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Comment from Charlene0513
To shelley kaye,
A wonderful thought to live by the whim of a flying horse, to help you escape the unworldly things in life.
Yu brought a essence of freedom and expectations o'er the deep blue horizon.
Charlene
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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To shelley kaye,
A wonderful thought to live by the whim of a flying horse, to help you escape the unworldly things in life.
Yu brought a essence of freedom and expectations o'er the deep blue horizon.
Charlene
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you charlene :)
Comment from lola29
Your entry was a very lovely read. Who wouldn't want to ride those stallions through the sky? You have a great imagination and the ability to mesmerize your readers.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2010
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Your entry was a very lovely read. Who wouldn't want to ride those stallions through the sky? You have a great imagination and the ability to mesmerize your readers.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2010
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cool! thanx lola! :)
Comment from jack silver
well written and thought out. I am actually one of Luna's fans. I loved her poem involving the moon. Your work is like hers. Filled with life and colour. best wishes in the contest.
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Jack
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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well written and thought out. I am actually one of Luna's fans. I loved her poem involving the moon. Your work is like hers. Filled with life and colour. best wishes in the contest.
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Jack
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you jack :)
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no probs
Comment from missy98writer
shelley kaye
fanciful poem you've written for the contest Luna and The Dream Master contest. Excellent imagery, great narrative and very descriptive writing. Awesome art work and visual presentation. Good use of alliteration and use of metaphors. I especially liked the lines:
they ride stallions
through the sky
three horses
side by side
flying free
black, brown, and white
in the midnight blue
way up high
through the stars
and past the moon
to the planets
they will visit soon
a red one
an orange one
a blue one too
even one with rings
Magical story you told in poetic form. Impressive writing. Your free verse is a fabulous entry in the writing prompt. Good luck in the voting booth. .Melissa!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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shelley kaye
fanciful poem you've written for the contest Luna and The Dream Master contest. Excellent imagery, great narrative and very descriptive writing. Awesome art work and visual presentation. Good use of alliteration and use of metaphors. I especially liked the lines:
they ride stallions
through the sky
three horses
side by side
flying free
black, brown, and white
in the midnight blue
way up high
through the stars
and past the moon
to the planets
they will visit soon
a red one
an orange one
a blue one too
even one with rings
Magical story you told in poetic form. Impressive writing. Your free verse is a fabulous entry in the writing prompt. Good luck in the voting booth. .Melissa!
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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thank you melissa :)
Comment from Bellringer
A lovely magical ride through fantasy. The construction of the poem and its short lines gave me a sense of flight. Well done. I wish you the best in this contest. Regards.
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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A lovely magical ride through fantasy. The construction of the poem and its short lines gave me a sense of flight. Well done. I wish you the best in this contest. Regards.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you bell :)
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Brilliantly, masterfully thrown into the universe without regard to words, but accompanied by a beatiful pegasus and defining beackgrounf colour.
Just a lovely romp inside our need for magic and mystery.
Great job
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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Brilliantly, masterfully thrown into the universe without regard to words, but accompanied by a beatiful pegasus and defining beackgrounf colour.
Just a lovely romp inside our need for magic and mystery.
Great job
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you echo :)
Comment from rivki1111
Hello, a lot of effort has gone into this poem and the author notes. I enjoyed the imagery and the poem flows well.
I have no sugggestion for improving your poem, and best of luck in the competition. This is a strong entry, cheers, rebekah
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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Hello, a lot of effort has gone into this poem and the author notes. I enjoyed the imagery and the poem flows well.
I have no sugggestion for improving your poem, and best of luck in the competition. This is a strong entry, cheers, rebekah
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you rivki :)
Comment from wierdgrace
excellent and I know you know it, this is perfect for this contet, and the notes in the authors notes tells so much, I am glad I did not enter, only contest I entered was nano, the Motel, havent had much luck, great job, hope you win.
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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excellent and I know you know it, this is perfect for this contet, and the notes in the authors notes tells so much, I am glad I did not enter, only contest I entered was nano, the Motel, havent had much luck, great job, hope you win.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 31-May-2010
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thank you grace :)
Comment from fictionwriter
You've pegged me right on the nose. My horse is white, so I can picture Shay and I running around the skies with Luna and the dream master. Thanks for entering and taking me on an adventure. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-May-2010
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You've pegged me right on the nose. My horse is white, so I can picture Shay and I running around the skies with Luna and the dream master. Thanks for entering and taking me on an adventure. Great job.
Comment Written 19-May-2010
reply by the author on 19-May-2010
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thanx! glad you enjoyed it! :)
Comment from Teri7
This is truly a six star write my friend. I love all the art work you used on this. You used very good descriptive wording. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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This is truly a six star write my friend. I love all the art work you used on this. You used very good descriptive wording. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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COOL! thank you so much teri!!!! :-)
