Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Dance to the Beat --by JAMES"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
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Comment from MyYiaYia
It seems there are always dangers lying in wait in Alaska. I know, same as here, but a different kind. You can't reason with these ones. Poor dogs. It was fascinating. No SPAG. Debbie :0)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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It seems there are always dangers lying in wait in Alaska. I know, same as here, but a different kind. You can't reason with these ones. Poor dogs. It was fascinating. No SPAG. Debbie :0)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Debbie,thanks for your comments. It is so good to hear from you. Marie
Comment from Allezw2
Lady Alaskastory,
It is always interesting to read a well told tale of a subject I have little knowledge or expertise.
A friend stationed there, took his Cushman motor scooter along a portion of the AlCan highway, ignoring all the warnings.
He learned the hard way that his scooter, with about 35mph top speed could only do about 2/3s of that maximum on the frost-heaved gravel road when he was chased by a moose. Fortunately the critter didn't do more than chase him for a few hundred yards, but he learned his lesson well.
I have seen tourists in Yellowstone walk right up to a cow and her calf grazing in a small marsh.
Fantasist
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Lady Alaskastory,
It is always interesting to read a well told tale of a subject I have little knowledge or expertise.
A friend stationed there, took his Cushman motor scooter along a portion of the AlCan highway, ignoring all the warnings.
He learned the hard way that his scooter, with about 35mph top speed could only do about 2/3s of that maximum on the frost-heaved gravel road when he was chased by a moose. Fortunately the critter didn't do more than chase him for a few hundred yards, but he learned his lesson well.
I have seen tourists in Yellowstone walk right up to a cow and her calf grazing in a small marsh.
Fantasist
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Moose aren't a hundred percent predictable. Thanks so much for your comments and review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from irishauthorme
Very tight qriting, and you have a lot of tension going there, with the friends at odds, and the big race looming in the distance. Your descritive phrases are very good. You set the scene for us, and oput us right there. Your years in Alaska are paying off!
irish
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2010
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Very tight qriting, and you have a lot of tension going there, with the friends at odds, and the big race looming in the distance. Your descritive phrases are very good. You set the scene for us, and oput us right there. Your years in Alaska are paying off!
irish
Comment Written 28-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Mr. Irish. I appreciate your time and flattering comments. Hope to end this with the next chapter! lol Marie
Comment from Tellis
Yikes, those dogs are pretty lucky to be alive. I enjoyed reading theis wonderful and well written piece and I hope to read more of theis story real soon.
Tellis
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2010
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Yikes, those dogs are pretty lucky to be alive. I enjoyed reading theis wonderful and well written piece and I hope to read more of theis story real soon.
Tellis
Comment Written 28-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2010
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Thanks for your comments, Tellis. I'm hoping to do a wrap on this one with the next post. Marie
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
It's good to be reading this again. Great chapter. Good interplay between Brook and James.
"How bad is it[,] James?["]
Roberta
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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It's good to be reading this again. Great chapter. Good interplay between Brook and James.
"How bad is it[,] James?["]
Roberta
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Roberta, you are a wonderful finder of my oversights. Thanks for seeing that missing comma. I appreciate your comments and am glad you took time to review. Marie
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Thanks, Marie, for your first name. Alaskastory is awfully long to write, but I didn't know what else to call you.
Comment from bd shutterspeed
Wow, I am totally honored, This is a great story , and I must know what happened to Blackie and Sprig!? You must be so proud of Brook and James! Great story, I'm with Suzie and Walter, I do hope they win a great race!. Deserving they are!. Fairbanks I love! we go up every summer the views are excellent and the photography can just be beyond , Wanted to thank you for using this Big Guy! I am also worried for my two Dogs every winter, The moose are always here. Thanks again, ! Have a Great Day! Bev (shutterspeed)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Wow, I am totally honored, This is a great story , and I must know what happened to Blackie and Sprig!? You must be so proud of Brook and James! Great story, I'm with Suzie and Walter, I do hope they win a great race!. Deserving they are!. Fairbanks I love! we go up every summer the views are excellent and the photography can just be beyond , Wanted to thank you for using this Big Guy! I am also worried for my two Dogs every winter, The moose are always here. Thanks again, ! Have a Great Day! Bev (shutterspeed)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Bev, thanks for your comments. I was thrilled to find an appropriate Moose picture for this chapter. We spend most of the year in Fairbanks every year --I lived there since 1959. Maybe I'll see you sometime --that would be fun. Thanks a million! Marie Reid
Comment from MissMerri
Miss A, you tell wonderful tales of terrific intensity and suspense. The characters are so true to life and utterly believable in words and actions. We, your readers, have to love them and care about them and want them to succeed, whether in love or dog racing. The scenes are vivid and beautiful. Your last Your last two paragraphs were a perfect example of beautiful writing.
As sometimes happens, I see a few minor things that you might want to look at. My suggestions are in ( ) next to typo or question.
(I say)With the same whiney sound his dogs are making, (I say) "I'm going to the barn to check out my dogs." (I'd move I say to right before quote, then you wouldn't have to change case on "with" and it would flow better anyway.)
Blatantly, I lifted a haughty chin to him. (I would leave off blatantly, and change lifted to lift, to stay in present tense. Blatantly does not add anything to an already telling sentence. The lift of the haughty chin says it all.)
His dad, Fred, waves at me as he helps harness(es)(don't need the es) and hold back anxious dogs.
can't respond quick (ly) enough.
Nice work, as usual. I am really into this YA story! What does that say about me? Never mind! (Young at heart would be a good answer.:p )
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Miss A, you tell wonderful tales of terrific intensity and suspense. The characters are so true to life and utterly believable in words and actions. We, your readers, have to love them and care about them and want them to succeed, whether in love or dog racing. The scenes are vivid and beautiful. Your last Your last two paragraphs were a perfect example of beautiful writing.
As sometimes happens, I see a few minor things that you might want to look at. My suggestions are in ( ) next to typo or question.
(I say)With the same whiney sound his dogs are making, (I say) "I'm going to the barn to check out my dogs." (I'd move I say to right before quote, then you wouldn't have to change case on "with" and it would flow better anyway.)
Blatantly, I lifted a haughty chin to him. (I would leave off blatantly, and change lifted to lift, to stay in present tense. Blatantly does not add anything to an already telling sentence. The lift of the haughty chin says it all.)
His dad, Fred, waves at me as he helps harness(es)(don't need the es) and hold back anxious dogs.
can't respond quick (ly) enough.
Nice work, as usual. I am really into this YA story! What does that say about me? Never mind! (Young at heart would be a good answer.:p )
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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The 'I say' business is something I altered at the last minute -- Okay I'll change it back as it was, just like you suggest. I also appeciate the other suggestions and agree 100% with you!! Thanks a million!
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I'm glad you agreed, and I suspected that was what happened because the W was capitalized as if it had once started the sentence. Looking forward to nect installment.
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Too bad FS wouldn't let me give you a reviewer nomination. I don't think one a month is all that fair. You are the only one with any real suggestions. Gracias!
Comment from dportwood
Alaskastory,
Thank you for posting this interesting story and the information of dog sled racing as the race starts. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Alaskastory,
Thank you for posting this interesting story and the information of dog sled racing as the race starts. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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I appreciate your review. Thanks, Duane.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Interesting switch when the dog race turned dangerous because of the moose and her babies. I was also impressed by Shemya's warning!
Good job!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Interesting switch when the dog race turned dangerous because of the moose and her babies. I was also impressed by Shemya's warning!
Good job!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from kleck140
You tell a great story. I wish I knew more about Alaska.
I will continue to look for more episodes to teach me that. I re-read it and found it just as amusing as the first time. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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You tell a great story. I wish I knew more about Alaska.
I will continue to look for more episodes to teach me that. I re-read it and found it just as amusing as the first time. Thanks for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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I appreciate the time and interest you gave this chapter. Thanks so much for the review.
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Thanks for your quick response
