A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Someting's Terribly Wrong"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from medicnate
Fantastic, riveting, spectacular. The story gets more and more involved. You suck your reader in and keep them glued to the pages. I think this is fantastic writing. My goodness.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2009
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Fantastic, riveting, spectacular. The story gets more and more involved. You suck your reader in and keep them glued to the pages. I think this is fantastic writing. My goodness.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 05-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2009
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Thanks. This section was hard to write because it brought back so may sad memories.
Comment from Firefly54
Can't give you a rating for this one for some reason. Yes, I've been through the dementia stage with two of four parents/in-laws, although both were taken by something else before it became too hopeless for them
Rated ok now :-)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Can't give you a rating for this one for some reason. Yes, I've been through the dementia stage with two of four parents/in-laws, although both were taken by something else before it became too hopeless for them
Rated ok now :-)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Don't know why but this happened once before. Contact the site administators and they will fix it. Dementia is a terrifying illness. For the patient and those close to them.
Comment from jodeecee
I knew the drill all too well, surgery to remove the lump, appointment with the oncologist,/,/and more chemotherapy.
We'll have a girls' night out. It'll be fun." (maybe just a girl's night, no out, because you're staying home?)
I told her my cancer had come back /ad//and/ Mom and I were looking for a destraction. //distraction./
when trying to make a point thinking pointing out others agreed with her wold//would/ make her more credible.
But deep inside my heart/,/ I hid the fact that I was devastated.
"Talking is good," Dr S said.
is it Dr. L / or Dr. S ?
When I asked her what he said/,/ she said, "I'm hungry, feed me."
I called Teresa. I told her I was very worried about /m/om. I /cut:I/ told her I wanted to call a truce for /m/om's sake. Teresa ignored my concerns and said I was overreacting.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I knew the drill all too well, surgery to remove the lump, appointment with the oncologist,/,/and more chemotherapy.
We'll have a girls' night out. It'll be fun." (maybe just a girl's night, no out, because you're staying home?)
I told her my cancer had come back /ad//and/ Mom and I were looking for a destraction. //distraction./
when trying to make a point thinking pointing out others agreed with her wold//would/ make her more credible.
But deep inside my heart/,/ I hid the fact that I was devastated.
"Talking is good," Dr S said.
is it Dr. L / or Dr. S ?
When I asked her what he said/,/ she said, "I'm hungry, feed me."
I called Teresa. I told her I was very worried about /m/om. I /cut:I/ told her I wanted to call a truce for /m/om's sake. Teresa ignored my concerns and said I was overreacting.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Thanks for noticing ... Dr. S is my physician and Dr. L is my psychiatrist ... I'll go back over the chapter and make the corrections. Again, thank you fo your kind review, high rating, and welcome help.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Another captivating chapter, Smurphy. The reaction of Denise is so terribly insulting. I cannot even imagine it! The storyline is clear and well composed. A few nits:
I told her my cancer had come back [ad] Mom and I were looking for a [destraction]. (Should be "and" and "distraction."
Also:
Mom and I had come a long way since Ari's death. We had really begun to talk. For the first time when I asked "why" she tried answer.
(Inster the word "to" -- she tried TO answer.)
Otherwise, a terrific story. Great work!
Sincerely, Seraph
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Another captivating chapter, Smurphy. The reaction of Denise is so terribly insulting. I cannot even imagine it! The storyline is clear and well composed. A few nits:
I told her my cancer had come back [ad] Mom and I were looking for a [destraction]. (Should be "and" and "distraction."
Also:
Mom and I had come a long way since Ari's death. We had really begun to talk. For the first time when I asked "why" she tried answer.
(Inster the word "to" -- she tried TO answer.)
Otherwise, a terrific story. Great work!
Sincerely, Seraph
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I know I sound like a broken record but thank you for your kind review and diligence in finding the spags. I really appreciate it.
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You are so very welcome!
Comment from penelope
This is how I see it, confronted with the truth, your mother's world collapsed. So very sad. What a life you've had. It certainly will make a dramatic film. I'm convinced of that. The best part of the story is the healing. You're so brave to tackle them all head on. I'm just sorry you had to suffer so much. The writing itself is riveting.
Finally, I told Mom she could no longer discuss my health (with) anyone.
Penelope
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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This is how I see it, confronted with the truth, your mother's world collapsed. So very sad. What a life you've had. It certainly will make a dramatic film. I'm convinced of that. The best part of the story is the healing. You're so brave to tackle them all head on. I'm just sorry you had to suffer so much. The writing itself is riveting.
Finally, I told Mom she could no longer discuss my health (with) anyone.
Penelope
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Your understanding of the situation is refreshing. So often I hear that I "should have left", or "why didn' I just walk away" but the point is I was still suffering from both cancer and severe psyhological poblems. Thank you for your kind and understanding review. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from laurelp
To say you are a survivor is to minimize your life. I can't imagine all the things you have gone through in your life and now this problem with your mother. You are one amazing dame. And I say that with true sincerity.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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To say you are a survivor is to minimize your life. I can't imagine all the things you have gone through in your life and now this problem with your mother. You are one amazing dame. And I say that with true sincerity.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind and encouragaing words. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You know, your sisters are truly horrible in this chapter. At least you're sorting stuff out with Mum, but your sisters' behaviour is inexcusable. I truly feel for you, watching your Mum begin to lose her mind like that. At least she had you.
I found no spag or typos in this chapter. Great writing.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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You know, your sisters are truly horrible in this chapter. At least you're sorting stuff out with Mum, but your sisters' behaviour is inexcusable. I truly feel for you, watching your Mum begin to lose her mind like that. At least she had you.
I found no spag or typos in this chapter. Great writing.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thak you for your kind reiew. Yes my sisteres treated mom terribly. Thank you for your high rating.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
I have to be honest,this part really got to me you turning a
civil tongue for the sake of your mom after all you had been through and your sisters continued to show a most abrasive
attitude.It appears to me they are the ones in great need of help,because they can not deal with there emotions to well,as you out shined them hands down,and that could very well be a
culprit as well.You where forced to learn to live alone,and I know that feeling all to well also.Again,job extremely well done.Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I have to be honest,this part really got to me you turning a
civil tongue for the sake of your mom after all you had been through and your sisters continued to show a most abrasive
attitude.It appears to me they are the ones in great need of help,because they can not deal with there emotions to well,as you out shined them hands down,and that could very well be a
culprit as well.You where forced to learn to live alone,and I know that feeling all to well also.Again,job extremely well done.Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thank you. You have a unique ability to read between the lines. I sincerely appreciate your opinion.
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You are so very welcome,Smurphgirl.Cranial Thinker
Comment from mzstylo
I came across this chapter at random. It sounds like a very interesting story, and I am intrigued to go back and read the previous chapters. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I came across this chapter at random. It sounds like a very interesting story, and I am intrigued to go back and read the previous chapters. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review and interest in my story. I look forward to receiving more reviews from you.
