God Granted Him His Wish
His Last Walk88 total reviews
Comment from zeddy
This poem is exceptional. Raw, thought provoking, and beutifully written,I'm sure your Dad is walking through an even better harvest field now. Bless you, for conveying something so personal. Loved it.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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This poem is exceptional. Raw, thought provoking, and beutifully written,I'm sure your Dad is walking through an even better harvest field now. Bless you, for conveying something so personal. Loved it.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much Zeddy for your wonderful rating and review, I sincerely appreciate it. You're right, I truly believe that he's in a much better place now. Me and Pop are really glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again my friend and may God bless you and your family. Also, welcome to this site, if I can help you in anyway, please let me know. Bill
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--good rhyme and rhythmic flow.
--crisp, descriptive imagery; the visualization is vivid.
--picture fits in quite well with the topic.
--sad, yet so beautifully narrated.
--wonderfully narrated; not verbose or abstractly vague; message was clear and made sense.
--very good piece; sentimental.
--no apparent / glaring grammar issues.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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--good rhyme and rhythmic flow.
--crisp, descriptive imagery; the visualization is vivid.
--picture fits in quite well with the topic.
--sad, yet so beautifully narrated.
--wonderfully narrated; not verbose or abstractly vague; message was clear and made sense.
--very good piece; sentimental.
--no apparent / glaring grammar issues.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thank you my friend for that great rating, I sincerely appreciate it. I also would like to welcome you to this site.
It's a great place to learn so many different things about
writing. Good luck to you and thanks again. Have a great weekend. My pen name is Cedar and my real name is Bill.
Comment from adewpearl
Your quatrains have good abcb rhyme.
where the corn use to grow - used to
What a poignant wish for this man to have and what a dramatic story. This is an excellent story poem with a moving plot and main character and which sounds good when read aloud. Brooke
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Your quatrains have good abcb rhyme.
where the corn use to grow - used to
What a poignant wish for this man to have and what a dramatic story. This is an excellent story poem with a moving plot and main character and which sounds good when read aloud. Brooke
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thanks Brooke for your review and suggestion. I appreciate your
thoughts. Have a great day. Bill
Comment from moyramouse
A lovely but sad story in a poem. The tie the farmer had with his land, which had been his whole life was so strong. He would know every inch of it, every hedgerow, every pasture, every animal - all indelibly part of him. The realization that he can no longer do everything that he used to, his husbandry grows weak and it grieves him to see it. I loved his last walk and his memories. He got his wish. Your dad may have died in a hospital room, but I'm certain his spirit is there walking the fields with you. xmouse
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A lovely but sad story in a poem. The tie the farmer had with his land, which had been his whole life was so strong. He would know every inch of it, every hedgerow, every pasture, every animal - all indelibly part of him. The realization that he can no longer do everything that he used to, his husbandry grows weak and it grieves him to see it. I loved his last walk and his memories. He got his wish. Your dad may have died in a hospital room, but I'm certain his spirit is there walking the fields with you. xmouse
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for your gracious review. I sincerely appreciate it. Have a great weekend my friend. Bill
Comment from shebecd
This was a very touching story and great tribute to your father. Though it filled my eyes with tears, I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't find a specific rhythm pattern, regardless, it is a beautiful, touching tribute. Very nice, shebecd
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This was a very touching story and great tribute to your father. Though it filled my eyes with tears, I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't find a specific rhythm pattern, regardless, it is a beautiful, touching tribute. Very nice, shebecd
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your review. It's good to shed a few tears occasionally, if they are happy tears. As far as a rhythm pattern, this one came straight from my heart and everything else simply didn't matter. Have a great weekend my friend. Bill
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That's exactly how I saw it too, Bill. I personally have a hard time when someone critiques my expression of feeling, I'm not sure I can ever get used too it! I loved yours, I actually printed it to show my friend. shebecd
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
Very well written and poignant. I felt as though
I were there with him. It was a very touching piece
And speaks volumes. A pleasure to read and review.
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Very well written and poignant. I felt as though
I were there with him. It was a very touching piece
And speaks volumes. A pleasure to read and review.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thanks Joe for your heart warming review. I sincerely appreciate it. Have a great weekend. Bill
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My pleasure! And you as well!
Comment from Majicman
This is a very moving poem that touched my heart. My father in law, as with my mother in law, both died at home in their eighties, as they wished to do.
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This is a very moving poem that touched my heart. My father in law, as with my mother in law, both died at home in their eighties, as they wished to do.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your review. It's wonderful that they both died at home, instead of some hospital or nursing home. Thanks my friend. Bill
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'God Granted Him His Wish' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet captured the old farmer's final hours with skill and empathy. It was a privilege to read and review a poem of this quality.
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'God Granted Him His Wish' is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. This talented poet captured the old farmer's final hours with skill and empathy. It was a privilege to read and review a poem of this quality.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much Duchess for your gracious review. I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Take care and have a great weekend. Bill
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You'e welcome Bill. Take care and have a great weekend yourself.
the Duchess
Comment from Scarlettdreams
I suppose there are worse ways to go. It seems as though the man in your story lived a full life and was ready to move on. Well expressed. Bravo
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I suppose there are worse ways to go. It seems as though the man in your story lived a full life and was ready to move on. Well expressed. Bravo
Comment Written 14-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your review. Have a great weekend. Bill
Comment from BothePo8
This is a lovely story. It is creative, clear and focused. The rhyme is also very good! However, the meter ( rhythm ) is inconsistent throughout the poem and hampers the smooth presentation of the poem. If you would care to even out the rough edges, I would be happy to reconsider my rating....Best wishes, Bo
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This is a lovely story. It is creative, clear and focused. The rhyme is also very good! However, the meter ( rhythm ) is inconsistent throughout the poem and hampers the smooth presentation of the poem. If you would care to even out the rough edges, I would be happy to reconsider my rating....Best wishes, Bo
Comment Written 14-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2011
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Thanks anyway Bo. This poem has received (so far) 79 reviews.
9 were exceptional ratings, 68 were excellent ratings, and the last 2 were good ratings. It amazes me how differently people look at things. Thanks again my friend for your review and have a great day. Bill
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No problem, Bill. We all have to choose what is most important to us, ratings or writing good poetry. Have you ever looked at the quality of some of the poems that get 6's? Much is of very poor quality. On this site you can buy ratings by offering viewers a lot of points. Some people actually spend real money to buy points they can then offer to others to view their poems. Naturally people are not going to kill the goose that lays the golden egg. ..The decision is of course yours. I choose to write good poetry..Best wishes, Bo
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It have discovered in the last few years that most of the members on this site, write poetry only as a past time. The ranking and ratings do not mean that much. These are things that come automatically, according to the amount of activity you produce. The more poems you post and the more reviews you write, your rankings continue to climb, regardless, whether they are good or exceptional. If you post 2 poems per day and write about 20 reviews per day, over a short period of time, your rankings in both categories will be in the Top 10. Also, it really doesn't matter about the quality of your writings, it's based solely on the amount of activity you have. This past year, I saw several writers move up to the top 10 rankings and in my opinion, it was strictly from the amount of posted work and nothing to do with the quality of that work. Anyway, I guess we could ramble on and on about different things pertaining to this site. It was good talking to you Bo. I have a brother we call Bo (short for Bobby). Have a great weekend. Bill
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I think you hit the nail on the head, Bill......Not much more I could add to what you have said...I hope you have a great weekend, too! Bo
