Dear Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Dear Chains"Addressing different themes in a form of a letter
26 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Dear Child: Remember I am the One who "brought them out of darkness and the shadow of death, and broke their chains into pieces."
Love,
God
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Dear Child: Remember I am the One who "brought them out of darkness and the shadow of death, and broke their chains into pieces."
Love,
God
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Twomoon
Pupa, this was just an incedible poem..loved each line, you certainly have captured a powerful image here...I find this one of your best that I have read..your thought and imagery flowed smooth and put a novel into a poem..loved it wish I had a 7 for this one...(or a little 6) smile..have a great day, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Pupa, this was just an incedible poem..loved each line, you certainly have captured a powerful image here...I find this one of your best that I have read..your thought and imagery flowed smooth and put a novel into a poem..loved it wish I had a 7 for this one...(or a little 6) smile..have a great day, much love twomoon
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thanks Twomoon, your comments are like a whole stary sky.
Love
Pupa
Comment from nora arjuna
hi pupa, a great reflective poem. so true in many ways where we tend to chain ourselves. i belief i have it with me too - chained to some habits i wish to get rid off. thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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hi pupa, a great reflective poem. so true in many ways where we tend to chain ourselves. i belief i have it with me too - chained to some habits i wish to get rid off. thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thanks arjuna, so glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from RKagan
The heaviest chains are the ones that we put on ourselves. This is well written. I have read your work before and I always enjoy it. In your author notes it says you are sixty??? from your picture you look so much younger.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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The heaviest chains are the ones that we put on ourselves. This is well written. I have read your work before and I always enjoy it. In your author notes it says you are sixty??? from your picture you look so much younger.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thanks for enjoying my work, this means so much to me, RK. Yes I am sixty, a grandma of 3. This picture is 3 years old, just when I joined FS.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Brian Abell
Wow this was a very great poem. I rally enjoyed reading it! We do, do it to ourselves, but this poem will definately make me think a little more before I cause my own self trouble.
-Abell
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Wow this was a very great poem. I rally enjoyed reading it! We do, do it to ourselves, but this poem will definately make me think a little more before I cause my own self trouble.
-Abell
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Glad my poem made you think about it, we often need someone else to say something, just to remind us. Thanks for a great reveiw, Brian.
Love
Pupa
Comment from LadyCosgrove
This is something I have done just this week. I have begun to cast off my chains and run barefoot with my willpower to regain my control tower. It feels fantastic! This piece echoes everything I feel and have felt.
I wanted so much to give you a six but it says I don't have one. So I give a five and all my best wishes. :o)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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This is something I have done just this week. I have begun to cast off my chains and run barefoot with my willpower to regain my control tower. It feels fantastic! This piece echoes everything I feel and have felt.
I wanted so much to give you a six but it says I don't have one. So I give a five and all my best wishes. :o)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Your encouraging words weigh more than any stars, thank you so much for your kind review and comments.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Charlene0513
To PUPA,
A short poem od derision and dispair.
Making atonement for the frustations and forboding ways which has created a void in your life.
Nice flow and truth to many who are trying to start again.
Charlene
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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To PUPA,
A short poem od derision and dispair.
Making atonement for the frustations and forboding ways which has created a void in your life.
Nice flow and truth to many who are trying to start again.
Charlene
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Charlene, thanks so much.
Love
Pupa
Comment from missy98writer
PUPA,
your poem is brilliantly written. It's so true we imprison ourselves with the imaginary chains we put on ourselves. Lovely art work and presentation. I love the way your wrote your poem like a letter. I especially enjoyed the lines:
Oh, how I wish I could get rid of you all,
take off your loads of deep blues.
as I do with agonizing shoes.
If I caused you to be, my strength of mind
will manage to craft a brand new key,
to unlock and set my feet free
Cleaver use of alliteration in your poem. Marvelous rhyming couplets: sensation/cration, chains/pains, blues/sohoes, key/free, and tower/willpower. Great use of metaphor with the phrase 'proclaim my control tower.' I awarding your poem five stars of excellence. Keep up the fabulous poem writing.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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PUPA,
your poem is brilliantly written. It's so true we imprison ourselves with the imaginary chains we put on ourselves. Lovely art work and presentation. I love the way your wrote your poem like a letter. I especially enjoyed the lines:
Oh, how I wish I could get rid of you all,
take off your loads of deep blues.
as I do with agonizing shoes.
If I caused you to be, my strength of mind
will manage to craft a brand new key,
to unlock and set my feet free
Cleaver use of alliteration in your poem. Marvelous rhyming couplets: sensation/cration, chains/pains, blues/sohoes, key/free, and tower/willpower. Great use of metaphor with the phrase 'proclaim my control tower.' I awarding your poem five stars of excellence. Keep up the fabulous poem writing.
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Melissa, thank you so much, glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from patwannabe
Pupa, I read you clearly.
I'm afraid a good many of our chains is of our own doing. One of my recent posts shows it all too well, but we continue to use and abuse.
This is excellent and certainly doesn't need any revision. Great thoughts. pat
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Pupa, I read you clearly.
I'm afraid a good many of our chains is of our own doing. One of my recent posts shows it all too well, but we continue to use and abuse.
This is excellent and certainly doesn't need any revision. Great thoughts. pat
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much Pat, glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from jlsavell
Pupa, this writing is quite excellent. It portrays the wisdom and acceptance and mental fortitude of the narrator. She recognizes the oppression of negative emotions and thoughts and actions as chains shackling her soul, her spirit. A self actualization, whereas the narrator has a pivotal moment of clarity and gains her perspective, her strength and her will power to break free, by recognizing a truth that is most often not pleasant to face, but determined to change it as an untruth..well done..I love it..jlsavell
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Pupa, this writing is quite excellent. It portrays the wisdom and acceptance and mental fortitude of the narrator. She recognizes the oppression of negative emotions and thoughts and actions as chains shackling her soul, her spirit. A self actualization, whereas the narrator has a pivotal moment of clarity and gains her perspective, her strength and her will power to break free, by recognizing a truth that is most often not pleasant to face, but determined to change it as an untruth..well done..I love it..jlsavell
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much jlsavell, I am glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
