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In Dreams

Waiting for a better day...

27 total reviews 
Comment from Daylok
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Wow this is cool. I like this and I think you did good with the twist. This flows well and the Picture is great!! -Daylok

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
    Hi Day! Thank you!! I liked that pix too! So weird. Yet pretty too. I sure appreciate your enthusiasm my friend! ") Susan
reply by Daylok on 05-Oct-2010
    Anytime!!
Comment from Carrie Smith
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Suse, You know I don't know enough about Tanka poetry to say a word. I do know that I like the poem. Remember, that light of morning! Nice writing. Let me know if you get an answer...LOL...Susan

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
    Hi Susan! Thank you, I will be up all night too, these creepy neighbors just got their dog to yapping real loud. Love, Susan
Comment from Alf Garnett jnr.
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Hi Susan. Well. In Dreams! I do remember a song; by the
late-great, Roy Orbison. But, how spiritual? And quite
soul-searching? Rather brief, but SUPER. I was actually
a choir boy! And, sang solo on several occasions! Then'
my damn singing voice broke, and i was promntly' booted
out! Sheer sacrilege! So, no Junior Showtime stardom, for
me!!!! But, lovely poem, Susan. Take care and God bless
you. Love from Darryl. Aka/(Alf).

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    Well, that's a shame Darryl. That reminds me of Barney Fife, (Andy Griffith show) WHO loved to sing, but could not, and was unwanted in the choir! A hilarious episode! Thank you so, for a great review!! I love hearing from you! Susan
reply by Alf Garnett jnr. on 03-Oct-2010
    You're very very, welcome. Have a
    very peaceful evening. Love from
    Darryl. PS. I will be reviewing a
    lot more. But, I won't be writing
    any more scripts. I want to concentrate on my POEMS! So, goodbye' scripts?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    ") ?? Try to do both ?? YOu can! I love your talent D!! Thanks, and you have a great evening too...Luv, Susan
Comment from fluffnstuff
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Nice one and i see you got a blue ribbon to match. It really deserves a six but i am fresh out. Fancy vocabulary wordsyou put forth. Intelligen one you are.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    Hi Dianne! Thanks!! This was a fun one to try, you could do this too! I appreciate your reviews Di, it's fun to hear from you, always! Susan
Comment from E.P. Thomas
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Susan,

What a cool tanka. I used to write these things in college and never cd get one to sound right. Great job. It's the weirdiest thing. I almost chose this photo to illustrate one of my pieces not more than 30 minutes ago. Great minds think alike at time.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    Hi G! It's okay to use the same pix! lol. It is a neat one! I love looking thru the art, but then before I know it, 3 hours are gone! Thank you for this great review!! Susan
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Susan,

What an interesting tanka poem you have composed.
How did you come up with this idea? I read it
several times. You have beautiful alliteration
in the first and last lines and you leave us with
a nice rhyme in the end.

This is a very intrigueing entry,

Linda

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    Hi Sweet! Thank you! I really don't know Linda, this was a fun one, but I have been doing them wrong all along, so I read the notes by AlvinEthington, who said they should sort of change midstride? I don't know. Thanks, this review is great!! HUGS! Susan
reply by AnnaLinda on 03-Oct-2010
    Is it about ghosts?

    I just read Alvin's notes - he said the pivot can take place in the 3rd line - which yours does.

    I am no expert - this does look like a winner to me - I mean that!
    Besides - the judges like you:)

    Linda
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    ") ? The judges? I havn't won a thing in forever! ") Did you know tho, one of my poems was nominated for poem of the month? I was shocked. I rarely get over 15 reviews for anything. Bless your heart, tho, it's nice to see you have confidence in me! HUGS! Susan
reply by AnnaLinda on 03-Oct-2010
    Yes, I sent you a congrats, remember? I also voted for your poem. I think you had another poem
    selected for that before, didn't you?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    Oh dear, I don't remember. Linda, I have had these problems remembering things. SO very sorry. I am going back to the doc soon. They are doing tests. Thank you my friend. Geezz..."( Susan
Comment from Ted T
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Hi Susan :)

Excellent work here. I'm out of "sixers" or you'd get one.

The picture enhances your verse quite well. It's haunting effects works.

I don't know if your did the last two lines right or not, but the piece is good.

Ted

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Hey there! thank you!! I will gladly say this is a six from you Ted, thank you so much! This was a fun one, a different thing to try! It's great to hear from you too! Susan
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
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Susan,
I'm not going to comment about whether it is right or wrong as a tanka because I'm not an expert about poetry forms, but as a poem, I liked it.
Love the image that is soooooo cool.
Love the sounds.
Flows well.
I like the rhymes.
I like the title.
And I like the last line, I think the best.
Good luck in the contest.
love,
katie

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    ") Thank you Katie!! Wow. I'm real happy you like this! It's a fun thing to try, and yes, that pix is so neat!! So real looking! I'm tickled you like it! Love you too my friend! Susan
reply by Kathryn Varuzza on 02-Oct-2010
    Susan, you're welcome.
    love,
    katie
Comment from Lady Jane
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Very nice tanka, realist... It think the "turn" works here and the change from night to day comes out smoothly, without abruptness. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Hi Cherie!! Thank you very much! I am happy you liked this, I wasn't so sure it was right? Thanks again! Susan
Comment from jeana
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I enjoyed your poem and I believe you have conveyed the twist well. The passages are very descriptive and it has been a pleasure to read your creative thoughts. I hope you are well I know it has been a while miss talking to you.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    JEANA!! How are you??? I have missed you too, your book was a hit, I gave it to my brother for Christmas, and he loves it. Thank you! I have had a poem and one story published lately, so, these things really are encouraging and fun! I hope you are doing well too! AND thank you for reading this poem for me!! HUGS! Susan