A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Descent Into Hell"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from laurelp
Too bad you can't just dump your family in another country. I think you would be able to handle your mother if it wasn't for them. I found no errors and as always I liked the reading.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Too bad you can't just dump your family in another country. I think you would be able to handle your mother if it wasn't for them. I found no errors and as always I liked the reading.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Funny you should say that....stay tuned, you may get your wish. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kiwirose
Interesting story about you and your mom's relationship. I understand this situation is difficult time with your mom. I love to read this story.
Thank you for sharing with us :)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Interesting story about you and your mom's relationship. I understand this situation is difficult time with your mom. I love to read this story.
Thank you for sharing with us :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review, especially reading it with no background. I sincerely appreciate your kind words.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
I feel so angry on your behalf, Valerie. It must have been totally infuriating having to live through all this. I'm so glad you survived.
Only noticed one small typo in the body of the text:
"....phone number so I can speak wit her..." (with)
One in the title too...Decent into Hell....(Descent)
Hope this helps
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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I feel so angry on your behalf, Valerie. It must have been totally infuriating having to live through all this. I'm so glad you survived.
Only noticed one small typo in the body of the text:
"....phone number so I can speak wit her..." (with)
One in the title too...Decent into Hell....(Descent)
Hope this helps
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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I have to laugh...spell check does not work with notes or titles....leave it to me to miss it. Thank you for your kind review, I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from words
Well done.
The story that unfolds is often heart breaking.
The little cruelties are the hardest to take...not giving woman who is going blind a lamp....
The story is in the details.
Good job!
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Well done.
The story that unfolds is often heart breaking.
The little cruelties are the hardest to take...not giving woman who is going blind a lamp....
The story is in the details.
Good job!
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. Yes, it was a difficult time and your are so right...the story IS in the details.
Comment from Avid Aspirant
this is a very sad story, however as a piece of literature it would do better to contain a bit more descriptive language, it felt rushed and could be expended into a more evocative piece. all the best.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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this is a very sad story, however as a piece of literature it would do better to contain a bit more descriptive language, it felt rushed and could be expended into a more evocative piece. all the best.
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I will go over the chapter again and see what I can do.
