Crafted Within
It is in all of us.27 total reviews
Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
Born of free will, entering a precious life,
A child opens their mind for the first time.
A gift from God that will change the world for good,
Already contaminated with the will of the Dark One.
you have spoken well of how easily we are infiltrated by the thoughts, wishes, ideas and beliefs of others.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Born of free will, entering a precious life,
A child opens their mind for the first time.
A gift from God that will change the world for good,
Already contaminated with the will of the Dark One.
you have spoken well of how easily we are infiltrated by the thoughts, wishes, ideas and beliefs of others.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from Gunjann
Oh my God!! it really scared me as I switched into your poem. but I enjoyed reading it.
very creative art work matching with the thoughts ...
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Oh my God!! it really scared me as I switched into your poem. but I enjoyed reading it.
very creative art work matching with the thoughts ...
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for stopping by...dark lord
Comment from Akarva
A beautiful poem about the birth of a child when he enters into the world of good and evil and he learns the good ways by surviving over the evil with the influence of God. A meaningful poem with depth.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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A beautiful poem about the birth of a child when he enters into the world of good and evil and he learns the good ways by surviving over the evil with the influence of God. A meaningful poem with depth.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from Deejharrington
Humans since the beginning of time have created beings to either worship or hate. I agree, the devil was created by man to take the blame for all our bad choices and horrid decisions. I like this one. It makes the reader think.
deb
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Humans since the beginning of time have created beings to either worship or hate. I agree, the devil was created by man to take the blame for all our bad choices and horrid decisions. I like this one. It makes the reader think.
deb
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from adewpearl
gift from God - good use of alliteration
what a horrific thought, that the God of the Underworld lives within a child in the womb
Mentioned almost everyday - every day- as one word everyday is an adjective, like in everyday clothing
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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gift from God - good use of alliteration
what a horrific thought, that the God of the Underworld lives within a child in the womb
Mentioned almost everyday - every day- as one word everyday is an adjective, like in everyday clothing
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, I do appreciate you stopping by and reviewing my work...dark lord
Comment from marcii
Your poem says to me if their is a good side to every human their is a bad side and whats wrong with that.
Like if you believe in a god the you have to believe in a devil.
A poem with deeper meaning then one first thinks.
Marcii
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Your poem says to me if their is a good side to every human their is a bad side and whats wrong with that.
Like if you believe in a god the you have to believe in a devil.
A poem with deeper meaning then one first thinks.
Marcii
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from L.lora
Definitely a dark poem, one
that many will not favor the
subject matter. However, for
this reader your work was more
like prose than poetry--just my
opinion. Your words were well chosen
to state what you wanted and they did
paint a definite image on the mind.
Thank you for sharing. Lora
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Definitely a dark poem, one
that many will not favor the
subject matter. However, for
this reader your work was more
like prose than poetry--just my
opinion. Your words were well chosen
to state what you wanted and they did
paint a definite image on the mind.
Thank you for sharing. Lora
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from WilliamDeen
Nice work. I see a comparison of good and evil. The pov suggest they are equal for which I would agree. Ditto with the belief we are born with both good and evil. It's the choices we make that decide which we follow. Oh, and be careful. There are those that will manipulate your beliefs for their benefit. Good Job.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Nice work. I see a comparison of good and evil. The pov suggest they are equal for which I would agree. Ditto with the belief we are born with both good and evil. It's the choices we make that decide which we follow. Oh, and be careful. There are those that will manipulate your beliefs for their benefit. Good Job.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with godo form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the battle of good versus evil and the choices that we all have, free will to accept God or the devil. full of imagery
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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this is very well written with godo form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the battle of good versus evil and the choices that we all have, free will to accept God or the devil. full of imagery
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from Dom G Robles
I love this poem. Except for a minor error in grammar, this poem is excellent. The second line says, "A child opens their mind for the first time..." Otherwise, the theme is great! Is this what they call a poetic license...? "Excuse my dust."
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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I love this poem. Except for a minor error in grammar, this poem is excellent. The second line says, "A child opens their mind for the first time..." Otherwise, the theme is great! Is this what they call a poetic license...? "Excuse my dust."
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
