Your rhymes are great and descriptive writing is very good. I especially enjoyed the lines: "To fight the trend I would defend below the beauty that I send -- all things I should not mention are outside God's intention. I make no jest of nature's best eschew the beasts and all the rest build up the shore and long before
erosion takes its toll." Your poem is excellent. Thanks for sharing and have a lovely weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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fastdigits,
your poem is well written and rich in imagery. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. Your rhymes are great and descriptive writing is very good. I especially enjoyed the lines: "To fight the trend I would defend below the beauty that I send -- all things I should not mention are outside God's intention. I make no jest of nature's best eschew the beasts and all the rest build up the shore and long before
erosion takes its toll." Your poem is excellent. Thanks for sharing and have a lovely weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the nice review.
Comment from angelwings2011
What a wonderful expression
of fancy. The rhyme and meter
carried me through quite an
intense vision. Bravo.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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What a wonderful expression
of fancy. The rhyme and meter
carried me through quite an
intense vision. Bravo.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Your comments certainly resonate with my intent. Thank you for the review.
Comment from honeytree
Yes the art work is excellent.I feel these words are very clever. The change would be different, but I like our earth as it is.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Yes the art work is excellent.I feel these words are very clever. The change would be different, but I like our earth as it is.
Honey tree
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Honeytree, I failed in my attempt to present the world as it is. I was distracted by what we believe it to be.
Comment from Giselav
With all the pollution and the contamination in the world today your images of blue days and green night may become reality. I like the poem because it brings to mind the environmental issues that are so critical in our lives today. the meter is consistent and the rhyme pattern is good but the content is what gives it its strength. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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With all the pollution and the contamination in the world today your images of blue days and green night may become reality. I like the poem because it brings to mind the environmental issues that are so critical in our lives today. the meter is consistent and the rhyme pattern is good but the content is what gives it its strength. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from animatqua
I don't know about nonsense here. My granddaughter has Asperger's Syndrome, a spectrum of Autism. This is the kind of topsy turvy way she expresses things.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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I don't know about nonsense here. My granddaughter has Asperger's Syndrome, a spectrum of Autism. This is the kind of topsy turvy way she expresses things.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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I know about Asperger's. I am not afflicted. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Ms. Gray
I don't feel I got all of the meaning in this poem but that's Ok with me. I understood most of it and certainly enjoyed the clever rhymes. I like the last couple of lines about getting on with the day and the colors running. Your poem has a sense of joy and urgency. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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I don't feel I got all of the meaning in this poem but that's Ok with me. I understood most of it and certainly enjoyed the clever rhymes. I like the last couple of lines about getting on with the day and the colors running. Your poem has a sense of joy and urgency. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Thank you. I did not intend everyone to get every nuance. That is the essence of art.
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the imagery that you have imparted with your words. Nice stanza structure and verse. Nice rhyme and meter. The art work was a good choice it enhances your poem...Don
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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I like the imagery that you have imparted with your words. Nice stanza structure and verse. Nice rhyme and meter. The art work was a good choice it enhances your poem...Don
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Thank you. I chose the art after constructing the poem. It hit me as soon as I saw it and was a perfect adjunct to the first line.