A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Cops and Robbers"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from WRITER1
This is a good chapter, but I have to admit I would have been scared to death to go back to those people. Really I would have. Good job!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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This is a good chapter, but I have to admit I would have been scared to death to go back to those people. Really I would have. Good job!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thanks. I was beyond being scared. I sincerely appreciate your kind words and high rating.
Comment from prodigal
She was incapable of being anything but an observer when it came to my life. - This sentence moved me. My father was the same way when I was growing up.
This is another well written chapter. I don't blame you for wanting to shut them down. Well done. Your narrative is very easy to follow. -Sam
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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She was incapable of being anything but an observer when it came to my life. - This sentence moved me. My father was the same way when I was growing up.
This is another well written chapter. I don't blame you for wanting to shut them down. Well done. Your narrative is very easy to follow. -Sam
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from BethShelby
You have a very interesting story and I have reviewed it from time to time in the last month but I've missed some of it. I need to go back and read all of it.
"You are the crazy one in the family."
"I laughed.
"That is correct and you should know better..."
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I think you need a line space after "in the family" because Julie is talking and it seems attached to her line.)
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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You have a very interesting story and I have reviewed it from time to time in the last month but I've missed some of it. I need to go back and read all of it.
"You are the crazy one in the family."
"I laughed.
"That is correct and you should know better..."
(
I think you need a line space after "in the family" because Julie is talking and it seems attached to her line.)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind and high rating. I will look at that sentense again.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting chapter. I liked seeing the concern she had for her mother, even if there was still tension. The matter-of-fact tone is great. Especially when dealing with the escort job.
Barbara
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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This is a very interesting chapter. I liked seeing the concern she had for her mother, even if there was still tension. The matter-of-fact tone is great. Especially when dealing with the escort job.
Barbara
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words and high rating. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from penelope
What a good writer you are, Smurphgirl. I can tell this really will be a very popular book. There's so much going on. I had to laugh at your intolerance with the tenants and how you got everything sorted out in such a short time. Delighted you got off the drugs, and disappointed you turned back to the Escort Service. Getting arrested was a stroke of luck, as I see it.
that she fed Jerry, three meals a day and gave him money for cigarettes. (no comma needed here)
Penelope
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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What a good writer you are, Smurphgirl. I can tell this really will be a very popular book. There's so much going on. I had to laugh at your intolerance with the tenants and how you got everything sorted out in such a short time. Delighted you got off the drugs, and disappointed you turned back to the Escort Service. Getting arrested was a stroke of luck, as I see it.
that she fed Jerry, three meals a day and gave him money for cigarettes. (no comma needed here)
Penelope
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review and assistance with the comas...I hate comas! Again, thank you.
