Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Heavenly Peace"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
3 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this was a great poem/ thank you for sharing one of your morning prayers with us. i wish you luck in the contest and best of luck with future endeavors on fanstory
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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this was a great poem/ thank you for sharing one of your morning prayers with us. i wish you luck in the contest and best of luck with future endeavors on fanstory
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you Sweetwoodjax for your honest and helpful review, really appreciate it. Merry Christmas
Comment from Colin Douglas
A good statement of your faith, along with an openness to receive God's love and assistance.
To really impress, try to come up with images and metaphors of your own, rather than the cliche "Giving peace within my soul,"
If you kept up this quality throughout a longer poem, I might be inclined to give it a five, but its hard to impress me with such a short poem, especially after I've been reading so many of them, lately.
Detail:
"Heavenly peace tat makes me whole." I think you meant "that"
Thank you for sharing. Your thoughts are beautiful.
Colin
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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A good statement of your faith, along with an openness to receive God's love and assistance.
To really impress, try to come up with images and metaphors of your own, rather than the cliche "Giving peace within my soul,"
If you kept up this quality throughout a longer poem, I might be inclined to give it a five, but its hard to impress me with such a short poem, especially after I've been reading so many of them, lately.
Detail:
"Heavenly peace tat makes me whole." I think you meant "that"
Thank you for sharing. Your thoughts are beautiful.
Colin
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you Colin Douglas for your honest review to help me improve my poetry. It is really helpful. Really appreciate it.
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Anytime
Comment from MizKat
SARAHICE - What a delightfully touching, inspirationl poem. They're my favorite kind. I enjoyed it all the way through. I found one tiny mistake though. Heavenly peace tat (THAT) makes me whole. I still will give you five stars because I'm sure you'll correct it. Kat
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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SARAHICE - What a delightfully touching, inspirationl poem. They're my favorite kind. I enjoyed it all the way through. I found one tiny mistake though. Heavenly peace tat (THAT) makes me whole. I still will give you five stars because I'm sure you'll correct it. Kat
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you MizKat for your honest review encouraging me to keep going. It was really helpful. Really appreciate it.
